Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Chapter One, Part 2"It was their world long before our existence...
23 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
You are writing about a lot of things I can easily relate to. I used to run an assistance program for the homeless and went into shelters to acquire people to attend the two-week long seminars I was giving on Life Skills...after which I paid them $200 each as a stipend provided by a grant. I also like that you mention stray cats. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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You are writing about a lot of things I can easily relate to. I used to run an assistance program for the homeless and went into shelters to acquire people to attend the two-week long seminars I was giving on Life Skills...after which I paid them $200 each as a stipend provided by a grant. I also like that you mention stray cats. :-)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Wow -- see? My crazy fantasy gives us all sorts of ways to look back and smile! ;) :)
Comment from Debra White
Hey Yvette,
Now you've got me thinking! Perhaps these other customers in the diner are seen only to Maggie.....? Is that why Mr Bun-man hot-footed it? Is that why Lars pays them no attention? Are they ghosts?
Much enjoyed!
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Hey Yvette,
Now you've got me thinking! Perhaps these other customers in the diner are seen only to Maggie.....? Is that why Mr Bun-man hot-footed it? Is that why Lars pays them no attention? Are they ghosts?
Much enjoyed!
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 05-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2020
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Hey, hey!! There's someone who is truly paying attention to what she's reading....wink, wink! ;) :) :) Yvette
Comment from RShipp
"Big Ed in the corner - he had so many tattoos that it was difficult to tell the actual color of his skin -" ... "The over-sized biker nodded his head at her and went back to reading his book..." An interesting character.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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"Big Ed in the corner - he had so many tattoos that it was difficult to tell the actual color of his skin -" ... "The over-sized biker nodded his head at her and went back to reading his book..." An interesting character.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Definitely... the whole little 'crew' there is, yeah? :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
The story is getting exciting. I'm thinking this diner is in a bad part of the neighborhood being Eduardo walks Maggie home each night. I want to hear what happened to Maggie after her dad left her at the doorstep. She went home where Addy lives?
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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The story is getting exciting. I'm thinking this diner is in a bad part of the neighborhood being Eduardo walks Maggie home each night. I want to hear what happened to Maggie after her dad left her at the doorstep. She went home where Addy lives?
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 13-Mar-2020
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Am enjoying all your comments in real-time, Rosemary!! ;) :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Lovely unfolding story. New characters are introduce d gradually and naturally. The story is unfolding bit by bit in an orderly manner. I'm hooked nicely.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Lovely unfolding story. New characters are introduce d gradually and naturally. The story is unfolding bit by bit in an orderly manner. I'm hooked nicely.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Hope you're hanging on for the ride! ;)
Comment from Stephen Force
Again nicely done, character development is smooth and natural, you seem to be setting the hooks (the questions to be answered) very skillfully. Mr. Man-buns behavior, what happened to the case worker and assistant... easy reading.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Again nicely done, character development is smooth and natural, you seem to be setting the hooks (the questions to be answered) very skillfully. Mr. Man-buns behavior, what happened to the case worker and assistant... easy reading.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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This was a interesting chapter that, after the prologue, starts to show hints of things ... :) ;) Thanx for your review and glad you're not having any trouble following... there's a large character list there! ;) :) Thanx for following Maggie and the gang! ;) ;)
Comment from Adri7enne
Moving along well. I like your characters so far....the biker who walks her home, the alcoholic bar owner, Man-buns. Easy to follow and quite entertaining. Well done, Y.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Moving along well. I like your characters so far....the biker who walks her home, the alcoholic bar owner, Man-buns. Easy to follow and quite entertaining. Well done, Y.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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So glad you're enjoying! :) ;) Thanx for checking in on Maggie...gonna try to get the rest of this chapter posted tomorrow after school and dinner and...well, you get the picture! :) ;) ...stay tuned! :) :) Yvette
Comment from poetwatch
Good story Yvette. You have my attention. I wonder why you would label someone Mr. Man-bun? :) The one that arouses my interest is Mr. Ed. If only because he walks her home at night, and when asked, "Said it was his job." A protector for Marguerite. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Good story Yvette. You have my attention. I wonder why you would label someone Mr. Man-bun? :) The one that arouses my interest is Mr. Ed. If only because he walks her home at night, and when asked, "Said it was his job." A protector for Marguerite. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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That's how many of my students 'talk about' or refer to people, Jose: "mister man-bun" over there or "miss can't live without my phone" or "mister skinny jeans" or, well, you get the picture - LOL! :) :) And, I have to tell you: you are definitely asking the right questions....it is a 'fantasy' book .... :) :) ;) Take care! :) Yvette
Comment from Ms. Snyder
Yvette,
This is getting good - what is man-bun up to? Well, I will be tuning in to find out. Also congratulations on all the recent wins - man - you should get the most decorated winner of Fan Story - you really have a knack for writing the winning entries for a lot of the contests. I wish I could figure out a formula to win just one. It would be nice especially this month - but I don't think I have what it takes - I think that I am far out penned here. I do enjoy trying though. This story has got my wheels spinning. I am one of those sort-of psychic people. But not in the (I am going to tell you your fortune kind of way) or (that I see my own future.) It is more like a perceptual reality that when I watch or read - I see ahead in a few paces. You have got me completely stumped as to what this storm is going to drag into Maggie and Addy's life. How sinister it will be. How uplifting it might be. Whether this is a love story disguised as a whodunnit? I don't know - I am so perplexed. Whether Addy's real parent is going to surface. I can go in all different directions. But I like that you have me spinning! So thank you. I love this type of reading. Cheers, Fonda
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Yvette,
This is getting good - what is man-bun up to? Well, I will be tuning in to find out. Also congratulations on all the recent wins - man - you should get the most decorated winner of Fan Story - you really have a knack for writing the winning entries for a lot of the contests. I wish I could figure out a formula to win just one. It would be nice especially this month - but I don't think I have what it takes - I think that I am far out penned here. I do enjoy trying though. This story has got my wheels spinning. I am one of those sort-of psychic people. But not in the (I am going to tell you your fortune kind of way) or (that I see my own future.) It is more like a perceptual reality that when I watch or read - I see ahead in a few paces. You have got me completely stumped as to what this storm is going to drag into Maggie and Addy's life. How sinister it will be. How uplifting it might be. Whether this is a love story disguised as a whodunnit? I don't know - I am so perplexed. Whether Addy's real parent is going to surface. I can go in all different directions. But I like that you have me spinning! So thank you. I love this type of reading. Cheers, Fonda
Comment Written 29-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 29-Jan-2019
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Look at you -- all looking for stuff that may or may not or could be there!! ;) :) I'm so glad you're enjoying, Fonda -- gonna try to get on top of these papers today and post another "chapter" tonight....I actually have quite a bit written already,,,,just have to go back through and re-format and such for posting in the little-bitty bits! :) ;) Thanx so very much for your support and enthusiasm!! :) ;)
Oh, and there is no formula -- I am certainly not a trained or learned poet....just let my 'muse' take my pen -- you know, more often than I can count are the times that the final 'entry' is NOTHING like I set out to write....just gotta let go (if that makes any sense!). :) ;) Take care and have a great week ahead! :) ;) Yvette
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It does and I think I am a little too OCD about my poems to let go - I think that has been my problem, I try to fix them to a grammar standard and think about the reader's perspective too much instead in a lot of instances. I might try in the coming months to really just focus on what makes me happy and what brings me joy. Then maybe I can write something uplifting enough where people might receive the work in a contest that will outshine. I am still trying to get my whole life perspective re-arranged. Maybe that is part of it as well. I am going from adolescence in writing to adulthood. I am looking forward to anything more you have out. You will always have my support and enthusiasm! You have a great week ahead too! Mine has already been extremely busy - so I look forward to some really positive things happening in the next few weeks! Cheers, Fonda
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
This is a good solid continuation as we get to learn more about Maggie now, her feelings and what she's about. Nice sense of place.
All the best
G
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
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Hi there,
This is a good solid continuation as we get to learn more about Maggie now, her feelings and what she's about. Nice sense of place.
All the best
G
Comment Written 28-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
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Thanx for the honest review, G -- I do appreciate your dropping by! :) ;) Take care! :) Yvette
