Renaissance of Enchantment
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Chapter One, Part 1"It was their world long before our existence...
28 total reviews
Comment from Janetsue
Cats are one of my favorite animals (only eclipsed by horses...but just by a tiny bit). I used to have a black cat as well...named Shadow. I like that Maggie has found someone special so that she is not going home to an empty apartment. She sounds like she has a warm heart for kids and animals. :-)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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Cats are one of my favorite animals (only eclipsed by horses...but just by a tiny bit). I used to have a black cat as well...named Shadow. I like that Maggie has found someone special so that she is not going home to an empty apartment. She sounds like she has a warm heart for kids and animals. :-)
Comment Written 24-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2020
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I have a secret: I have 5 black cats (outdoor) and two black kittens (their sitting next to me right now.... NO KIDDING! ;) :)
Comment from Debra White
Hi Yvette :)
I like how you set the scene, both of Maggie's workplace and hers and Addy's home. We're now in realtime and it's current, judging by the technology! (Still wondering what happened in the prologue... did she go back in time somehow or were those boys dressing up in 1800's garb for a production?? It's at the back of my mind...) I love the texts interspersed throughout the piece. They have an easy relationship that seems to work well. She is trusting and he is responsible for his years. Thanks for the author notes with the character info. Who is Twilight?! On to the next bit asap.
Best wishes, Debra :)
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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Hi Yvette :)
I like how you set the scene, both of Maggie's workplace and hers and Addy's home. We're now in realtime and it's current, judging by the technology! (Still wondering what happened in the prologue... did she go back in time somehow or were those boys dressing up in 1800's garb for a production?? It's at the back of my mind...) I love the texts interspersed throughout the piece. They have an easy relationship that seems to work well. She is trusting and he is responsible for his years. Thanks for the author notes with the character info. Who is Twilight?! On to the next bit asap.
Best wishes, Debra :)
Comment Written 02-Oct-2020
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2020
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I'm guessing you found Twilight, yeah? He's here to stay so far as a place in Maggie's life... :) And good to hold onto those questions and look for others to, perhaps, arise... ;) :) Yvette
Comment from RShipp
"Mr. Dejesus looked like he needed to retire yesterday, although he always seemed to have quite a bit of youth hidden in his old eyes." What a great description.
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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"Mr. Dejesus looked like he needed to retire yesterday, although he always seemed to have quite a bit of youth hidden in his old eyes." What a great description.
Comment Written 14-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 15-Mar-2020
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Some very intriguing characters... ;) :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I'll keep reading...I like the name Maggie, too. Bongo must be a huge cat that eats much. I'm understanding that the written black words in italics are Addy/Maggie speaking?
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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I'll keep reading...I like the name Maggie, too. Bongo must be a huge cat that eats much. I'm understanding that the written black words in italics are Addy/Maggie speaking?
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Actually, they're texting, Rosemary... :) :)
Comment from thaities, Rebecca V.
Ah! Just as I thought. This is promising to be a great story in the making. The chapters are not overbearingly long so it is easy reading. Nice font size too.
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Ah! Just as I thought. This is promising to be a great story in the making. The chapters are not overbearingly long so it is easy reading. Nice font size too.
Comment Written 11-Mar-2020
reply by the author on 11-Mar-2020
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Yeah, I'm a fan of the larger font on computers!! ;)
Comment from Sankey
Good chapter again not gonna review all these might move through a bit and review occasionally. Thanks for the explanation on Addison. Looking forward to more of this.
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Good chapter again not gonna review all these might move through a bit and review occasionally. Thanks for the explanation on Addison. Looking forward to more of this.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
reply by the author on 27-Jun-2019
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Understood and thanx! ;) ;)
Comment from Stephen Force
Well written, I see you are going to spoon feed the backstory a teaspoon full at a time. I think I like that. I am concerned about Addison, I know he is super smart but seven and a half years old; texting at that level and conversation skills seem to make him a little older, maybe ten or so... I don't know maybe it's just me. good story though, I am looking forward to the next piece.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Well written, I see you are going to spoon feed the backstory a teaspoon full at a time. I think I like that. I am concerned about Addison, I know he is super smart but seven and a half years old; texting at that level and conversation skills seem to make him a little older, maybe ten or so... I don't know maybe it's just me. good story though, I am looking forward to the next piece.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2019
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Yes! ... spoon feeding works well with fantasies, I find. Addy may seem a little older, but that happens when children see more in life than a 'normal child'... thanx for your observations and thanx again for joining the ride! :);) Yvette
Comment from Adri7enne
Quick and easy to read, which is always nice. Good dialogue. First time I get to read you other than poetry. Your quirky communications shine through. Way to go, Y.
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Quick and easy to read, which is always nice. Good dialogue. First time I get to read you other than poetry. Your quirky communications shine through. Way to go, Y.
Comment Written 30-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 30-Jan-2019
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Oh, Adri7enne, so good to hear from you!! :) ;) And thank you for your wonderful comments, ma'am -- they truly mean a lot! :) ;) I hope all's well with you and thanx for checking in on Maggie! :) :) Take care! :) Yvette :)
Comment from giraffmang
Nice characterisation and set-up here. You can really see the depth of relationship between Maggie & Addie very quickly.
she'd managed to pick-up for the stray - you don't need the hyphen here.
in their run-down building always asked - rundown could be a single word here.
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
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Nice characterisation and set-up here. You can really see the depth of relationship between Maggie & Addie very quickly.
she'd managed to pick-up for the stray - you don't need the hyphen here.
in their run-down building always asked - rundown could be a single word here.
Comment Written 28-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 28-Jan-2019
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Thanx for stopping by, G -- always appreciated! :) Dropped in and put those fixes in -- thank you! :) :) Yvette
Comment from Dawn Munro
Oh duh, why oh why did I almost miss the start of this excellent story? I know... You hadn't posted when last I checked!
So what happened to the other kids? I'm sure this one-year-old wasn't with them when our protagonist first met them. And of course you have teased me into the next bit, wondering who "Twilight" is...
LOVE the pacing, too!!!
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
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Oh duh, why oh why did I almost miss the start of this excellent story? I know... You hadn't posted when last I checked!
So what happened to the other kids? I'm sure this one-year-old wasn't with them when our protagonist first met them. And of course you have teased me into the next bit, wondering who "Twilight" is...
LOVE the pacing, too!!!
Comment Written 26-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 26-Jan-2019
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Oh, I'm so glad you enjoyed, Dawn -- you have made my evening! :) ;) This 'posting in such small pieces' is really taking some getting used to for me...some folks don't remember things from one itty-bitty part to the next....it makes me wonder if people read 'hand-held' novels anymore! :) ;) LOL! LOL! Well, this is a novel so, it's gonna be 'slower' than Twitter, I supposed - LOL! :) :) Thank you so much for your time -- it is appreciated! :) ;)
