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Comment from Bill Schott
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This story beginning with "There was a knock on the door.", brings thew reader into the tale with the feeling of dread which brings us the Girl Scout. Cookie!!

 Comment Written 23-Jan-2019

Comment from oorwull
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Very clever. Waiting for the horrors upon opening the door. There they were!
Knew you should not have done that. The twist comes in the last 3 words, and that's how it should be done.
Oorwull

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2019

Comment from nor84
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I wanted to give you a heads-up. Contest announcement says beginning sentence is: There was a knock ON the door. First sentence of this entry is: There was a knock AT the door. Need to fix that. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Thank you !! I appreciate the edit. I need to proof read my work more than twice. Good Catch ! Thanks..
Comment from Sally Law
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This is a scream! You bought the Girl Scout cookies! All it took was the response to the knock. Good thing you had cash on hand. Thin mints...the best.

My only critique: add paragraph breaks. Two or three will do. It will make this easier on the eyes.

All my best,
Sally

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    Appreciate the feedback.
Comment from Dan McCurdy
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Every. Single. Time. My wife and I gave up and started buying crates. Thin Mints and Thanks a Lots. There is no safe refuge... save when actually carrying a sleeve of Thin Mints.

Sixth star given ENTIRELY for the true joy and laughter the last line gave me. I spent the whole time thinking you couldn't possibly pull off an ending worthy of the set up, and you proved me wrong. Well done!

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
    True story. Thanks