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The Darkened Night

A panther on its night hunt

41 total reviews 
Comment from Joan E.
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Welcome to FanStory--I hope the site fulfills your goals for membership.

I admired your speaking in the voice of the panther, and his hunt did come to life in your rhythmic, rhymed quatrains. Your title and dramatic picture selection helped to establish the mood also. Well done- Joan

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks Joan for the welcome - this is the third poem I have posted and I am just bewildered of all the talent here - it truly is amazing - I thank you for your time and comments - respectfully Ron
Comment from mermaids
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I love the big cats and your words capture the black panther's quest for prey and being successful in the hunt. Excellent use of words and a smooth flow of rhyming words that adds to the strength of your poem.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    I love the big cats also - I am pleased you liked my poem - I put a lot of effort into this write to make you feel you were right there with the panther - thanks for your 6 star rating - I know they are a rarity - much appreciated - thanks so much - respectfully Ron
Comment from JennaG
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I really like how this poem reads, but I also like the feel of it. Your skillful word choices create a very suspenseful mood, especially "prowling", "peering", "lurking".
Wonderful use of personification. I think you have captured so well the essence of a panther. Well done! :)

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks so much Jenna for your kind review and comment - respectfully Ron
Comment from dragonpoet
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Your poetic description of this hunt is done well. Good personification. Seems this panther took down a buck.

One possible error. I think stealth should be stealthy.

Keep writing

dragonpoet

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks dragon - appreciate your review and comments - stealthy would throw the rhyme and meter off - but thanks for the suggestion - I'm always fidgeting with this poem though - I don't know why - I'm thinking about changing the first line - to - through the wilderness I hunt - and hopefully be down with it - thanks again - respectfully Ron
reply by dragonpoet on 18-Jan-2019
    You're welcome, Ron. That change would work.
    Keep writing

    Joan
Comment from Sugarray77
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This is a very vivid and feral read... the panther, looking to survive, must hunt and does so at night. Great eloquence in writing about and describing the panther.


 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks sugar for reviewing and reading my poem - Ron
Comment from rjuselius
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this is a brilliant piece of poetry dear thestoryman! I love the personification of the panther, I think you have probed the way it thinks rather well.
thank you dear friend for sharing!
blessings and a super squeeze!
Rebekka x

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks Rjselius for reading and reviewing my poem - Ron
Comment from Jmf4119
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An excellent rhyming story in a poem from the panthers perspective. As a nocturnal animal, he plots his hunt at night resulting in the kill. Great imagery in creative language.

Well done,

Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks Janet I'm delighted you liked my panther poem - respectfully Ron
Comment from Maria Jose Garcia
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You've described the process of hunting very clearly. I have to say it sounds scary, which is appropriate.
Great presentation.
Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks Maria for your kind review
Comment from LIJ Red
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A cougar driving a Toyota nailed a doe in front of my mailbox a week or two ago...deer have become a real road hazard here...no natural enemies but coyotes and malnutrition...excellent poem.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks for reading my poem
Comment from kahpot
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Excellent, I am reading this, two ways, in the eye of the cat he/she is the stalker of those that wander alone, get separated, or be the most vulnerable, as the hunt does take some time, not unlike some predators of the human kind though, for very different reasons, the Cat for survival, the Human for God knows what? very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2019


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2019
    Thanks Kahpot for your kind review