Believing In Ghosts
A theory about ghosts16 total reviews
Comment from Teresa Alford
Interesting perspective on ghosts. I have not seen one, but sometimes felt a presence about me, about my home. Thanks you sharing the viewpoint. TA -;)
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Interesting perspective on ghosts. I have not seen one, but sometimes felt a presence about me, about my home. Thanks you sharing the viewpoint. TA -;)
Comment Written 22-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 22-Jan-2019
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Thank you and you're welcome!
Comment from meeshu
You have created some great images here, Raul. and your writing is thoughtful and descriptive, personally I am not a believer. there are plenty who do............meeshu
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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You have created some great images here, Raul. and your writing is thoughtful and descriptive, personally I am not a believer. there are plenty who do............meeshu
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you so much! I am happy that you like it.
Comment from Graybærd
": there were and are no sightings of the supernatural of ghosts"... second to last word should be "or" not "of". In case this was going into a contest. I'm not giving 4 stars for one letter off. Otherwise argument seems valid.
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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": there were and are no sightings of the supernatural of ghosts"... second to last word should be "or" not "of". In case this was going into a contest. I'm not giving 4 stars for one letter off. Otherwise argument seems valid.
Comment Written 21-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Amenian Aypotheeno
Hi Raul, this is a thought provoking piece, that invokes my opinion that ghosts are our thoughts and memories projected in times of need, like a reflex or natural defence mechanism, to make us feel close to something that we maybe lacking at the time. The more frightening ones are also I think are our sense heightened in own fear or apprehension, again projecting our internal thoughts and trepidation. Good piece of writing that got my brain working :)
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Hi Raul, this is a thought provoking piece, that invokes my opinion that ghosts are our thoughts and memories projected in times of need, like a reflex or natural defence mechanism, to make us feel close to something that we maybe lacking at the time. The more frightening ones are also I think are our sense heightened in own fear or apprehension, again projecting our internal thoughts and trepidation. Good piece of writing that got my brain working :)
Comment Written 20-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2019
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Thank you! :)
Comment from Sugarray77
You make a good case and present a philosophical approach to why people hope to see ghosts... or they are fearful of thought of ghosts... Good write.
Melissa
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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You make a good case and present a philosophical approach to why people hope to see ghosts... or they are fearful of thought of ghosts... Good write.
Melissa
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you, my friend!
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Good endeavour, theory of ghosts comes with a feeling of wish to talk to our loves ones who are dead thinking them with us in course of talking, somehow believable; well said, well done. Wish your words influence man over 1,234+ Years -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Good endeavour, theory of ghosts comes with a feeling of wish to talk to our loves ones who are dead thinking them with us in course of talking, somehow believable; well said, well done. Wish your words influence man over 1,234+ Years -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from apky
What an enjoyable and engaging read. I simply sailed through it looking like a blonde bartender in a table dance joint.
I quite like the arguments you include in the piece because, like with the state of death itself, nobody is sure or knows what's out there in the beyond.
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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What an enjoyable and engaging read. I simply sailed through it looking like a blonde bartender in a table dance joint.
I quite like the arguments you include in the piece because, like with the state of death itself, nobody is sure or knows what's out there in the beyond.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 19-Jan-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from giraffmang
I there,
I think the concept of supernatural belief is much more acceptable these days. Many folk believe in spirits. Nice little piece.
If you saw a ghost, and tell your friend about it. He won't believe you and will come to think that you're nuts - The first sentence here doesn't go anywhere. It would be better to have sentence one and two amalgamated into one longer sentence.
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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I there,
I think the concept of supernatural belief is much more acceptable these days. Many folk believe in spirits. Nice little piece.
If you saw a ghost, and tell your friend about it. He won't believe you and will come to think that you're nuts - The first sentence here doesn't go anywhere. It would be better to have sentence one and two amalgamated into one longer sentence.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2019
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Thank you!
Comment from Rob Caudle
What a cool topic to write about! I agree that when we want to talk to a loved one who has passed, we are essentially admitting we believe in ghosts and are closer than we think. I won't go over the mechanical issues as I see another review has given you some great suggestions. Here is one more:
I think maybe you might want to work on organization a bit. I had a difficult time reading this, partially because you have come up with a great topic but your sentences were scattered in different bits of your piece. This is the pattern I follow. I hope this is helpful:
Think of your writing as a cheeseburger with everything on it.
1) The top bun is your topic idea--If you saw a ghost, don't tell your friend. He won't believe you and will come to think you're nuts. There...topic sentence and bridge are complete.
2) Begin a new paragraph to tell us what you're going to tell us about--this is the hamburger--I think the theory of ghosts has fascinated us for years. NOW you need supporting details...LETTUCE: Some believe in ghosts while others do not.
ONION: There is no way to know the truth because ghosts are categorized as supernatural. What is "supernatural" can't be seen. TOMATO: Those who do believe in ghosts generally believe that a late loved one is reaching out to them. As time passes by, we wish to talk to our loved ones who are gone, but still with us in what may be a ghostly form. In this sense, we have feelings that we are much closer to the ghosts we personally know.
BOTTOM BUN IS YOUR CONCLUSION: tell us what you've told us about: You may come to the conclusion if you have seen one to keep it to yourself. In this way, it will make your life easier to move on. Remember, some people don't believe in ghosts. You may talk to them, but to spare any hurt feelings or misunderstandings, do not talk about in public.
I truly hope this helps you organize your future writings so they are a bit more cohesive.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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What a cool topic to write about! I agree that when we want to talk to a loved one who has passed, we are essentially admitting we believe in ghosts and are closer than we think. I won't go over the mechanical issues as I see another review has given you some great suggestions. Here is one more:
I think maybe you might want to work on organization a bit. I had a difficult time reading this, partially because you have come up with a great topic but your sentences were scattered in different bits of your piece. This is the pattern I follow. I hope this is helpful:
Think of your writing as a cheeseburger with everything on it.
1) The top bun is your topic idea--If you saw a ghost, don't tell your friend. He won't believe you and will come to think you're nuts. There...topic sentence and bridge are complete.
2) Begin a new paragraph to tell us what you're going to tell us about--this is the hamburger--I think the theory of ghosts has fascinated us for years. NOW you need supporting details...LETTUCE: Some believe in ghosts while others do not.
ONION: There is no way to know the truth because ghosts are categorized as supernatural. What is "supernatural" can't be seen. TOMATO: Those who do believe in ghosts generally believe that a late loved one is reaching out to them. As time passes by, we wish to talk to our loved ones who are gone, but still with us in what may be a ghostly form. In this sense, we have feelings that we are much closer to the ghosts we personally know.
BOTTOM BUN IS YOUR CONCLUSION: tell us what you've told us about: You may come to the conclusion if you have seen one to keep it to yourself. In this way, it will make your life easier to move on. Remember, some people don't believe in ghosts. You may talk to them, but to spare any hurt feelings or misunderstandings, do not talk about in public.
I truly hope this helps you organize your future writings so they are a bit more cohesive.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you! Thanks for the advice!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
That is certainly one theory, Raul, and an interesting choice for a write. I would suggest, perhaps, that there is more than a single paragraph of information there and could be divided. It might be useful to re-work the following sentence as it seems to lose its meaning from beginning to end:
You may come to the conclusion if you have seen one to keep it to yourself.
Your words and presentation definitely get the reader thinking about a topic that, as you say, many tend to stay away from! :) Thank you for sharing! :)
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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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That is certainly one theory, Raul, and an interesting choice for a write. I would suggest, perhaps, that there is more than a single paragraph of information there and could be divided. It might be useful to re-work the following sentence as it seems to lose its meaning from beginning to end:
You may come to the conclusion if you have seen one to keep it to yourself.
Your words and presentation definitely get the reader thinking about a topic that, as you say, many tend to stay away from! :) Thank you for sharing! :)
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2019
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Thank you and you're welcome!
