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Comment from brenda faye curtis
I am confused.
Why, initially, is Ms. O'laydee on the floor? Did she and the cat just switch?
How does a middle-aged man figure in? Where is he?
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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I am confused.
Why, initially, is Ms. O'laydee on the floor? Did she and the cat just switch?
How does a middle-aged man figure in? Where is he?
Comment Written 06-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 06-Jan-2019
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Just a quick story, hardly worth explaining.
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ok.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Okay, this was just weird but very funny in its own right...sounds like one of the insane things my mind might dream up! But 'middle finger' and 'old lady' ....now that just makes it funny! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Okay, this was just weird but very funny in its own right...sounds like one of the insane things my mind might dream up! But 'middle finger' and 'old lady' ....now that just makes it funny! ;) ;) Thanx for sharing! :) Yvette
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, again, Yvette, for giving this a look. Bill
Comment from nomi338
Okay, now that is just freaky. Obviously we are dealing with one beaing who has the ability to jump from one body to another at will. Also has the power to command humans around him or her, and can make phone calls to have other subservient beings delivered with the blink of an eye or twitch of a nose. Amazing.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Okay, now that is just freaky. Obviously we are dealing with one beaing who has the ability to jump from one body to another at will. Also has the power to command humans around him or her, and can make phone calls to have other subservient beings delivered with the blink of an eye or twitch of a nose. Amazing.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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It's fiction, nomi. so don't get too excited. :)
Comment from damommy
I understood it perfectly and kept up with who's who. What does that say about me? LOL. I don't see this going anywhere because they'd just be changing from one body to the next.
Love the names. You're very creative with names.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I understood it perfectly and kept up with who's who. What does that say about me? LOL. I don't see this going anywhere because they'd just be changing from one body to the next.
Love the names. You're very creative with names.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, da. That's makes two people; I'm on a roll.
Comment from Teri7
This is a very interesting post and short story you have penned. I read it through twice and to me it seems the cats are the main things in the story. But then again it seems the woman was the one changing things and bodies. Not sure anymore~lol Teri
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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This is a very interesting post and short story you have penned. I read it through twice and to me it seems the cats are the main things in the story. But then again it seems the woman was the one changing things and bodies. Not sure anymore~lol Teri
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Teri, for giving this look. Bill
Comment from Miss Sherry
Clever write - has to be read over to get all the nuances...but I just woke up so what do I know. Would make a great Twilight Zone episode. Love the names you gave everyone. Your mind is a blender churning out literary delights.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Clever write - has to be read over to get all the nuances...but I just woke up so what do I know. Would make a great Twilight Zone episode. Love the names you gave everyone. Your mind is a blender churning out literary delights.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, OP. I revised it twice before your reading this morning, so it may need another.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Oh dear, deja vu! Another inventive story with some mystic happenings here Bill, but still the dialogue is natural and believable! Those pesky cats can get under your skin! He he he, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Oh dear, deja vu! Another inventive story with some mystic happenings here Bill, but still the dialogue is natural and believable! Those pesky cats can get under your skin! He he he, love Dolly x
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thank you, Dolly. Cats!!
Comment from WryWriter
So Ms. O'laydee became a middle-aged man (a younger Mr. Mittlefinka). The cat became the Old Man, Mr. Mittlefinka, and now they need a temp young man so Mr. Mittlefinka (a.k.a. the cat) can become younger. Now the cat on his desk is enchanted so when the next secretary (catalyst) shows...we start again; only this time, with Mr. Mittlefinka on the floor since he's the lucky one. Each time the cat body dies, the enchanted being jumps into another cat, or the enchanted dead cat body regenerates inside trash liners by itself or with the help of the now Ms. O.laydee (a.k.a. a younger Mr. Mittlefinka). I THINK! Wow, did this story have the brain in overdrive! Love the photo.
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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So Ms. O'laydee became a middle-aged man (a younger Mr. Mittlefinka). The cat became the Old Man, Mr. Mittlefinka, and now they need a temp young man so Mr. Mittlefinka (a.k.a. the cat) can become younger. Now the cat on his desk is enchanted so when the next secretary (catalyst) shows...we start again; only this time, with Mr. Mittlefinka on the floor since he's the lucky one. Each time the cat body dies, the enchanted being jumps into another cat, or the enchanted dead cat body regenerates inside trash liners by itself or with the help of the now Ms. O.laydee (a.k.a. a younger Mr. Mittlefinka). I THINK! Wow, did this story have the brain in overdrive! Love the photo.
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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I think you have it right. Let me see. Mittlefinka goes into the cat, the cat goes into Ms, O?laydee, she goes into Mittlefinka, and the goes to the landfill. O?laydee leaves to do whatever, Mittlefinka calls for a new secretary to probably move into later, and another cat appears. There we go. Simple.
Comment from Dean Kuch
Mr. Mittlefinka (Middle finger) ya' say, Bill?
Haha, ohhhhh, that's gooooood... heh-heh...
Looking at the cat and man, she walked around the desk and picked the feline up by thenap nape of its neck. ... I believe you meant "nape" of its neck here, Bill...
Your story seemed perfectly acceptable to me, Bill.
I had no trouble whatsoever following who was saying what to whom and when even without the speech tags.
Good stuff!
~Dean
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Mr. Mittlefinka (Middle finger) ya' say, Bill?
Haha, ohhhhh, that's gooooood... heh-heh...
Looking at the cat and man, she walked around the desk and picked the feline up by the
Your story seemed perfectly acceptable to me, Bill.
I had no trouble whatsoever following who was saying what to whom and when even without the speech tags.
Good stuff!
~Dean
Comment Written 04-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 04-Jan-2019
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Thanks, Dean. I appreciate the help and feedback. Bill
Comment from Earl Corp
Yeah I think the story is confusing without the tags. The plot is fine, the characters are a little mixed up. I think I got the gist but I'd m not quite sure. Very nice job.
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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Yeah I think the story is confusing without the tags. The plot is fine, the characters are a little mixed up. I think I got the gist but I'd m not quite sure. Very nice job.
Comment Written 03-Jan-2019
reply by the author on 03-Jan-2019
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I'll give it another whirl to see if things fall into place better. Thanks, Earl, for giving this a look. Bill
