Haiku (grazing in silence)
A seemingly peaceful state3 total reviews
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Ah, yes, this is much better. lol. A beautiful haiku. You have two interconnecting lines with your ah-ha moment. A beautiful picture as well. Since grazing in silence is in the first line you should maybe change the title to perhaps (on the horizon)
Lots of luck to you! ~Kerry
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
Ah, yes, this is much better. lol. A beautiful haiku. You have two interconnecting lines with your ah-ha moment. A beautiful picture as well. Since grazing in silence is in the first line you should maybe change the title to perhaps (on the horizon)
Lots of luck to you! ~Kerry
Comment Written 04-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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A warm thank you for the postive review and the six shiny star vote.
Your help and advise I appreciated immensely as I do your friendship.
The wildebeest look beautiful in the sunset ..sadly they live in constant fear of being attacked by lions ( specially at night) and other predators..
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Prego! I'm always happy to help, Amica Mia.
Comment from donette1914
wow this is so good and you made this come to life
it truly is a pleasure to read your work
you really draw ones in
nice chosen words
nice photo
donette1914 dec 03 2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
wow this is so good and you made this come to life
it truly is a pleasure to read your work
you really draw ones in
nice chosen words
nice photo
donette1914 dec 03 2018
Comment Written 03-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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Yes the wildebeest grazing at sunset look graceful and peaceful yet the truth is they , like all grazers, live in constant fear of being attacked by predators.
I 'm happy you enjoyed reading my wee poem.
Comment from rspoet
This could be an excellent haiku and entry for the contest
But the rules say three lines, you have four
You could move "prowls" down and "as the King" up
sunset silhouettes-- no caps and -- for separation
grazing in silence as the king no caps
prowls for its prey.
also title haiku (sunset silhouettes)
Good luck in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
This could be an excellent haiku and entry for the contest
But the rules say three lines, you have four
You could move "prowls" down and "as the King" up
sunset silhouettes-- no caps and -- for separation
grazing in silence as the king no caps
prowls for its prey.
also title haiku (sunset silhouettes)
Good luck in the contest
RS
Comment Written 03-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
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Thanks for the help .. rsport!
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I read your message in the bus .. I wanted to thank you properly for your help .
I'm home now .. I did my best to correct ..the advanced option was driving me crazy with those A'A' so I didn't centre the pieces..
C'est la vie !( biggrin)
...hopefully that won't be an issues as far as the contest go.
I don't understand all these complications ..
Thanks for the kind review too!