Adrift
I Can't Contest14 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This ship is like the broken lonely heart. It is searching and waiting for what will make it come alive again. I like your use of double and triple negatives.
Keep writing and Happy Holidays.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Joan
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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This ship is like the broken lonely heart. It is searching and waiting for what will make it come alive again. I like your use of double and triple negatives.
Keep writing and Happy Holidays.
Congrats on placing third in the contest.
Joan
Comment Written 11-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2018
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Thanks so much, Joan, and for all your reviews and help all year. A lovely interpretation. I hope you're Holidays are wonderful too! mike :))
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You're welcome. Glad you liked my interpretation. I guess it came from the romantic in me. Thanks for the holiday greetings
Joan
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We're in the same boat. LOL!
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No, I am in a tall ship with pirates on it.
Joan
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I'll have to look it up. It may be hard to find since there are 150 of them.
Joan
Comment from Tootsie55
Had to lash out with a SIX. This was something really different. I am wondering if this was written from the viewpoint or thoughts of one of your dear residents? Loved the artwork as well. Lots of interesting thought in this. Now check and see if there is a trip story you missed or look at the extra pics on some chapters.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Had to lash out with a SIX. This was something really different. I am wondering if this was written from the viewpoint or thoughts of one of your dear residents? Loved the artwork as well. Lots of interesting thought in this. Now check and see if there is a trip story you missed or look at the extra pics on some chapters.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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So pleased you enjoyed this. I'm sure they influenced me! LOL I'll try and stop by. :)) mike
Comment from GregoryCody
Hey buddy, I haven't reviewed in a long time. But I was on and wanted to check out one of my favorites at least.
Just a few notes.
I dance for rain in vain, sandcastle built for two
The assonance is simple yet so beautiful. And the metaphor, the image, Perfect
Wings a flight solve my ills
Love how you went with Solve instead of Heal. Takes the reader on a turn, stops them for thought
Never can't find a reason love the double negative, the impact of it but also the way it hits the ear
Desert wind won't cooperate. Like you're dreaming to sail when it's impossible but it doesn't matter. Maybe you don't need an anchor because you'll never be able to sail. Or maybe you don't, because your dreams will never need to stop
This is really well done. Like I said, the double negatives add so much style, oomph to it. Bravo my friend. Loved it.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Hey buddy, I haven't reviewed in a long time. But I was on and wanted to check out one of my favorites at least.
Just a few notes.
I dance for rain in vain, sandcastle built for two
The assonance is simple yet so beautiful. And the metaphor, the image, Perfect
Wings a flight solve my ills
Love how you went with Solve instead of Heal. Takes the reader on a turn, stops them for thought
Never can't find a reason love the double negative, the impact of it but also the way it hits the ear
Desert wind won't cooperate. Like you're dreaming to sail when it's impossible but it doesn't matter. Maybe you don't need an anchor because you'll never be able to sail. Or maybe you don't, because your dreams will never need to stop
This is really well done. Like I said, the double negatives add so much style, oomph to it. Bravo my friend. Loved it.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Hey, great to see you. So delighted you liked this. I'm not around a great deal and horrible at responding and all that. But I do check out your great work when you stop by ... yeah, I should review once in a while. Thanks a million. :)) mike
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Hey buddy I wrote you back on my wall. Anytime you need anything or want to chat gregmedicalsales@gmail.com
I am just not on as much, BUT I am starting to
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Cool. I have you in my email list. WRITE! :))
Comment from robyn corum
Mikey,
THIS is why I continue to read your work. I adore it. It's crazy enough to be totally clear to this crazy brain of mine. I read it straight through the first time with perfect clarity (and...what does that say about me?) hahahaha
Good luck in the voting! (But not much, because I'm in it, too.)
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Mikey,
THIS is why I continue to read your work. I adore it. It's crazy enough to be totally clear to this crazy brain of mine. I read it straight through the first time with perfect clarity (and...what does that say about me?) hahahaha
Good luck in the voting! (But not much, because I'm in it, too.)
Comment Written 04-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2018
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Hi, Robyn
Making sure I respond for a change in a timely manner or just respond really!!! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this. Wow, I was thinking people might think I'm crazy and I'm right! LOL We'll split the prize, no worries. :)) mike
Comment from Scarbrems
I got lost in the playful double negatives. Confusing but fun. Love this verse: I dance for rain in vain again
so here I'll float around the moat
of a sandcastle built for two
Great, fun imagery. An innovative entry for the contest.
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I got lost in the playful double negatives. Confusing but fun. Love this verse: I dance for rain in vain again
so here I'll float around the moat
of a sandcastle built for two
Great, fun imagery. An innovative entry for the contest.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2018
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Like a ship we can sail the earth but when we sink or get stranded somewhere on the way. We can't go on with our live and pretend nothing is wrong.
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A very well-written poem. Like a ship we can sail the earth but when we sink or get stranded somewhere on the way. We can't go on with our live and pretend nothing is wrong.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2018
Comment from Gloria ....
I think this is filled with terrific wit, Mav. Even the ship looks like a camel and with the double negatives clearly woven throughout each line of this convoluted puzzle it's a masterful entry.
I wish you great luck with the contest committee with this gem.
Ange
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I think this is filled with terrific wit, Mav. Even the ship looks like a camel and with the double negatives clearly woven throughout each line of this convoluted puzzle it's a masterful entry.
I wish you great luck with the contest committee with this gem.
Ange
Comment Written 02-Dec-2018
Comment from country ranch writer
Nice work up for the poem although very sad for the way ones life has headed. It is sad the way the mind works sometimes people can't see all the good there is in life around them.
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Nice work up for the poem although very sad for the way ones life has headed. It is sad the way the mind works sometimes people can't see all the good there is in life around them.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2018
Comment from Pantygynt
Somewhere recently I read an article on the double negative . The main thrust was that we should read it as one negative cancelling the other, creating a positive, but as emphasis which is how the user would surely wish it construed. Consequently I am not going to count the negative runs in this to try and extract a logical meaning. I shall just give up, and have fun with this in so doing.
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Somewhere recently I read an article on the double negative . The main thrust was that we should read it as one negative cancelling the other, creating a positive, but as emphasis which is how the user would surely wish it construed. Consequently I am not going to count the negative runs in this to try and extract a logical meaning. I shall just give up, and have fun with this in so doing.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2018
Comment from barbara.wilkey
OH MY! a love lost contest entry. I am guessing double or even triple negatives aren't important in poetry. LOL I did enjoy reading your poem and wish you the best of luck.
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OH MY! a love lost contest entry. I am guessing double or even triple negatives aren't important in poetry. LOL I did enjoy reading your poem and wish you the best of luck.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2018
