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Comment from nomi338
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My hero, you see I started out as a slender man, got cozy with the ladies as a tender man. Marriage soon followed, jobs, children, grand children, etc. Now I am know as fat jack with the exposed butt crack. Someone please help.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
    My sister-in-law had surgery, and now a friend of ours. They both look better and seem to feel good.
Comment from pbomar1115
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Sometimes I think people lack fun. Now as a man-- who loves the fraternity of guys-- I see no harm in the piece. Boyhood is filled with all kinds of discovering. I know mine was. However, when the guys' door is opened to the female judgment, the male's thinking is (sometimes) viewed too brutish. You're all guy, Bill.

Phillip

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
    Thank you, Phillip. I just had a couple limericks in me and went with it. Bill
reply by pbomar1115 on 02-Dec-2018
    Yeah, that's you, Bill. A good writer with great ideas.

    Philip
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Bill, another poem that was an almost limerick. A friend of mine had part of her stomach removed to lose weight and it worked. I've never heard about intestines, but there you go. I liked your poem. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
    I thought that along with paring the stomach they yanked a few feet of intestine as well.
Comment from Gloria ....
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Yes I have heard of the stomach surgery and heard a lot of horror stories about it to boot. That said this is a delightfully quirky, and semi-body limerick and just fits the bill for the day.

Most enjoyed.

Gloria

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
    Thank you, Gloria
Comment from lyenochka
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I think you mean "bariatric" surgery for the weight loss procedure. Laparascopic surgery is used for gall bladder, knee or hernia -- just the least invasive type of surgery.
Fun limerick and glad if it works but it does sound extreme.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
    Thank you, lyenochka. Gee, now I feel stupid..
reply by lyenochka on 30-Nov-2018
    That wasn't my intent, honest! The people I know who had that treatment had other issues afterwards.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Soooo...we went not bawdy or naughty but just a bit off-color...? :) ;) Just funnin'! :) I like the 'transition' from DD to SR ... I'm sure Ricardo appreciates the transition as well! :) ;) thanx for sharing! :)

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
    Dick is actually short for Richard.
reply by Y. M. Roger on 29-Nov-2018
    I know that.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
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Sounds like the operation worked well. My neighbor had that. Made a huuuge difference in her hugeness. I wonder if there are health concerns in doing it though.

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
    My sister.in-law had it done. She said over-eating could make her ill or enlarge the new stomach area and make the surgery moot.
Comment from judiverse
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Good for Ricardo! He must have been on the Nutrisystem program if he is now Slim Rick. Excellent work with the limerick format, and your lines work out in good rhythm. A fun topic, and good use of the names Dim Dick, lardo, and Slim Rick. judi

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
    laparoscopy is stomach surgery that leads to rapid weight loss.
reply by judiverse on 29-Nov-2018
    !'d prefer the Nutrisystem to surgery. judi
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
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A slap stick! Limerick! He he he, this is a fun Limerick Bill and I enjoyed your play on words here, much enjoyed, I laughed! best wishes, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Dolly
Comment from patsolstad
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Hahaha! Pretty danged funny. I don't know a lot about limericks, but it feels like the 'count' is off in a couple of places: Like the first line, which might read better if you wrote "I am writing a po-em, Dim Dick." Second line: 'Which sounds quite a bit like a lim-rick." Last line: "But lately is known as Slim Rick." See what you think...Very nice work.


 Comment Written 29-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
    Thanks, pats