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This Time - That Time 3

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Third book in the time travel trilogy

29 total reviews 
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Ohhhh, Sandra! How am I supposed to go do chores when I have so much to unravel here?!! But I think I'm going to go ruminate about all this as I take care of some things around here. But I'll do them quickly so I can come back and learn more!! This is just plain compelling! xo

 Comment Written 24-Jun-2019


reply by the author on 26-Jun-2019
    Phew! That's all those sorted, lol! You've done so well getting through all these. THANK YOU!!! Biggest hugs. Sandra xxxxxx
reply by Rachelle Allen on 26-Jun-2019
    Right back atcha! xo
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Sandra,

This chapter was intense, and I truly felt for Veronica. If I try to put myself in her place - dealing with the time travel, and her feelings for Mildred, her hubby and kids, and all that goes on.

Looking forward to more,

~patty~

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
    Thank you so much for reading this part now it's out of payout time. I'm sorry you missed the it, but it's doubly nice of you to review, my friend. Veronica is going through quite a lot at the moment, she'd in for a tough assignment! Thanks, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from rwilliam
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You also said that you'd not only pull strings at the office t' make sure I could stay here, but that you'd move in t' help with the bills. ---did you mean 'pulled strings?

I love how deliciously complicated this story is! SO intriguing! Very well written. I enjoyed this chapter very much.

Great work, my friend!!

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
    Thank you so much for the lovely six stars, Rebecca, and the wonderful review. I've made the correction, my friend, thank you for pointing it out! I missed that one, so did everyone else!! lol. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from wordsfromsue
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Man, how different everything has turned out!

Does all of this have anything to do with the stuff Gladys talked about, with her toad husband, the military stuff he worked on?

One correction:

Alice fell down the stairs alright, but not how Mildred thought. A flashback to when she fell down the dark cellar stairs and cracked her head of (on) the concrete floor immediately sprung to mind. 

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 03-Dec-2018
    Thank goodness you found that error I've had to go back and change it in my MS Copies as well. Thank you my dear friend. All these stars are going to my head!! LOL. Don't stop though!! :)) I can get used to them. LOL, LOL. Biggest ever hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from giraffmang
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What's changed? What indeed. lol I love this turn of events.

I'd time-travelled back to the early years of Mrs Humphries existence - either Humphries' or Humpries's here (I can't remember which you use)


 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
    Thank you so much for finding that nit. It was Humphries' apostrophe of the end. I missed that! I've put it in now, thanks Gareth. I love it that you like the way this is going, which is more than I can say for Veronica, lol. Thanks again, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from sandragee
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A tough chapter for Veronica. Mildred has given her a lot of bad news. Her new reality is one without James and her children, and that with the change the good things she has done have probably been erased. Plus Mildred thinks she has gone bonkers.
You did a great job of letting Mildred give the readers new and old information as she explains things to Veronica.
Good writing.

 Comment Written 02-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
    Thank you so much, Sandra, for another lovely review. It's a frightening place to be in at the moment for Veronica. But, I've just posted the next part, so we'll see how things continue. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from barkingdog
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I'll be reading the second half tomorrow and giving it a six. Sorry to be out of them today.
This was a good review for me about what happened in the earlier book and it had a few additional facts, added by Mildred's telling.

It's amazing how far your story has evolved. There may be no end to it. haha

:) e

 Comment Written 01-Dec-2018


reply by the author on 02-Dec-2018
    Thank you so much for this lovely review, Ellen, I'm glad you enjoyed it. I've just posted the second part, I do feel sorry for my characters at the moment! Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from heart of Lou
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Interesting story! Congratulations on getting it published. I read it through a second time and didn't find any nits. I haven't been following the story all the time, but I take it she time-travelled to a different era in this chapter? A murder cover-up adds to the intrigue. Great job!

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
    Thank you so much for taking the time to read and review my story. That is so kind of you. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from rspoet
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Hello Sandra,
Another excellent chapter in the "new reality" of Veronica life.
My how things have changed and that's from Mildred's point of view
All those prime minister that never were, but what's worse, there were no Beatles!
No Stones or Led Zeppelin!
This is a good reminder for readers of the consequences of changing the past and Mildred is changing all kinds of things.
Well done!
Robert

 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
    The Rolling Stones were here a month ago playing at our Southampton Football ground. It needed to be there to host the thousands of fans that came to rave and scream over them. LOL, I was never into screaming, I like to hear the music. I wonder if they would have existed if we really had lost the war.... hmm. Thank you so much, Robert for another lovely review. Things will be changing soon. Big hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-An excellent chapter, Sandra, that
shows Ver. and Mildred together.
-I like how Ver. decides to slow the pace
and intensity of her questions of Mildred.
-I also like how you incorporate some of
the events in the first book, when
Ver.'s job was to talk Mrs. Humphries
into selling her house to Ver.'s boss.
-Mildred patiently answers Ver.'s questions,
and we learn how different history is.
-This really rattles Ver., as it shoud
since it alters not only what she
had prevented, but her personal life, too.
-A very good image at the beginning:
"I stared down at my cup as tears
tumbled over my cheeks."
-The alliteration emphasizes
how distraught Ver. is.


 Comment Written 30-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 30-Nov-2018
    Hi Pam, I'm so pleased you liked the beginning, and the inclusion of some of the events in the first book. It's a fine line between bringing back too much and boring the reader with parts they already know about, and not writing enough for it to make sense, if you know what I mean. Thank you so much for another lovely review, my dear friend. Lots of hugs! :)) Sandra
reply by Pam (respa) on 30-Nov-2018
    You are very welcome and deserving, Sandra. I think you used the detail just right; it was not boring, but rather interesting to reflect on what was, what is, and what the next step is. That is my little bit of wisdom for the evening.🙂