Green Rose Leaves
as they die they brown7 total reviews
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem about the dying green leaves that start to change color into brown when they die during the transition from autumn to winter, a natural process no one can stop.
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2018
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A very well-written poem about the dying green leaves that start to change color into brown when they die during the transition from autumn to winter, a natural process no one can stop.
Comment Written 28-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your review. giovanni
Comment from robyn corum
Dear poet,
Isn't this a sad thing? We all need water to survive -- there's no getting around the fact of that. But water can also do great damage in the wrong situations-- too much can drown us or kill a plant.
A nice little rain can be relaxing and sooo soothing... but a massive thunderstorm can terrify.
Moderation is key.
A nice thoughtful poem. Thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Dear poet,
Isn't this a sad thing? We all need water to survive -- there's no getting around the fact of that. But water can also do great damage in the wrong situations-- too much can drown us or kill a plant.
A nice little rain can be relaxing and sooo soothing... but a massive thunderstorm can terrify.
Moderation is key.
A nice thoughtful poem. Thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your review. giovanni
Comment from Kiera Haley
I really like this! It has a good flow to it and the somber tone comes across well. The alliteration adds interest to the piece and I love the phrase "leaves of late fall". Well done!
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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I really like this! It has a good flow to it and the somber tone comes across well. The alliteration adds interest to the piece and I love the phrase "leaves of late fall". Well done!
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your review. giovanni
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
Everything leaves a mark, as we understand the reality and truth, as green rose leaves of late fall so they die they brown; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Everything leaves a mark, as we understand the reality and truth, as green rose leaves of late fall so they die they brown; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your review. giovanni
Comment from l.d.lauritzen
Haiku is always hard to write collapsing hard concepts into a few syllables. Like the vision even though as a former gardener I'm not fond of roses-everything eats them. Nice job. keep writing. Suggestion, the last line-withering they die.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Haiku is always hard to write collapsing hard concepts into a few syllables. Like the vision even though as a former gardener I'm not fond of roses-everything eats them. Nice job. keep writing. Suggestion, the last line-withering they die.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your review. giovanni
Comment from Marc Grimaldi
Especially, since we are in the fall, the picture easily comes to mind. I can see the dry stains of the early due on the dying leaves. I'm new to "Haiku" poetry, but should the last line be five syllables instead of six? I could very well be wrong, but would be curious to know. Thanks for the picture.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Especially, since we are in the fall, the picture easily comes to mind. I can see the dry stains of the early due on the dying leaves. I'm new to "Haiku" poetry, but should the last line be five syllables instead of six? I could very well be wrong, but would be curious to know. Thanks for the picture.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your review. giovanni Though the rules were not specific w/syllable count I appreciate you pointing that out. Should be: as they die they brown.
Comment from Donka Kristeva
Short and simple. An art work will enhance your poem and the site has a vast choice of flowers......... All the best at the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Short and simple. An art work will enhance your poem and the site has a vast choice of flowers......... All the best at the contest.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2018
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Thank you for your review. giovanni
