A Romantic Christmas
Love At First Sight14 total reviews
Comment from djsaxon
Nice warm write. The POV jumps around a little but it doesn't really detract. I guess what I really like is the honesty. Maybe look at clarity.
"it felt like I had known him (Glen) forever." You qualify that in the next sentence which is fine but be careful with the generic "him". Well done in the comp - DJ
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
Nice warm write. The POV jumps around a little but it doesn't really detract. I guess what I really like is the honesty. Maybe look at clarity.
"it felt like I had known him (Glen) forever." You qualify that in the next sentence which is fine but be careful with the generic "him". Well done in the comp - DJ
Comment Written 28-Feb-2020
reply by the author on 29-Feb-2020
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I had forgotten I had written this one Glenn was a remarkable character.
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
A very lovely story. You never know what waits around the corner. Sometimes we think it's the venue we need to find true happiness, but it is the chemistry between two people that makes the difference.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
A very lovely story. You never know what waits around the corner. Sometimes we think it's the venue we need to find true happiness, but it is the chemistry between two people that makes the difference.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2019
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2019
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Smiles
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hey, this is a very classic romance tale that is well written and no grammatical errors that I noticed. I enjoyed it and it sounds like you had a wonderful Christmas. It is a magical time of the year in so many ways. I found your setting easy to visualize from your descriptive writing.
Nice job with this and thanks for sharing your writing, cheers, Anastasia.
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
Hey, this is a very classic romance tale that is well written and no grammatical errors that I noticed. I enjoyed it and it sounds like you had a wonderful Christmas. It is a magical time of the year in so many ways. I found your setting easy to visualize from your descriptive writing.
Nice job with this and thanks for sharing your writing, cheers, Anastasia.
Comment Written 05-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2018
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thank you for your kindness and support
Comment from Joan E.
Thank you for sharing the true meaning of Christmas with your story about the theme of "a time for miracles". You told in a conversational style that made it quite believable. My husband and I actually experienced love at first sight, and we have been married forty-eight years! Big smiles and best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
Thank you for sharing the true meaning of Christmas with your story about the theme of "a time for miracles". You told in a conversational style that made it quite believable. My husband and I actually experienced love at first sight, and we have been married forty-eight years! Big smiles and best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 01-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2018
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we were love at first sight for us at 53 years strong!
Comment from apky
This is indeed very romantic, made even more romantic by that special feeling people have at Christmas. I swooned at the kissing under the mitletoe, the gathering and togethernes of family generations under one roof.
I wish you good luck with the contest.
I told Grandpa,(space)"(delete space) Everything looks so beautiful."
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
This is indeed very romantic, made even more romantic by that special feeling people have at Christmas. I swooned at the kissing under the mitletoe, the gathering and togethernes of family generations under one roof.
I wish you good luck with the contest.
I told Grandpa,(space)"(delete space) Everything looks so beautiful."
Comment Written 29-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 29-Nov-2018
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smiles
Comment from lyenochka
Lovely story and I keep wondering if the story is true and autobiographical. It sure sounds real and I can imagine that the couple had a long happy marriage.
One comment: ". People come to the blue store" since the Blue Store was capitalized in other places, it should be here, too
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
Lovely story and I keep wondering if the story is true and autobiographical. It sure sounds real and I can imagine that the couple had a long happy marriage.
One comment: ". People come to the blue store" since the Blue Store was capitalized in other places, it should be here, too
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the heads up all fixed!
Comment from Rob Caudle
Nicely told love at first sight. I remember it well. just a couple of nits in the following line try it without at the airport at the end of the phrase. Also the very next line you use smiling again as you kiss you grandpa maybe another word. And the line seems to read a bit better when you talk about the short from the airport without referring once again to the airport. Just one man's opinion. I did enjoy the read "
I said smiling, "We did kind of bump into each other at the airport." While I was looking for you at the airport.
Smiling I gave Grandpa a kiss
From just the short time I rode in his truck [ from the airport.]
Rob
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
Nicely told love at first sight. I remember it well. just a couple of nits in the following line try it without at the airport at the end of the phrase. Also the very next line you use smiling again as you kiss you grandpa maybe another word. And the line seems to read a bit better when you talk about the short from the airport without referring once again to the airport. Just one man's opinion. I did enjoy the read "
I said smiling, "We did kind of bump into each other at the airport." While I was looking for you at the airport.
Smiling I gave Grandpa a kiss
From just the short time I rode in his truck [ from the airport.]
Rob
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2018
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Thank you for the heads up
Comment from Spitfire
I had to read this twice since I wasn't clear on how old the girl was and her marital status. Perhaps there should be a hint of this near the opening as in how lonely she felt this time of year without her parents gone and no special man in her life.
Smart detail about Glen bringing a picture along. Sounds as if Gramps has all this in mine.
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018
I had to read this twice since I wasn't clear on how old the girl was and her marital status. Perhaps there should be a hint of this near the opening as in how lonely she felt this time of year without her parents gone and no special man in her life.
Smart detail about Glen bringing a picture along. Sounds as if Gramps has all this in mine.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018
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Smiles thank you for the support
Comment from Gert sherwood
Smiles to you author
for your well written and detailed story of how
(I believe was you who as you said-)
Christmas is a time for miracles and discovering romance right here up on the mountain. Whoever thought I would be the one discovering true love!
Best to you in this romantic christmas contest
Gert
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018
Smiles to you author
for your well written and detailed story of how
(I believe was you who as you said-)
Christmas is a time for miracles and discovering romance right here up on the mountain. Whoever thought I would be the one discovering true love!
Best to you in this romantic christmas contest
Gert
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018
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Smiles thank you. For your support
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You are welcome Author.
Gert
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Hug.
Comment from beizanten
a good beginning paragraph. A very interesting plotline and characters. you describe the characters characteristic and emotion well bringing this story into life. Well done, keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018
a good beginning paragraph. A very interesting plotline and characters. you describe the characters characteristic and emotion well bringing this story into life. Well done, keep up the great work!
Comment Written 21-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 22-Nov-2018
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So glad you enjoyed!