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The Last Song, For God

a beautiful myth, a wild bird's sacrifice to God

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Comment from YNWA
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This is just wonderful Dawn, but ever so sad.
The very idea of this beautiful bird, only singing once is heartbreaking
Love the format you have used which enables a nice, smooth read.
Mitchell

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Thanks very much, Mitchell.
Comment from CD Richards
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The story definitely does appear in the novel The Thornbirds. According to a Wikipedia article, there's no known occurrence of it before then, so it may well be Colleen McCullough made it up.

You've constructed a well thought-out and moving free verse based around this tale. Good job, Dawn :)

Craig

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2018

Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
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Hi Dawn,
What an amazing story with so much sadness yet ultimately triumph for the
bird as it sacrifices life to share its voice with all.
The presentation and poem itself are surely to be treasured for future generations.
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 21-Nov-2018

Comment from Joan E.
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I saw a bird that looked like the one in your picture selection but did not heard it sing. What a tragic myth! I admired your comparing your song to his and your bits of rhyme. Cheers- Joan

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2018

Comment from His Grayness
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Certainly a rare and very interesting story offered here in a lovely work that I found delightful in all dimensions! I surely have no suggestions to improve this work in any way at all and I offer my sincere thanks to this author for a truly fine read! HIS GRAYNESS; Vance

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2018

Comment from BeasPeas
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Hi Dawn. This is a lovely poem, but melancholy. The thorn bird, I believe, is a mythical bird. Humans can relate to the concept of throwing ourselves onto thorns and singing a beautiful song, probably because it seems like a noble gesture. God knows we torture ourselves in so many ways. An interesting and thought provoking piece. Marilyn

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 24-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Marilyn- yep, we sure do torture ourselves, don't we?
Comment from Ulla
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Hi Dawn, it's a compelling story taking place in Australia. I have the book and I've read it several times. And I believe the story is exactly based on the bird. The priest falls in love. He's stung and have to die as he's sinned beyond forgiveness. I loved your poem. All best. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2018

Comment from damommy
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I remember hearing that about the thorn bird. It makes for a bittersweet story. You've written a beautiful and touching poem about it. Thank you for sharing this.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2018

Comment from Mark Valentine
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I'd never heard the legend of the thorn bird (I'm also one of the few that never read that book or watched the min-series). Thanks for introducing me to it - it's a wonderful story and great material for a poem.

I love that your poem has a moral. After explaining the thornbird's story in your poem, you contrast that with our opportunity to sing our song not once, but over and over again.

The sparing use of rhyme gives this a "freedom" that highlights the message. Love it!

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2018

Comment from Sasha
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This is a beautifully written poem that gave me pause to reflect. I love your inspiration for this poem and do hope one day you find it again. This is superbly constructed and I saw no flaws. Excellent and fascinating notes too. Thank you so much for posting this lovely poem.

 Comment Written 20-Nov-2018