Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Oh my goodness. That wasn't so much fun as everyone thought. I don't think I'd like a piece of that birthday cake. Perfect shape to your pyramid. Marilyn

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018

Me neither ! Thanks for your kind review
Hugs, Trisha

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Oooh Nooo!!! No the teeth!! :) :) What a fun poem: a pyramid poem -- I like it!! :) ;) And this one is exceptionally fun with your topic -- although, I have to tell you, that I'm glad you went with the illustrated 'calm' kitchen because it actually adds to the 'story-telling' aura that your poem seems to have! ;) Be sure to pop back in there and change "one hundrd and" to 'one hundred and'..:) ;) Thanx for sharing, ma'am, and have a Happy Thanxgiving! :) Yvette

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018

Oooh Yesss, the teeth!! I ?popped? back in, and now ?hundred? stands corrected . Thanks for a fun review and positivity
Hugs, Trisha

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-Good presentation and poem
for this challenge, Trisha.
-I like the format.
-Good description and detail
about this bash for Grandma!
-It sounds like quite an event.
-I like the ending when
"the tables were turned!"
-Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 20-Nov-2018

False teeth are a fear of mine! I appreciated your great review..
Hugs, Trisha

reply by Pam (respa) on 21-Nov-2018

You are welcome, Trisha.

Comment from Harper J

Excellent

This poem began serious but then the end was unpredictable which made it so funny . It is a light happy read that showed fun, seriousness and humour all thrown into one little poem . I enjoyed this immensely

 Comment Written 19-Nov-2018

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reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018

I?m confused! You enjoyed reading it, but rate it a 4 star. It would be more helpful to me to say how it could be improved. When you review people?s work that?s what they look for.
Thanks for reading.

reply by Harper J on 19-Nov-2018

Four star is good

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018

How can I make it better than good?

reply by Harper J on 19-Nov-2018

I have now given you 5 stars for this piece : )
I think the end would flow better if you removed
( almost ) so it would read
Laughed , lost her teeth, which became part of the trash

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018

Good job,,,,,much better, thank you. I will take a second look without promise to change. I appreciated your pleasant attitude.

reply by Harper J on 19-Nov-2018

My pleasure : )

reply by the author on 19-Nov-2018

Mine too!