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Comment from Gert sherwood
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Hi Bill Schott
I like your 5-7-5 Poem contest entry
It is so true that we all must share and enjoy
Family values... I believe you are saying why not all of us in the USA be happy to share each others values.
Gert

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 08-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Gert
reply by Gert sherwood on 08-Nov-2018
    You are welcome Bill
    Gert
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi Bill. I recognized the artwork as Renati's. She has her own style. This looks like a good entry for the contest. This is interesting. I think it would depend on the family. But parents do tend to be more conservative with their own children. Well done. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Pam
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
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Wonderful wordplay Bill and excellent timing with people about to goo to the polls in your country. Very cleverly written, satire supreme.....
Mitchell

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Mitchell. Getting ready to head out now. Want me to place a bet for you?
Comment from rama devi
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Clever pun in the closing line. Fine political satire in 5-7-5 form, Bill, and presented with apt artwork. Well done. No nits to note, but I do suggest a colon instead of ellipses (optional):

Family values:

a conservative issue


Good luck!

Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    Thanks, RD
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    I had used the ellipses as an et al allusion to things we associate with family values. Happy day.p
reply by rama devi on 06-Nov-2018
    :-))
Comment from Earl Corp
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I'm not exactly sure what you mean that family values are a conservative issue that is liberally shared. I think family values are a human issue that has eroded over the last half century. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    The political side of these words joined together to form a thought is that conservatism and liberalism are, in a season of election, thought to be mutually exclusive. Republicans are all about man/woman marriage, God, and the status quo. Liberals seem to support all unions of people, limit church doctrines which limit choice, and lean into a progressive ideology. This poem just plays on those key words.
Comment from BOO ghost
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Yep. BOO has seen this contest.

Results will be soon. Maybe a day.

Wish you luck in the contest. You can never tell what they favor.

A colorful presentation.

Looks great!

Nice bundle if words!

BOO!


 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    Thanks, BOO
Comment from lyenochka
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What a great message and the play on the words of "conservative" and "liberal" which are such politically divisive words. And yet, they should all fully unify under "family values."

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thanks, lyenochka
Comment from Gloria ....
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Ha, what I like about this one, Bill other than the clever word play is that there is plenty of room for interpretation particularly given the artwork amended.

Excellent fiveseventyfive and I wish you much luck with the Contest Committee.

Gloria

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Gloria
Comment from brenda faye curtis
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There is great meaning in these few words, reflecting wisdom of one who knows the true value of a solid relationship with one's family. I'm very happy for anyone who has such benefit, and I hope the contest committee will recognize the value of your poem.

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Brenda
reply by brenda faye curtis on 06-Nov-2018
    You're welcome, Bill.
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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What a very inventive write here, sir -- could be a unifying write, but I'm sure there'd be some reason that it's not...! :) ;) LOL! Thanx for sharing and good luck in the contest! :) ;) Yvette :)

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 05-Nov-2018
    Thanks, Yvette.