Haiku (silent dew drop clings)
Haiku Poem (2nd place)13 total reviews
Comment from Dawn Munro
Ahhhhhh... a lovely haiku. The satori is especially clever, but the 'crystal clear' dew drop clinging is what paints the picture in imaginations -- I'm not surprised it placed in the contest. :) Nicely done.
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Ahhhhhh... a lovely haiku. The satori is especially clever, but the 'crystal clear' dew drop clinging is what paints the picture in imaginations -- I'm not surprised it placed in the contest. :) Nicely done.
Comment Written 16-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
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Thank you Dawn. I appreciate your supportive review. ~DD
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Very much my pleasure.
Comment from rspoet
Hello DD
This is a fine haiku you're written
with excellent imagery and description of the dew drop
and solid use of alliteration
There is a tension present as we know the dew drop will in time fall
and the vision will go with it
Nicely done
good luck in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Hello DD
This is a fine haiku you're written
with excellent imagery and description of the dew drop
and solid use of alliteration
There is a tension present as we know the dew drop will in time fall
and the vision will go with it
Nicely done
good luck in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 29-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you kindly Robert for popping in to review my wee haiku. I am very grateful for your comments. I must apologise for my late response to reviews and reviewing. I have been out of town and, now back, I am chasing my tail again. I do appreciate your encouraging input. Blessings ~DD
Comment from donette1914
wow what a shot with a camera
you put a lot into this piece
very creative and I enjoy this very much and thank you for sharing
it was a pleasure
donette1914 oct 28 2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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wow what a shot with a camera
you put a lot into this piece
very creative and I enjoy this very much and thank you for sharing
it was a pleasure
donette1914 oct 28 2018
Comment Written 28-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thank you Donette for your thoughtful comments on my haiku poem. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Galactia
Hi
This is a lovely written poem. Perfect 5'7'5 syllable count. I am not sure if this is actually classified as a Haiku due to the fact of your last 2 lines...
to hold firm its point of view
crystal clear vision
I hope it is. and wish you well in the contest
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Hi
This is a lovely written poem. Perfect 5'7'5 syllable count. I am not sure if this is actually classified as a Haiku due to the fact of your last 2 lines...
to hold firm its point of view
crystal clear vision
I hope it is. and wish you well in the contest
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thank you Tia for taking the time to review my haiku poem. Your comments are appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Irish Rain
Awesome what can be conveyed in so very few words. This is beautiful. I like poetry that doesn't need pictures...this clearly is one of those. Wonderful entry!!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Awesome what can be conveyed in so very few words. This is beautiful. I like poetry that doesn't need pictures...this clearly is one of those. Wonderful entry!!
Blessings...
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Irish Rain, I do apologize for my late response. I find myself chasing my tail quite a bit lately. I am ever so grateful for your review and very shiny stars. You are always appreciated. ~DD
I did not come first but am thankful to have placed second to Gloria?s win.
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Congratulations to you!! I stay busy, so don't worry because you do too...not a problem!!!
Comment from BOO ghost
About nature.
Yep. Dew is moisture and a liquid.
From the dew point perspective, nature looks crystal clear.
Clever haiku.
You done great! All about dew.
Maybe we should exercise a clear point if view.
If we took the time to appreciate Mother Nature and life.
An amoeba in the sickle cells.
Time only lasts for one season, then evaporated like the dew on the lillies.
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BOO!
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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About nature.
Yep. Dew is moisture and a liquid.
From the dew point perspective, nature looks crystal clear.
Clever haiku.
You done great! All about dew.
Maybe we should exercise a clear point if view.
If we took the time to appreciate Mother Nature and life.
An amoeba in the sickle cells.
Time only lasts for one season, then evaporated like the dew on the lillies.
----_-------_--------------------------------++
BOO!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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BooG, I apologize for my late response to your thoughtful review. Time is testing, as always, but your comments are always appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Mitchell Brontė
A wonderful Haiku, the imagery created of these dew drops is just incredible.
Sprinkled with alliteration in the first and last lines which enhances the musical elements that flow throughout.
Best wishes
Mitchell
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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A wonderful Haiku, the imagery created of these dew drops is just incredible.
Sprinkled with alliteration in the first and last lines which enhances the musical elements that flow throughout.
Best wishes
Mitchell
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Mitchell, I apologize for my late response to your thoughtful review. Time is testing, as always, but your comments are always appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Mark D. R.
I like it a lot, but I am not so enamored with your font choice (the italics are fine). As I am a novice in writing Haiku, I am still aware of word choice(s) in writing the same. I do often try to experiment with altering the sequence or word structure for my three lines with similar wording to make it 'sound better.' Mark Twain once said something similarly to: "Why use 'metropolis' for three cents when you can use 'city' for less."
So your second line might be amended to change 'point of view' to 'viewpoint' but then you will need to add an extra syllable if you want seven in this line (firmly?). Enjoy your weekend.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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I like it a lot, but I am not so enamored with your font choice (the italics are fine). As I am a novice in writing Haiku, I am still aware of word choice(s) in writing the same. I do often try to experiment with altering the sequence or word structure for my three lines with similar wording to make it 'sound better.' Mark Twain once said something similarly to: "Why use 'metropolis' for three cents when you can use 'city' for less."
So your second line might be amended to change 'point of view' to 'viewpoint' but then you will need to add an extra syllable if you want seven in this line (firmly?). Enjoy your weekend.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Mark, I apologize for my late response to your thoughtful review. Time is testing, as always, but your comments and suggestion was very much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
A beautifully formatted and written haiku. Your message of the dew drop is so clear. This is a solid entry for the haiku contest. I hope you do well. Good luck to you.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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A beautifully formatted and written haiku. Your message of the dew drop is so clear. This is a solid entry for the haiku contest. I hope you do well. Good luck to you.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
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Cindy, I apologize for my late response to your thoughtful review. Time is testing, as always, but your comments are always appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
That was a really lovely, visual haiku, DD, and one I could appreciate. It's true what they say about these, if you write it correctly, you shouldn't need an illustration to go with it. Yours was lovely. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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That was a really lovely, visual haiku, DD, and one I could appreciate. It's true what they say about these, if you write it correctly, you shouldn't need an illustration to go with it. Yours was lovely. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you kindly Sandra for popping in to review my wee haiku. I am very grateful for your comments. I must apologise for my late response to reviews. I have been out of town and, now back, I am chasing my tail again. I do appreciate your encouraging input. Blessings ~DD
