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Haiku (silent dew drop clings)

Haiku Poem (2nd place)

13 total reviews 
Comment from Ideasaregems-Dawn
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Ahhhhhh... a lovely haiku. The satori is especially clever, but the 'crystal clear' dew drop clinging is what paints the picture in imaginations -- I'm not surprised it placed in the contest. :) Nicely done.

 Comment Written 16-Nov-2018


reply by the author on 18-Nov-2018
    Thank you Dawn. I appreciate your supportive review. ~DD
reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 18-Nov-2018
    Very much my pleasure.
Comment from rspoet
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Hello DD
This is a fine haiku you're written
with excellent imagery and description of the dew drop
and solid use of alliteration
There is a tension present as we know the dew drop will in time fall
and the vision will go with it
Nicely done
good luck in the contest
Robert

 Comment Written 29-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
    Thank you kindly Robert for popping in to review my wee haiku. I am very grateful for your comments. I must apologise for my late response to reviews and reviewing. I have been out of town and, now back, I am chasing my tail again. I do appreciate your encouraging input. Blessings ~DD
Comment from donette1914
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wow what a shot with a camera
you put a lot into this piece
very creative and I enjoy this very much and thank you for sharing
it was a pleasure
donette1914 oct 28 2018

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
    Thank you Donette for your thoughtful comments on my haiku poem. Your comments are much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Galactia
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Hi

This is a lovely written poem. Perfect 5'7'5 syllable count. I am not sure if this is actually classified as a Haiku due to the fact of your last 2 lines...

to hold firm its point of view
crystal clear vision

I hope it is. and wish you well in the contest

Regards
Tia

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
    Thank you Tia for taking the time to review my haiku poem. Your comments are appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Irish Rain
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Awesome what can be conveyed in so very few words. This is beautiful. I like poetry that doesn't need pictures...this clearly is one of those. Wonderful entry!!
Blessings...

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
    Irish Rain, I do apologize for my late response. I find myself chasing my tail quite a bit lately. I am ever so grateful for your review and very shiny stars. You are always appreciated. ~DD
    I did not come first but am thankful to have placed second to Gloria?s win.
reply by Irish Rain on 01-Nov-2018
    Congratulations to you!! I stay busy, so don't worry because you do too...not a problem!!!
Comment from BOO ghost
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About nature.

Yep. Dew is moisture and a liquid.

From the dew point perspective, nature looks crystal clear.

Clever haiku.

You done great! All about dew.

Maybe we should exercise a clear point if view.

If we took the time to appreciate Mother Nature and life.

An amoeba in the sickle cells.

Time only lasts for one season, then evaporated like the dew on the lillies.

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BOO!

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    BooG, I apologize for my late response to your thoughtful review. Time is testing, as always, but your comments are always appreciated. ~DD
Comment from YNWA
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A wonderful Haiku, the imagery created of these dew drops is just incredible.
Sprinkled with alliteration in the first and last lines which enhances the musical elements that flow throughout.
Best wishes
Mitchell

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    Mitchell, I apologize for my late response to your thoughtful review. Time is testing, as always, but your comments are always appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Mark D. R.
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I like it a lot, but I am not so enamored with your font choice (the italics are fine). As I am a novice in writing Haiku, I am still aware of word choice(s) in writing the same. I do often try to experiment with altering the sequence or word structure for my three lines with similar wording to make it 'sound better.' Mark Twain once said something similarly to: "Why use 'metropolis' for three cents when you can use 'city' for less."

So your second line might be amended to change 'point of view' to 'viewpoint' but then you will need to add an extra syllable if you want seven in this line (firmly?). Enjoy your weekend.



 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    Mark, I apologize for my late response to your thoughtful review. Time is testing, as always, but your comments and suggestion was very much appreciated. ~DD
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
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A beautifully formatted and written haiku. Your message of the dew drop is so clear. This is a solid entry for the haiku contest. I hope you do well. Good luck to you.

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2018
    Cindy, I apologize for my late response to your thoughtful review. Time is testing, as always, but your comments are always appreciated. ~DD
Comment from sandramitchell
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That was a really lovely, visual haiku, DD, and one I could appreciate. It's true what they say about these, if you write it correctly, you shouldn't need an illustration to go with it. Yours was lovely. Good luck in the contest. :) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 27-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
    Thank you kindly Sandra for popping in to review my wee haiku. I am very grateful for your comments. I must apologise for my late response to reviews. I have been out of town and, now back, I am chasing my tail again. I do appreciate your encouraging input. Blessings ~DD