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Shattered Aspirations

The damage of one small word...

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Comment from Karol Bond
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Very well said. The image is oddly perfect for the piece. ;))) A lot of truth folded into very few words. Well done and good luck with the contest. ;)))

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your wonderful comments, Karol - it seems that to lie is a bit too easy for the human spirit sometimes and even the little ones can have such a big impact on one or more lives...even collaterally. Didn't have a specific incident feed this write, have just seen so much of it among the high schoolers I teach as well as among their parents....it can get pretty toxic sometimes. :) :) You be sure to take good care and have a wonderful weekend of sunshine and rainbows! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Karol Bond on 26-Oct-2018
    You too. ;)
Comment from jmdg1954
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I don't write poetry unless it's for kids and rhymes so I tend not to read it either.

I read yours (the title intrigued me) and found it so filled with truth.

"leaving life with naught but the pieces"...

I liked that line! Well done my friend and best luck in the contest (no lie)!! John

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your wonderful comments, John - it seems that to lie is a bit too easy for the human spirit sometimes and even the little ones can have such a big impact on one or more lives...even collaterally. Didn't have a specific incident feed this write, have just seen so much of it among the high schoolers I teach as well as among their parents....it can get pretty toxic sometimes. You be sure to take good care and have a wonderful weekend of sunshine and rainbows! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
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Spoken lies, one word can bring in disaster in life, words ill-spoken break life into pieces; well said, well done. Write More Inspire More -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your wonderful comments, DR ALCREATOR - it seems that to lie is a bit too easy for the human spirit sometimes and even the little ones can have such a big impact on one or more lives...even collaterally. Didn't have a specific incident feed this write, have just seen so much of it among the high schoolers I teach as well as among their parents....it can get pretty toxic sometimes. You be sure to take good care and have a wonderful weekend of sunshine and rainbows! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the Four Line Poem contest.
Your verse tells a dark truth.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.

Sharon

 Comment Written 25-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your wonderful comments, Sharon - it seems that to lie is a bit too easy for the human spirit sometimes and even the little ones can have such a big impact on one or more lives...even collaterally. Didn't have a specific incident feed this write, have just seen so much of it among the high schoolers I teach as well as among their parents....it can get pretty toxic sometimes. You be sure to take good care and have a wonderful weekend of sunshine and rainbows! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from royowen
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Yes, your so right Yvette, lies are the scourge of mankind, and I cannot leave myself out of the firing line concerning, when under pressure, the urge to lie is over powering, a great entry in this fou line contest dear girl, good luck, blessings, Roy

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 Comment Written 25-Oct-2018


reply by the author on 26-Oct-2018
    Thank you for your wonderful comments, Roy - it seems that to lie is a bit too easy for the human spirit sometimes and even the little ones can have such a big impact on one or more lives...even collaterally. Didn't have a specific incident feed this write, have just seen so much of it among the high schoolers I teach as well as among their parents....it can get pretty toxic sometimes. We'll just be sure to keep an eye on each other -- the truth is a great standard to live by, yeah?! :) :) You be sure to take good care and have a wonderful weekend of sunshine and rainbows! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by royowen on 26-Oct-2018
    You keep going ya hear Yvette