Jarring Noise
When the world will not be quiet!9 total reviews
Comment from Galactia
Hi
LOL you do have a noisy household. Mine used to be but since my oldest son has left, I don't have 20 kids here anymore. It went from the hang out house to really quite. I got three other kids, but he was the noisiest from all of them.
Great job this is a very strong entry I feel. Good Luck :)
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
Hi
LOL you do have a noisy household. Mine used to be but since my oldest son has left, I don't have 20 kids here anymore. It went from the hang out house to really quite. I got three other kids, but he was the noisiest from all of them.
Great job this is a very strong entry I feel. Good Luck :)
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 01-Nov-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thanks so much Tia. It sounds like a wonderful, noisy brood that you have. Wonderful!! Thanks for the great review!
Comment from Joan E.
What an intriguing picture that establishes the mood for your poem well! I certainly imagined the noise with the help of your choice of words and your rhymes. Best wishes in the Cacophony Poem contest- Joan
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
What an intriguing picture that establishes the mood for your poem well! I certainly imagined the noise with the help of your choice of words and your rhymes. Best wishes in the Cacophony Poem contest- Joan
Comment Written 26-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thank you Joan!
Comment from kiwijenny
Great cacophony poem..the onomatopoeia is awesome
Booming zooming clang twang screeching shrieking howl
Jarring..notes all wrong.....
God bless
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
Great cacophony poem..the onomatopoeia is awesome
Booming zooming clang twang screeching shrieking howl
Jarring..notes all wrong.....
God bless
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much Jenny. It was a fun one to write!!
Comment from Julie Pie
I really enjoyed reading this poem and think you did a wonderful job bringing to life all of the noises. It can be so frustrating when the world will not be quiet!
Nice job,
Julie
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
I really enjoyed reading this poem and think you did a wonderful job bringing to life all of the noises. It can be so frustrating when the world will not be quiet!
Nice job,
Julie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much, Julie!
Comment from Kelly Grim
Great use of sound! "big boy's toys" and "guns booming" and "race cars zooming" -- just fantastic! And I really like the last stanza, nature's noises... Excellent format, rhythm is smooth, rhyme is great. This is a terrific entry into this writing prompt contest! Very well penned!!!!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
Great use of sound! "big boy's toys" and "guns booming" and "race cars zooming" -- just fantastic! And I really like the last stanza, nature's noises... Excellent format, rhythm is smooth, rhyme is great. This is a terrific entry into this writing prompt contest! Very well penned!!!!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much Kelly for the fantastic review. I am grateful.
Comment from meeshu
This is a very good piece, consistent rhymes with great rhythm and flow. The message is loud and clear heheh. and in Minute Form to boot..
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
This is a very good piece, consistent rhymes with great rhythm and flow. The message is loud and clear heheh. and in Minute Form to boot..
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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Thanks Meeshu! Much appreciated!!
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written cacaphony poem. Some people are only happy and jolly when everything is noisy around them with loud music playing and people talking while showing off their car's noisy engines.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
A very well-written cacaphony poem. Some people are only happy and jolly when everything is noisy around them with loud music playing and people talking while showing off their car's noisy engines.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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Thanks so much, Sandra!! Much appreciated!
Comment from Six-Star Writer
I like the poem's tempo. Lots if energya coming through the lines. Seemed like a race car itself speeding in a 25 MPH zone. Better watch out out because poem police use radar here. Lots of poem speed traps.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
I like the poem's tempo. Lots if energya coming through the lines. Seemed like a race car itself speeding in a 25 MPH zone. Better watch out out because poem police use radar here. Lots of poem speed traps.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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Haha. A great, fun review. Thank you for your comments.
Comment from Monica L. Moraca
Yep, I can definitely hear the jarring sounds within your words. Well done!
The font and italic format blends well with the words you describe in your poem. A couple of guys having fun regardless the notes are played all wrong.
Best of luck in the contest!
Monica
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
Yep, I can definitely hear the jarring sounds within your words. Well done!
The font and italic format blends well with the words you describe in your poem. A couple of guys having fun regardless the notes are played all wrong.
Best of luck in the contest!
Monica
Comment Written 23-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018
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Thanks Monica. My head was spinning after writing it. I could imagine the noises. Ha!