For Boo the Ghost
Dedicated to our resident ghost.40 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
This is a fun one and a lovely Tanka to use as your vehicle/form of choice. Have you ever dealt with Boo anymore? Or were you teasing? An enjoyable read with a clever presentation! Love it!
Melissa
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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This is a fun one and a lovely Tanka to use as your vehicle/form of choice. Have you ever dealt with Boo anymore? Or were you teasing? An enjoyable read with a clever presentation! Love it!
Melissa
Comment Written 22-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2021
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Wow, Yu our went way back. List the great aeprt from Fan Art on that one. I just switched it and changed the background. Thank you so much for taking the time and for the kind encouragement,
Love and blessings,
Sal XOs...
Comment from evesayshi
Congratulations on this win - in my opinion, a fun write, both the Tanka and the Author's Notes - I'm certain every reader of this "scary" entry felt the slight discomfort of "Boo's" presence and breathed a sigh of relief at midnight - obviously fully complaint with the prompt, and again, congratulations...Eve
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Congratulations on this win - in my opinion, a fun write, both the Tanka and the Author's Notes - I'm certain every reader of this "scary" entry felt the slight discomfort of "Boo's" presence and breathed a sigh of relief at midnight - obviously fully complaint with the prompt, and again, congratulations...Eve
Comment Written 29-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2018
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Thank you, Eve! This was my first poem ever. Boo invited me into the contest as described. He knows what a contest junkie I am. This was so much fun for me and hurled me headlong into poetry. So glad you liked it!
All my best,
Sal
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You are very welcome, Sal, a great poetry start, and yes, I did enjoy my read...Eve
Comment from Debbie Pope
I do more poetry than prose, and I have yet to attempt a tanka. It's like twice as hard as a haiku to me. Hats off to you for succumbing to temptation. I love your poem. Hope something else comes along to tempt your poetry side.
Good job.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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I do more poetry than prose, and I have yet to attempt a tanka. It's like twice as hard as a haiku to me. Hats off to you for succumbing to temptation. I love your poem. Hope something else comes along to tempt your poetry side.
Good job.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2018
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Thank you Debbie dear for the excellent review! I was hoping you would find me! I am so glad you stopped by!
All my best,
Sally
Comment from ChibiElf
Many congrats on your first tanka! I have not yet attempted one. My comfort zone for poetry is haiku (like you, I write stories) tanka and minute scare me a bit because there are so many limitations. How to be creative with so many rules?
I looked up some of these rules and sadly this is not a tanka. It said thus:
The haiku-like first three lines establish an EXTERNAL FOCUS often through the use of nature to set the tone and tenor for the tanka. The first two lines should be grammatically connected.
The last two lines serve to deliver EMOTIVE IMPACT to the reader. These lines should be grammatically connected.
The third line of the tanka must SERVE AS A SATORI on the first two lines AS WELL AS A PIVOT to begin the last two lines.
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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Many congrats on your first tanka! I have not yet attempted one. My comfort zone for poetry is haiku (like you, I write stories) tanka and minute scare me a bit because there are so many limitations. How to be creative with so many rules?
I looked up some of these rules and sadly this is not a tanka. It said thus:
The haiku-like first three lines establish an EXTERNAL FOCUS often through the use of nature to set the tone and tenor for the tanka. The first two lines should be grammatically connected.
The last two lines serve to deliver EMOTIVE IMPACT to the reader. These lines should be grammatically connected.
The third line of the tanka must SERVE AS A SATORI on the first two lines AS WELL AS A PIVOT to begin the last two lines.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your review and insight. I appreciate you very much!
Sally
Comment from bard owl
Excellent. Does that mean the spider can't bit? That he has no evil mouth? Being allergic to spiders, that is the way I think of them. You take a very generous view of that spider and super view of your new fan. Best of luck in the contest. Linda
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Excellent. Does that mean the spider can't bit? That he has no evil mouth? Being allergic to spiders, that is the way I think of them. You take a very generous view of that spider and super view of your new fan. Best of luck in the contest. Linda
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thank you Bard Owl for your excellent review and insightful comments. Boo actually invited me to do this tanka poetry, my first ever. It was a lot of fun. Since my very young grandkids read my work, I chose art that wasn?t too scary! Glad you stopped by!
All my best,
Sally
Comment from c_lucas
Ghosts, Goblins, and Ghouls run rampant through the pages of Fanstory followed faithfully by witches and demons. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Ghosts, Goblins, and Ghouls run rampant through the pages of Fanstory followed faithfully by witches and demons. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and comments. I am so glad you enjoyed my tribute to Boo! He liked it, too! Said I could keep my head! What a ghost!
All my best?
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You're welcome.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
After all, a ghastly apparition, more or less a ghost, in friendly relation, beyond a real existence, all to reappear, like a neighbour, again expire at night; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Edit:
Dedicated to the our resident ghost.
(Dedicated to our resident ghost)
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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After all, a ghastly apparition, more or less a ghost, in friendly relation, beyond a real existence, all to reappear, like a neighbour, again expire at night; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR
Edit:
Dedicated to the our resident ghost.
(Dedicated to our resident ghost)
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thank you for your review and critique. I had to rewrite that this morning for the committee and must have slipped there. I will fix that lime now. Thank you so much for your keen eyes!
All my best,
Sally
Comment from Anntonette
Love how Boo is all over this piece, Boo is your friend now.
Boo gave you a gift to write, he helps you with your flaws. Well done!
Good luck!
- Anntonette J
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Love how Boo is all over this piece, Boo is your friend now.
Boo gave you a gift to write, he helps you with your flaws. Well done!
Good luck!
- Anntonette J
Comment Written 31-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much for you review and comments. I appreciate your appreciation of my very first poetry of any kind. I really am strictly a prose writer.
All my best,
Sally
Comment from tempeste
Honestly speaking your open piece won me over already before I even read your poem ..you have a vivid imagination and a colourful way of expression.
......For no poetry is mine, only stories. I felt studied, lured like an innocent pup with a chew toy! Oh, the wicked offering! I bit......[biggrin]
I like your poem too...A ghost without a head ...(like the possible double meaning there)
I imagine you will be celebrating Halloween too... I have never done it but I have seen it on films where kids dressed up and go around their neighbourhood asking for sweets.
In Italy it's not popular. On the eve of the 5th of January we have
"la Befana" ="Old Lady"....she looks and dresses like a witch ,she has a wart on her ugly nose too ...she flies around on a broom stick from door to door not asking but GIVING lollies to children that have been good.
I wish you all the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Honestly speaking your open piece won me over already before I even read your poem ..you have a vivid imagination and a colourful way of expression.
......For no poetry is mine, only stories. I felt studied, lured like an innocent pup with a chew toy! Oh, the wicked offering! I bit......[biggrin]
I like your poem too...A ghost without a head ...(like the possible double meaning there)
I imagine you will be celebrating Halloween too... I have never done it but I have seen it on films where kids dressed up and go around their neighbourhood asking for sweets.
In Italy it's not popular. On the eve of the 5th of January we have
"la Befana" ="Old Lady"....she looks and dresses like a witch ,she has a wart on her ugly nose too ...she flies around on a broom stick from door to door not asking but GIVING lollies to children that have been good.
I wish you all the best for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2018
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Thank you for the excellent review and comments. I am so glad you liked my tanka poetry. Boo actually encouraged me to do it. He liked it very much and said I could keep my head! I?m a grandmother now and don?t go out trick or treating! But, I have had some great fun here on FanStory with Boo the Ghost this season! I thought I would join in the fun with my piece. So glad you stopped by and I made you laugh!
All my best to you and yours,
Sally
Comment from sherry3
I say YAY for a couple of reasons..Tanka rhythm was spot on, and your FIRST tanka offering! Way to jump in the Halloween poetry fray with exuberance! ALSO I believe in Ghosts. Hope I get to meet him! Boo the friendly writing ghost! Liked the energy, the writing introducing the poem, and the humor. :)
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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I say YAY for a couple of reasons..Tanka rhythm was spot on, and your FIRST tanka offering! Way to jump in the Halloween poetry fray with exuberance! ALSO I believe in Ghosts. Hope I get to meet him! Boo the friendly writing ghost! Liked the energy, the writing introducing the poem, and the humor. :)
Comment Written 27-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2018
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Thank you so much for the encouraging review and comments. I really was my first poetry of any kind, much less something as tricky as tanka. Boo was pleased and said I could keep my head! I had so much fun with this! Thanks for joining in!
All my best,
Sally
