God Omnipresent Does
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Comment from Tim0443
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Chaotic chaos
Chaos no rules are
Anything goes
Pandemonium Here
Your words are
read them
Here are some for you
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Reviewing to writing
Review my review
Chaotic chaos
Chaos no rules are
Anything goes
Pandemonium Here
Your words are
read them
Here are some for you
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
Enjoy this silly (first and last ever) poem in my own style and art of expression (punctuation free and free of any traditional form or format)...I did enjoy it I really enjoyed the offbeat and quirky style which I found very well and was a pleasure to read well done kind regards Meia :)
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Enjoy this silly (first and last ever) poem in my own style and art of expression (punctuation free and free of any traditional form or format)...I did enjoy it I really enjoyed the offbeat and quirky style which I found very well and was a pleasure to read well done kind regards Meia :)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from Artasylum
I have to give you props for following you for following your own drummer... I encourage all to break out of the mold and just have thoughts organized in a poem... yours, diana
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I have to give you props for following you for following your own drummer... I encourage all to break out of the mold and just have thoughts organized in a poem... yours, diana
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from evesayshi
In my opinion, a warm and comforting poem about a place we all hope is there, somewhere, perhaps Heaven, or perhaps Eden, here on earth - winning in its definition of "the place," and descriptive in its lyric free verse flow, with a touch of rhyming rhythm...
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In my opinion, a warm and comforting poem about a place we all hope is there, somewhere, perhaps Heaven, or perhaps Eden, here on earth - winning in its definition of "the place," and descriptive in its lyric free verse flow, with a touch of rhyming rhythm...
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from trailblazer101
I rate it highly because you're speaking of a place that exists -- although the folks there probably would like more freedom to choose....without going into it too deeply. While it's true that there is a type of freedom it is also regimented freedom. As dictated by someone else in power and to their standard. Or in other words, to build this utopian structure man has dominated man to his injury.
I think I'll stick to what I have now, imperfect as it is. I can move where I'd like, not where I'm told.
Love in every sphere of living is everywhere there
Everything is state-owned there
Get single citizenship there
Only religion Humanity is followed there
Crime is not entertained there
The 'humanities' are too variable for me. They change with the next appointment in the power structure.
This is a good provocative write and will anger some and open the eyes of others, or at least make them think.
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I rate it highly because you're speaking of a place that exists -- although the folks there probably would like more freedom to choose....without going into it too deeply. While it's true that there is a type of freedom it is also regimented freedom. As dictated by someone else in power and to their standard. Or in other words, to build this utopian structure man has dominated man to his injury.
I think I'll stick to what I have now, imperfect as it is. I can move where I'd like, not where I'm told.
Love in every sphere of living is everywhere there
Everything is state-owned there
Get single citizenship there
Only religion Humanity is followed there
Crime is not entertained there
The 'humanities' are too variable for me. They change with the next appointment in the power structure.
This is a good provocative write and will anger some and open the eyes of others, or at least make them think.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from tfawcus
This sounds like an earthly paradise. I can see why you listed it under the category of humour! A highly unlikely place to go to, no matter what our wishes might be.
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This sounds like an earthly paradise. I can see why you listed it under the category of humour! A highly unlikely place to go to, no matter what our wishes might be.
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from fivecardstud1247
I like this very much I don't know where there is? But you made me want to move up there as fast can drive myself. It sounds like neighbors to the North. Will done poem my lady. GB
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I like this very much I don't know where there is? But you made me want to move up there as fast can drive myself. It sounds like neighbors to the North. Will done poem my lady. GB
Comment Written 11-Oct-2018
Comment from lyenochka
It's sounds like an ideal place, a kind of Utopia. My only suggestion is to remove the "to" in "let's move to there." In English when using the diectic pronoun, 'there' we don't use the preposition 'to.'
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It's sounds like an ideal place, a kind of Utopia. My only suggestion is to remove the "to" in "let's move to there." In English when using the diectic pronoun, 'there' we don't use the preposition 'to.'
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from poesyapprentice
Silly or not it had a flow and covered much with word choice and imagery. Repetition kept it going. It's uniqueness was appealing. It's been some time since I've been back, but I didn't go "there" ; ) Yellowish was an interesting word choice. Come rolling, come ringing, indeed. Thank you for sharing you.
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Silly or not it had a flow and covered much with word choice and imagery. Repetition kept it going. It's uniqueness was appealing. It's been some time since I've been back, but I didn't go "there" ; ) Yellowish was an interesting word choice. Come rolling, come ringing, indeed. Thank you for sharing you.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from country ranch writer
Moving to a place where one can be free to think for themselves and have to report to know one ever and be free to think for one's self.
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Moving to a place where one can be free to think for themselves and have to report to know one ever and be free to think for one's self.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
