God Omnipresent Does
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Comment from Old Soldier
Nice flow keeps the reader looking ahead. Last I heard that built a wall There:-(. Thanks for sharing and keep writing reading and reviewing.
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Nice flow keeps the reader looking ahead. Last I heard that built a wall There:-(. Thanks for sharing and keep writing reading and reviewing.
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Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from Mame
Utopia ! Or even better. What terrific qualities and qualifications to make one eligible to live there. The verse is so reader/friendly and it also presents the real factors that govern our lives spring from our attitudes and behaviour.
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Utopia ! Or even better. What terrific qualities and qualifications to make one eligible to live there. The verse is so reader/friendly and it also presents the real factors that govern our lives spring from our attitudes and behaviour.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from oorwull
I guess you decided to "do your thing". no rules, no explanations. Just do what you want and create your own "eden". You got most of the things you wanted and put them all together a blissful existence.
Well done.
And well done!
Willie
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I guess you decided to "do your thing". no rules, no explanations. Just do what you want and create your own "eden". You got most of the things you wanted and put them all together a blissful existence.
Well done.
And well done!
Willie
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from Ulla
Hi There, I suppose we all have a dream of finding a place where we're safe from anything bad, whatever that can be. I'm glad you added your notes, which made your poem make so more sense. All the best. Ulla:))
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Hi There, I suppose we all have a dream of finding a place where we're safe from anything bad, whatever that can be. I'm glad you added your notes, which made your poem make so more sense. All the best. Ulla:))
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from susand3022
You know, I always had this thought, ship all the worst criminals, lifers etc..., to an island somewhere and let them fend for themselves. Well, I like this idea better. Let them have this. I'll go make my own Utopia on an island somewhere, much easier!!! ð??? Liked the thought!
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You know, I always had this thought, ship all the worst criminals, lifers etc..., to an island somewhere and let them fend for themselves. Well, I like this idea better. Let them have this. I'll go make my own Utopia on an island somewhere, much easier!!! ð??? Liked the thought!
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from rjuselius
this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear alcreator! The way you introduce new beginnings, is a fresh, unique and new perspective. we yield in front of freedom's volition.
thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
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this is an intriguing piece of poetry dear alcreator! The way you introduce new beginnings, is a fresh, unique and new perspective. we yield in front of freedom's volition.
thanks for sharing!
Blessings and a hearty hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from Loredana
Don't find the poem silly at all. I think we would all love to 'move to there' wherever 'there' is. It feels like something a child would say, 'move to there', but its repetition makes the poem stronger and less childish because of the reasons you list that want to make the reader move there.
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Don't find the poem silly at all. I think we would all love to 'move to there' wherever 'there' is. It feels like something a child would say, 'move to there', but its repetition makes the poem stronger and less childish because of the reasons you list that want to make the reader move there.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from Insider98
It's very good for what it is. Well written, descriptive of a place that is the perfect place for honest, hardworking, moral people. Great job for what you call a silly poem.
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It's very good for what it is. Well written, descriptive of a place that is the perfect place for honest, hardworking, moral people. Great job for what you call a silly poem.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from Zue65
I think all people seek their Paradise in different ways. The Leftist become what they are today because of their Utopian fantasy that can be realized only by obliterating their perceived enemy, sadly, the Conservatives. The only Heaven that is true is that one offered by Jesus. Anything designed by humans will always fail.
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I think all people seek their Paradise in different ways. The Leftist become what they are today because of their Utopian fantasy that can be realized only by obliterating their perceived enemy, sadly, the Conservatives. The only Heaven that is true is that one offered by Jesus. Anything designed by humans will always fail.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from Heather Knight
Are you sure there's no social criticism hidden in your poem somewhere? It didn't read like a silly poem to me, but maybe I haven't understood it.
Anyway, it was an enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing.
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Are you sure there's no social criticism hidden in your poem somewhere? It didn't read like a silly poem to me, but maybe I haven't understood it.
Anyway, it was an enjoyable read.
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
