God Omnipresent Does
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Comment from Winslow
Dear Alcreator,
This reminds me of the Lord's Prayer. For let humanity move toward peace and love, let us practice what is done in heaven, for if we do, than our lives will become real.
Cheers,
Winslow
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Dear Alcreator,
This reminds me of the Lord's Prayer. For let humanity move toward peace and love, let us practice what is done in heaven, for if we do, than our lives will become real.
Cheers,
Winslow
Comment Written 04-Feb-2019
Comment from WryWriter
Ah, this poem reminds me of a line by Aristotle: "It is better for a city to be governed by a good man than by good laws." Where is there? In the minds of poets....
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Ah, this poem reminds me of a line by Aristotle: "It is better for a city to be governed by a good man than by good laws." Where is there? In the minds of poets....
Comment Written 11-Jan-2019
Comment from apky
I think I'd very much love to live in your There
Bring up my son There
Hopefully one day have my grandchildren
born to grow up There
I'd like to live and grow old in your There
and be buried there.
This is an excellent fairy tale land and enjoyable poem.
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I think I'd very much love to live in your There
Bring up my son There
Hopefully one day have my grandchildren
born to grow up There
I'd like to live and grow old in your There
and be buried there.
This is an excellent fairy tale land and enjoyable poem.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is good and seems to fit the times. Moving in to make a mark. But...Get job or employment by elgilbility? What about welfare and disability, support those who flee their wars of insecurity to another instablility.
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This is good and seems to fit the times. Moving in to make a mark. But...Get job or employment by elgilbility? What about welfare and disability, support those who flee their wars of insecurity to another instablility.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Let's Move to There, reminds me of Sir Thomas More's Utopia. It was a place where everything was perfect. We know that there is a perfect place, but we must move to there.
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This poem, Let's Move to There, reminds me of Sir Thomas More's Utopia. It was a place where everything was perfect. We know that there is a perfect place, but we must move to there.
Comment Written 24-Nov-2018
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Yes, let's move there where the rhythm flows easily and the mood seems free and upbeat -- sign me up now!! :) ;) Love your write here as it delivers a good mood and feeling to really lift the reader's spirits! :) ;) Thank you for passing along the positivity today! :) )
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Yes, let's move there where the rhythm flows easily and the mood seems free and upbeat -- sign me up now!! :) ;) Love your write here as it delivers a good mood and feeling to really lift the reader's spirits! :) ;) Thank you for passing along the positivity today! :) )
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
Comment from TPAC
I found this write original in its presentation, witty in its clever usage of the word of there repetitious, yet captivating as writer fades from usage concluding with singular. A different and refreshing approach in my opinion.
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I found this write original in its presentation, witty in its clever usage of the word of there repetitious, yet captivating as writer fades from usage concluding with singular. A different and refreshing approach in my opinion.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
Comment from ElPoetry001
Excellent.
Yes, "the green, green grass of [home]" ...no, the green, green grass of anywhere else. The perfect location, where everything is bigger and better, and free.
You have captured the myth of utopia, and removed the curtain from the Wizard of Oz.
Physically, you can move to most places of your choice, if you can meet the 50+ conditions of reality: ie:,., the cost of moving, new job, choice of people that will be in the community, or country, the taxes, the religion if any, the schools, the gangs, the local government. So, it all comes down to looking into yourself.
No, not re-evaluating your physical environment. Rather, it is to find your own universe. Remember, "wherever you go that is where 'you' are."
St. Geoff: "Breath deeply, relax, let go of all stress and anger, and be within yourself in the universe where you are most welcome."
Your humor is a map of wake up-wisdom.
I enjoyed the poem.
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Excellent.
Yes, "the green, green grass of [home]" ...no, the green, green grass of anywhere else. The perfect location, where everything is bigger and better, and free.
You have captured the myth of utopia, and removed the curtain from the Wizard of Oz.
Physically, you can move to most places of your choice, if you can meet the 50+ conditions of reality: ie:,., the cost of moving, new job, choice of people that will be in the community, or country, the taxes, the religion if any, the schools, the gangs, the local government. So, it all comes down to looking into yourself.
No, not re-evaluating your physical environment. Rather, it is to find your own universe. Remember, "wherever you go that is where 'you' are."
St. Geoff: "Breath deeply, relax, let go of all stress and anger, and be within yourself in the universe where you are most welcome."
Your humor is a map of wake up-wisdom.
I enjoyed the poem.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2018
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
An interesting poem and "what if the world ..." piece." I do question the use of there to end so many lines--it rather starts to feel monotonous by the end. Just something to consider, my friend~Debbie
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An interesting poem and "what if the world ..." piece." I do question the use of there to end so many lines--it rather starts to feel monotonous by the end. Just something to consider, my friend~Debbie
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
Comment from J. Dennis
Hello to Alcreator Litt Dear
Yes I can see that this is a poem meant to put a smile on one's face. It is centers on a move to a place that has no harsh punishment, things are owned by the state and jobs. There is much more but you invite someone and put them under a countdown. LIfe is a countdown. It is also one that offers peace. Interesting place.
Thank you for sharing.
Have a nice day.
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Hello to Alcreator Litt Dear
Yes I can see that this is a poem meant to put a smile on one's face. It is centers on a move to a place that has no harsh punishment, things are owned by the state and jobs. There is much more but you invite someone and put them under a countdown. LIfe is a countdown. It is also one that offers peace. Interesting place.
Thank you for sharing.
Have a nice day.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2018
