God Omnipresent Does
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Let's Move To There"God Omnipresent Does
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Comment from Thomas Bowling
Hanging or capital punishment is not there
Life imprisonment is no more there
Let's hope it's because there is no need for them. If so, then I agree, Let's move to there. I enjoyed your poem.
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Hanging or capital punishment is not there
Life imprisonment is no more there
Let's hope it's because there is no need for them. If so, then I agree, Let's move to there. I enjoyed your poem.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from Lance S. Loria
"Let us move right this moment..." perhaps say "left". This sounds like a description of Utopia. Or maybe New Zealand? Interesting structure (non-structure). In spite of that it flows nicely.
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"Let us move right this moment..." perhaps say "left". This sounds like a description of Utopia. Or maybe New Zealand? Interesting structure (non-structure). In spite of that it flows nicely.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from the13thpoet
Well hello there. As someone who feels as though writing is one of the truest forms of expression, I love the fact you used your own style and art of expression. All I can say is you made me want to move to there, wherever there is. Great job as always!
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Well hello there. As someone who feels as though writing is one of the truest forms of expression, I love the fact you used your own style and art of expression. All I can say is you made me want to move to there, wherever there is. Great job as always!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from Loren .
My wife and I took this challenge many years ago. We had a couple of Quarter Horses and we were paying to have them boarded near us. And then the bright idea to buy a farm and take care of them ourselves, along with our work. Talk about a long and expensive learning curve. Yes, there were idyllic moments, new dogs and cats and lots of a lot of other things. So, I can so well identify with this poetic offering. Loren
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My wife and I took this challenge many years ago. We had a couple of Quarter Horses and we were paying to have them boarded near us. And then the bright idea to buy a farm and take care of them ourselves, along with our work. Talk about a long and expensive learning curve. Yes, there were idyllic moments, new dogs and cats and lots of a lot of other things. So, I can so well identify with this poetic offering. Loren
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This piece is very lively, colorful, and thought-provoking. Three seasons--
leaving out winter, I presume. I must say, though, I couldn't be happy
there unless I could practice my Christianity. :-)
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This piece is very lively, colorful, and thought-provoking. Three seasons--
leaving out winter, I presume. I must say, though, I couldn't be happy
there unless I could practice my Christianity. :-)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from Cedar
This is a place where I certainly would like to live. The Scenery seems to be in the country and there's no place like the country. This is very different then most poems I read. Take care...Bill
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This is a place where I certainly would like to live. The Scenery seems to be in the country and there's no place like the country. This is very different then most poems I read. Take care...Bill
Comment Written 26-Jun-2019
Comment from misscookie
What a beautiful peaceful place your artwork shows and your are so on point
I had to smile for we all have done it ,move to a nice clean peaceful place than others thought the same thing and left their mean streets for a better life for their children
only to find out the gangs family thought the same thing of course some parents didn't know their darlings were in gangs until later.
Soon there will be no place to move
thank you for sharing
cookie
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What a beautiful peaceful place your artwork shows and your are so on point
I had to smile for we all have done it ,move to a nice clean peaceful place than others thought the same thing and left their mean streets for a better life for their children
only to find out the gangs family thought the same thing of course some parents didn't know their darlings were in gangs until later.
Soon there will be no place to move
thank you for sharing
cookie
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
Comment from Irish Rain
Yes!! I want to move to there, ha ha.
I enjoyed this, so often 'there' looks
better than 'here', and in your poem,
it sure sounds better too!
Wonderful,
Blessings...
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Yes!! I want to move to there, ha ha.
I enjoyed this, so often 'there' looks
better than 'here', and in your poem,
it sure sounds better too!
Wonderful,
Blessings...
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
Comment from Cindy Warren
Yep, let's move there. On second thought maybe not. You know what they say about things that sound too good to be true. I think I'll stay right where I am. It's too cold and far from perfect, but it's the best there is.
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Yep, let's move there. On second thought maybe not. You know what they say about things that sound too good to be true. I think I'll stay right where I am. It's too cold and far from perfect, but it's the best there is.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
I enjoyed your free form piece. It does flow well when read aloud as I could mentally insert my own punctuation LOL. I think we should ALL move to there as it sounds a lovely place to live. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
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I enjoyed your free form piece. It does flow well when read aloud as I could mentally insert my own punctuation LOL. I think we should ALL move to there as it sounds a lovely place to live. Nicely done and thank you very much for sharing it.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2019
