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Comment from mackenzietastan
This poem really resonated with me. I think this is the kind of place we all dream about moving, but we all have different ideas about what it will look like. Great job.
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This poem really resonated with me. I think this is the kind of place we all dream about moving, but we all have different ideas about what it will look like. Great job.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from jenintorre
I want to go there. It sounds like the perfect place to live. What a pity it doesn't exist.
I enjoyed reading your very uplifting poem.best wishes. Jen.
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I want to go there. It sounds like the perfect place to live. What a pity it doesn't exist.
I enjoyed reading your very uplifting poem.best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. We are forever dreaming of the perfect place where we can live in peace and tranquility. We often forget we always have ourselves wherever we go and when we don't have peace in our hearts and minds we will not find it anywhere else.
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A very well-written poem. We are forever dreaming of the perfect place where we can live in peace and tranquility. We often forget we always have ourselves wherever we go and when we don't have peace in our hearts and minds we will not find it anywhere else.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from Kay Seed
I like the use of the word "there" throughout the poem. The theme I picked up on is the author's view of a utopian society. A couple lines I had trouble making sense of like, "Where you wanted to live ever" & "three times vacations a year." I would like to know what "Let us move right this moment" means. It could just be something silly, or have a deeper meaning. Overall, a very interesting theme and style. Good job!
-Kay
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I like the use of the word "there" throughout the poem. The theme I picked up on is the author's view of a utopian society. A couple lines I had trouble making sense of like, "Where you wanted to live ever" & "three times vacations a year." I would like to know what "Let us move right this moment" means. It could just be something silly, or have a deeper meaning. Overall, a very interesting theme and style. Good job!
-Kay
Comment Written 10-Oct-2018
Comment from Earl Corp
I don't mind your writing style. This shouldn't be your last poem keep at it. I'm not sure this was a humor poem, though you consider it silly so yours is the only opinion that matters on that score. Im not a poetry guy or a free verse fan.
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I don't mind your writing style. This shouldn't be your last poem keep at it. I'm not sure this was a humor poem, though you consider it silly so yours is the only opinion that matters on that score. Im not a poetry guy or a free verse fan.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2018
Comment from sunnilicious
This was a nice poem to read. We have dreams and attaining them feels great. Get good work. Get a comfortable place to live. If married, be content with your family. I liked the rhyming through consanance and repeat words. Good work.
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This was a nice poem to read. We have dreams and attaining them feels great. Get good work. Get a comfortable place to live. If married, be content with your family. I liked the rhyming through consanance and repeat words. Good work.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2018
Comment from rhonnie69
HELLO ALCREATOR: This posting speaks of a place where people can go and everybody get along with everybody. Yes...I want to go to a place such as this. Thank you for sharing. God bless you and yours. Cordially: rhonnie69.
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HELLO ALCREATOR: This posting speaks of a place where people can go and everybody get along with everybody. Yes...I want to go to a place such as this. Thank you for sharing. God bless you and yours. Cordially: rhonnie69.
Comment Written 09-Oct-2018
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think this poem is about dissatisfaction with our lot and the yearn to move somewhere better but we never quite make it, the ideal place to live seems unattainable in this unusual write, love Dolly x
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I think this poem is about dissatisfaction with our lot and the yearn to move somewhere better but we never quite make it, the ideal place to live seems unattainable in this unusual write, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Oct-2018
Comment from DonandVicki
This is a poem that does what all good poetry should do and that is exercise the imagination, I like the feel of freedom of thought. Very well composed.Don and Vicki
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This is a poem that does what all good poetry should do and that is exercise the imagination, I like the feel of freedom of thought. Very well composed.Don and Vicki
Comment Written 09-Oct-2018
Comment from kiwijenny
I would but I HATE moving...we just have moved and I am missing stuff...clothes ,my hubby has twenty single socks...my next move is the nursing home
But your poem has inviting ideas...I'm just not ready to move AGAIN
God bless
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I would but I HATE moving...we just have moved and I am missing stuff...clothes ,my hubby has twenty single socks...my next move is the nursing home
But your poem has inviting ideas...I'm just not ready to move AGAIN
God bless
Comment Written 09-Oct-2018
