Comment from Mark Valentine

Excellent

Very funny - sorry I'm out of sixes. I love the glimpse into the mind of a daughter trying to anticipate what madness lies in store. The vibrator thing is priceless, as is you trying to see bad news from your parents world view in which being gay, divorced, or a Cubs fan, is in the same category as dying of cancer.

So, are your family Cardinals' fans? I'm hoping the answer to that is no because I plan on fanning you.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2018

I grew up in Southern Illinois. 75 miles from St Louis. I moved to Chicago out of HighSchool. Northsider. Then downtown. So, yes, I?m a Cubs Fan. I write short stuff. Usually R rated and hopefully funny. I came back to Fanstory in hopes of revitalizing my writing skills, assuming I ever had any. Thanks for reading and leaving a review.

Comment from fluffnstuff

Exceptional

I think this is fantastic......I loved how your imagination went crazy.....happens when we have had enough negativity .....and the suitcase was an absolute howl........I hope you win ....got my vote. Fluff

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2018

Thanks so much for reading and the most generous review. We tell this story almost every holiday. I leave out the part about the suitcase. Lol.

Comment from Lady Jane

Excellent

Dang. I don't want to know. I'm not a curious person. No good comes from "Knowing". - period inside the quotes for word 'knowing'

Now this gave me a chuckle. I did not see that end coming. Haha. Republican is what she's afraid of in this day and age? Lol.

Well written, crisp dialogue, moved along steadily with even pace and good flow. No errors to note except the one listed above which really isn't an error, more of a choice :) edit suggestion, if you will. Thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest. So, how did ole dad take the news? Hehe
Janelle

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 09-Oct-2018

He took it okay. In fact, he eventually ended up being a Republican. Mother was beside herself. Lol. Thanks for reading and reviewing. We still laugh about it today.

Comment from meeshu

Exceptional

thank you for a great read, I loved it. such great dialogue internal and external, both. and the "la la la thing works, just ask the United States Senate.. I wish you well in all your future endeavors..

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018

Wow. A six star! I?m thrilled. Thanks a million. I remember this day like it was yesterday. Hysterical. Mother was so serious. Have a great day. I know I am, thanks to you. Zee.

reply by meeshu on 05-Oct-2018

you had me with "rats" Charlie Brown.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Absolutely loved this write - put a smile on my face that should last through the day. From the time you presented your attitude toward and through the phone call and then the reaction at the end...hilarious!! :) :) I would only suggest making the following grammatical fix:

"Republican". "That should" --> 'Republican. That should'

Thank you so very much for sharing and good luck in the contest!! :) ;)

 Comment Written 05-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 05-Oct-2018

Thanks for the fab review. I?ll try and fix my boo boo now. Zee