Comment from Shirley E Kennedy

Excellent

Hi Tony,
Another chapter filled with interest and mystery which finishes with a fine 'hook' into the next chapter.
You seem to be cruising through this book with great speed and mastering a multilingual approach with ease.
I wonder what Thailand has in store?
Blessings
Shirley

 Comment Written 12-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2018

Thanks, Shirley. I need to keep a certain impetus up, otherwise I can see this project falling by the wayside. It is largely the encouragement that I'm receiving from people on FS that is motivating me to keep going! All the best, Tony

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Ah and what finer way to be introduced to backstory than through a brochure found on the night table in one's lodgings.

We are certainly being treated to a lovely cornucopia of exotic locations.

Another fine chapter, Tony. :)

gloria

 Comment Written 11-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 12-Oct-2018

Thanks, Gloria, for making the time to read these three chapters. Much appreciated. Glad you are still enjoying it.

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

You've told this chapter well through Helen's nightmare and then the dialogue with Charles in which she reveals more about her and Kayla's travel troubles. Sounds like scary tales to come. Well told Tony,
cheers,
valda

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018

Thanks, Valda. I appreciate your comments and support. Best wishes, Tony.

Comment from rspoet

Excellent

Hello Tony,
Another excellent chapter as Helen's past is slowly revealed.
You created the difficulties Helen and sister would have encountered,
young girls without visas, in dangerous areas, very well.
Solid, believable dialogue reads smoothly.
And all this, because of a French envelope found a mart.
Well done
Robert

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018

Very many thanks, Robert. Travel seems to get more difficult by the day!

Comment from Pam (respa)

Excellent

-A good image for the chapter, Tony.
-Helen does a good job of
filling us in on her experiences
based on her disturbing,
recurring dreams.
-Charles seems to serve as
the patient listener, trying to
quell her fears.
-Her story is told well, and
sets the reader up for what is to come.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018

Many thanks, Pam. I think I may have thought of a way out of backstory by way of nightmare! LOL

reply by Pam (respa) on 04-Oct-2018

You are very welcome, Tony. Hope the nightmares aren't too bad!!

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

titivating -- that sounds naughty. I'll have to look it up.

"There's no need to look at me like that, Charles. I'm not about to give you the clap." Nice to add humor.

This seems to be a story within a story. Am I right?

Again, great information about the difficulties of traveling to foreign countries.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018

Very many thanks for your review, Shari. Yes, there is a story within a story here. With luck the two should eventually come together! Travel seems to get more and more difficult, these days. Titivating is not quite so rude as it sounds - just irritating to males when females indulge in it! LOL

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

Helen's past is so interesting I can see this story heading in a different direction than where I thought it might be going. You certainly have set the stage for whatever terrible events took place in Thailand. I am more or less entranced by your story, Tony. Keep it coming, please :)
Carol

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Oct-2018

Thanks for your comments, Carol. The story is beginning to take off in a direction that I hadn't anticipated either when I started it!
I hope that I shall get it back under control again soon! LOL

reply by ciliverde on 05-Oct-2018

Lol, sometimes the stories have a life of their own!

Comment from Earl Corp

Excellent

This is well written and builds up the suspense enough I want to see what happens next. You used a couple of phrases I had to look up in the dictionary such as titivating and French letter/ French envelope. Those may be popular terms in Australia, but Americans may ding you on their rating for using them The context around French Letter gave me a good idea but I still looked t see if I was right. Good job, can't wait for next installment.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2018

Thanks for this review. Earl, and for your comments. Much appreciated. A French Letter, in UK English and Australian English is a common way of describing a condom. Titivating is making oneself look smart and usually, for a woman, implies a whole lot of fussing about, as in applying make-up, doing one's hair, etc. Best wishes, Tony

Comment from heart of Lou

Excellent

That's interesting. Helen is frightened by nightmares, almost gives herself away as a prostitute, and tells Charles about her visit to Pakistan. What's next for this mysterious couple?

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018

What next indeed?

Comment from LIJ Red

Excellent

Excellent grammar and word choices gives one the air of visiting exotic alien places.
This chapter is a transition, but still one has a sense of the direction it moves...

 Comment Written 01-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018

Thanks, Red. As you say, a transition chapter.