The Maple Bonsai
A Rondel for Potlatch29 total reviews
Comment from l.raven
HI Yvonne, I guess there are somethings that have to be cut back...but not to far...I know I cut my Roses back every year...I don't know to much about the maple...do you cut them back???... I love your poem sweet girl...and feel sorry for this tree...looks like it would take a long time to grow back...sigh...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
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HI Yvonne, I guess there are somethings that have to be cut back...but not to far...I know I cut my Roses back every year...I don't know to much about the maple...do you cut them back???... I love your poem sweet girl...and feel sorry for this tree...looks like it would take a long time to grow back...sigh...very well written...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 06-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2018
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Sometimes, they need topping off so they won't get top heavy and blow over. Plus, I got my hair cut that week, came home and chopped on it, and had to go back for a rescue cut. Altogether, it inspired this poem. I'm so glad you enjoyed it.
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LOL...at least you got the job done...and this wonderful nature poem...LOL...love you...xxoo
Comment from LaRosa
Yeh, what IS with that? The need of man to change, to correct the simplicity of nature as he perfects his craft of 'natural-izing'?
The personification of tree growth relating to human hair, human growth, and human vanity is nicely done.
The only thing I didn't understand was the placement of periods after the phrase 'Though no one warned or told me reasons why.' Seems that you don't need it. 'Course, that's me, the non-poet speaking. :)
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2018
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Yeh, what IS with that? The need of man to change, to correct the simplicity of nature as he perfects his craft of 'natural-izing'?
The personification of tree growth relating to human hair, human growth, and human vanity is nicely done.
The only thing I didn't understand was the placement of periods after the phrase 'Though no one warned or told me reasons why.' Seems that you don't need it. 'Course, that's me, the non-poet speaking. :)
Comment Written 03-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2018
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You're right. I'll go back and change that. Thank you for catching that.
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Comment from Ulla
Awww, Yvonne, you made it sound so sad that the maple has been pruned. It lost all its tresses , but it will find that they will soon grow out and much stronger so. Bless the wee tree. I loved this wonderful poem. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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Awww, Yvonne, you made it sound so sad that the maple has been pruned. It lost all its tresses , but it will find that they will soon grow out and much stronger so. Bless the wee tree. I loved this wonderful poem. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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Thanks a bunch, Ulla.
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Yvonne,
How wonderful to personify the tree. Yes, as its tresses are cut, one has to wonder how long it took to grow to that length. Some trees are easily metered - they are the ones near the power lines or encroaching fence lines. We mark the time by how often we need to trim.
I found this poetic form to be interesting and easy to follow. Thank you for sharing,
~MP~
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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Hi, Yvonne,
How wonderful to personify the tree. Yes, as its tresses are cut, one has to wonder how long it took to grow to that length. Some trees are easily metered - they are the ones near the power lines or encroaching fence lines. We mark the time by how often we need to trim.
I found this poetic form to be interesting and easy to follow. Thank you for sharing,
~MP~
Comment Written 01-Oct-2018
reply by the author on 01-Oct-2018
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Thank you, Patty. I'm having my maple topped off. Plus, I had my hair cut last week, came home and chopped on it myself, and had to go back for a rescue cut. Will I never learn! lol
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I enjoyed how you personified the tree and actually told the poem from the trees point-of-view. You followed your format correctly for the rondel poem. A joy to read!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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I enjoyed how you personified the tree and actually told the poem from the trees point-of-view. You followed your format correctly for the rondel poem. A joy to read!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
I'm guessing someone was cutting down this tree and took a photo at this point. I like what you've done with the picture. I can't imagine a maple tree surviving with so many limbs cut off, but there is one kind of tree that can be kept trimmed into a leafy ball. It has huge heart-shaped leaves and long brown seed pods. Do you know the one I mean?
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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I'm guessing someone was cutting down this tree and took a photo at this point. I like what you've done with the picture. I can't imagine a maple tree surviving with so many limbs cut off, but there is one kind of tree that can be kept trimmed into a leafy ball. It has huge heart-shaped leaves and long brown seed pods. Do you know the one I mean?
Comment Written 30-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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Is it a sycamore? I can't think of another with heart-shaped leaves. Thank you for reviewing this. I'm not letting the man butcher my maple like that.
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I found a photo of one on bing images. This one is being pruned into a small ball. The tree is a catalpa, aka cigar tree. You can't tell from the picture, but the leaves are 10 - 15 inches long, really huge. We have one here in a forest preserve; it's not trimmed, but allowed to grow naturally. It's huge.
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Yes, of course. There's one right around the corner and down the street a bit from me. Duh!
Comment from rspoet
Hello Yvonne,
A splendid Rondel, beautifully told in first person personification.
These forms rely on strong repeat lines, yours are exceptional.
It reads quite well with smooth meter and excellent rhyme.
"How long it took to grow, I cannot say" says it all
wonderful poem
Robert
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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Hello Yvonne,
A splendid Rondel, beautifully told in first person personification.
These forms rely on strong repeat lines, yours are exceptional.
It reads quite well with smooth meter and excellent rhyme.
"How long it took to grow, I cannot say" says it all
wonderful poem
Robert
Comment Written 30-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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Thank you for this awesome review. I'm so happy you like it.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image and presentation.
-You have done a good job with the form.
-I like how you take on the
viewpoint of the tree.
-The imagery is effective, as
well as the message.
-Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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-Very nice image and presentation.
-You have done a good job with the form.
-I like how you take on the
viewpoint of the tree.
-The imagery is effective, as
well as the message.
-Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much. I appreciate the lovely remarks.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from BeasPeas
OMGoodness, Yvonne, I feel like crying. I love trees. Personification of the tree wondering what happened to it is heartbreaking. I personify everything, much to my lament. Very nicely composed. Marilyn
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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OMGoodness, Yvonne, I feel like crying. I love trees. Personification of the tree wondering what happened to it is heartbreaking. I personify everything, much to my lament. Very nicely composed. Marilyn
Comment Written 30-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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I do, too. But that's okay. We can feel things others can't. I was going to have my maple topped off to prevent it falling over in strong winds. I worry about that. The man said he'd take off 6-8 feet all around. I told him no, he won't! Plus, I had my hair cut this week, came home and chopped on it myself, and had to go back for a rescue cut. And it made me think about the tree's feelings. I'm glad we personify everything. I never know what responds and what doesn't. Who knows that feelings things have?
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Hi Yvonne. I enjoyed your comments. I've been guilty of hair chopping and needing rescue, too. One good thing about hair--it does grow back. I like your new profile photo.
I agree about keeping trees trimmed a bit so there is no danger of them falling in a storm. Something I've been considering lately, too. Marilyn
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That statue behind me looks exactly like Wally Weasel. What a coincidence. Had to take a picture of that! Thank you for liking it. 8-)
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Damommy;
> You did a fabulous job integrating the personalization of this tree's demise, As it had been made a bonsai and all the clippings were swept away without remorse.
> The rhyme scheme was very interesting in its implication for your writing was achieved in such a manner that the enjambment and a conceptual theme were very fluidly easy to understand and to read.
>Such a heartbreak for a beautiful tree that's long-lasting and to see its clippings just brushed away without any feeling.
>Thank you for sharing it take care and have a good one my friend.
Alx
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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Cheers, Damommy;
> You did a fabulous job integrating the personalization of this tree's demise, As it had been made a bonsai and all the clippings were swept away without remorse.
> The rhyme scheme was very interesting in its implication for your writing was achieved in such a manner that the enjambment and a conceptual theme were very fluidly easy to understand and to read.
>Such a heartbreak for a beautiful tree that's long-lasting and to see its clippings just brushed away without any feeling.
>Thank you for sharing it take care and have a good one my friend.
Alx
Comment Written 30-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2018
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Thank you for this marvelous review. I have a tree that I'm having topped off, but leaving the branches. The man wanted to take of 6-8 feet all around. I told him he'd better now. Plus, part of the inspiration for this is I had my hair cut this week, came home and chopped on it myself, and had to go back for a rescue trim. lol
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That was a endearing situation and a profitable one of sorts. Take care, Damommy and you're very welcome my friend have a good one.
Alx
