A Storm Blows In
A Kyrielle poem for Potlatch Poetry27 total reviews
Comment from jdrhye
Very well written and articulated. The flow, tone, and rhyme are good. It rolls off the tongue and highlights imagery as it is read. It has rained buckets since spring and I am wondering when it will cease myself. The images you have painted with your words ring true of what I see and hear from my own windowsill!
J
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Very well written and articulated. The flow, tone, and rhyme are good. It rolls off the tongue and highlights imagery as it is read. It has rained buckets since spring and I am wondering when it will cease myself. The images you have painted with your words ring true of what I see and hear from my own windowsill!
J
Comment Written 27-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Thank you for this wonderful review.
Comment from joeruptak
your poem about windowsills made my day
it put a picture in my mind
that will not go away
when I looked out my window
all I saw was gloom
but when I read your poem
sunshine filled the room
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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your poem about windowsills made my day
it put a picture in my mind
that will not go away
when I looked out my window
all I saw was gloom
but when I read your poem
sunshine filled the room
Comment Written 27-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2018
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Thank you for the wonderful review, and for the poetic response. It brightened my day, too.
Comment from sandy montgomery
I am quite fond of the kyrielle. I've written a couple myself they are challenging but fun and beautiful when done. This one is exceptional. Thank you for sharing your work.
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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I am quite fond of the kyrielle. I've written a couple myself they are challenging but fun and beautiful when done. This one is exceptional. Thank you for sharing your work.
Comment Written 24-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 24-Sep-2018
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Thank you for this great review. I like the Kyrielle, too. I agree they're fun to do.
Comment from Anne B Francis
Not knowing where you live makes me wonder if you go through these very heavy rain falls, but trust not the bad winds also. Like the flow of your poem there is something about rain hitting the window that makes one glad to be inside, it sounds lovely then
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Not knowing where you live makes me wonder if you go through these very heavy rain falls, but trust not the bad winds also. Like the flow of your poem there is something about rain hitting the window that makes one glad to be inside, it sounds lovely then
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I'm in Arkansas. We get tornadoes down here. I agree there's something about rain hitting the window. Can't explain it, but it gives me a cozy feeling. Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from judiverse
This is such an interesting form. I may have to try it. Your rhyme pattern works well, and you've certainly chosen excellent words to bring out the impact of the storm--crash, gales torment, dark thunderclouds and torrential downpours help paint a picture. "As raindrops splash my windowsills" is effective in personalizing the storm. judi
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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This is such an interesting form. I may have to try it. Your rhyme pattern works well, and you've certainly chosen excellent words to bring out the impact of the storm--crash, gales torment, dark thunderclouds and torrential downpours help paint a picture. "As raindrops splash my windowsills" is effective in personalizing the storm. judi
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Thank you, Judy. Try one. I know you can do it. It's not hard once you get started. Let me know when you post it.
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You're welcome. I've already been giving it a try. judi
Comment from Boogienights
Loved this! I really like storms and you made being warm and cozy inside so appealing. The picture too evoked feelings of excitement and anticipation of storms to come. I like hot buttered popcorn, a good book and my electric blanket. Thanks for sharing this.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Loved this! I really like storms and you made being warm and cozy inside so appealing. The picture too evoked feelings of excitement and anticipation of storms to come. I like hot buttered popcorn, a good book and my electric blanket. Thanks for sharing this.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Those are the things I like, too, anytime, but especially during a storm. Thank you for a great review.
Comment from Knighteagle
Well done, I struggled with this challenge. Though yours is quite smooth and easy read. I am looking forward to that autumn weather, but it is still coming. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Well done, I struggled with this challenge. Though yours is quite smooth and easy read. I am looking forward to that autumn weather, but it is still coming. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Me, too. I'm ready for some cool time. Thank you for this great review. I'm sure you can do one, too. Let me know if you do.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, I loved this kyrielle about the storm coming in. Your lovely words paint a lovely picture in my mind. I'm just there. Great rhyming and rhythm. I liked it a lot. Good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Hi Yvonne, I loved this kyrielle about the storm coming in. Your lovely words paint a lovely picture in my mind. I'm just there. Great rhyming and rhythm. I liked it a lot. Good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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It was storming here when I wrote this. I glad you could see it, too. Thank you, Ulla.
Comment from Sally Law
Enjoy your sixer! Fine poetry from you here, and on your birthday! This piece is appropriate to what we are experiencing right now with the hurricanes and flooding. Hope you are well and safe. Sal
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Enjoy your sixer! Fine poetry from you here, and on your birthday! This piece is appropriate to what we are experiencing right now with the hurricanes and flooding. Hope you are well and safe. Sal
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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Oh, goodness, we didn't have any hurricanes and only a bit of flash flooding. I hope you stay safe. Thank you for the exceptional review. Let me know how you fare in the storms.
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Just mt youngest son, he lives in Raleigh. He said he made it back home safely.
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That's so good to know. Thanks for telling me. My grandson is in Richmond VA, and was ready to run. So far, everything is okay there.
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Good to hear!
Comment from Cindy McIntyre
I really enjoy the rhyming pattern of the Kyrielle poetry style. The repeated lines of verse really add a lot of power to the words that are written. Your topic of the rainstorm is well-written with so much imagery...I could hear the raindrops!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I really enjoy the rhyming pattern of the Kyrielle poetry style. The repeated lines of verse really add a lot of power to the words that are written. Your topic of the rainstorm is well-written with so much imagery...I could hear the raindrops!
Comment Written 23-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2018
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I'm so glad you could hear the raindrops, and I appreciate such a lovely review.
