Comment from tempeste

Exceptional

ciao Poet!

I gave you your second vote in this competition. It was a very intelligent entry ..someone uses to riddles could have figured it out.. but I don't see the writing on the wall and I need things spelt out to me...[biggrin]

Anyways , once I read the meaning I read the poem again ..and the message you were trying to convey secretly was obvious then.

You also made it rhyme which won you the extra star ..well done !

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2018

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018

BiENVENIDA! You are true to your name, you stormed into my Poetry Nook corner with a wonderful supportive review, I really appreciate it. I see you are making good impressions with your poetry already on this FS site.
Ciao, Trisha

reply by tempeste on 21-Oct-2018

Thanks for the bienvenida...or in my case benvenuta I'm Italian (papá) and Dutch (mamma)!

Writing is something new ..I started in July this year and I'm enjoying it for now.

Take care Trisha !

reply by the author on 21-Oct-2018

I wish you happy penning

Comment from Marie Werner

Excellent

I love the brevity of language here - its clean and sparse and really hammers your point home. Its also cleverly crafted to match the goal of the hidden message contest.

I think the use of pin in the last line should really be capitalized, since its an acronym.

Nice work. :)

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018

I think your correct, Marie. I thank you for that idea, and your compliments.
Hugs, Trisha

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem about a very secret message that is not really secret to those who know the answer. It is better to gather treasures from heaven than the riches of earth that will mean nothing when the prize is given.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018

I agree. This was a fun challenge to meet. Thanks for you spiritual thoughts
Hugs, Trisha

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

How fun, Trish!! :) :) You have this whole secret code thing down -- and you've done a great job with this one! :) :) Love the entire concept of life being a long term loan - two thumbs up! :) :)

Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest! :)

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018

I appreciate your kind and complimentary review.
Hugs, Trisha

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Wise words here and the last line is magical! Wealth is in our bones, not in what we owns! Clever rhyming and great sentiments here Trisha, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018

It was fun to write, thanks for your kind review
Hugs, Trisha

Comment from Carlie Beth

Excellent

This feels so relevant, it really reflects an issue I think society has. I loved the word choice and rhyme. I loved that it went straight to the point and made a statement. Really made me stop and think. "The prize you will win - does not need a pin". Absolutely wonderful, well done. Good luck on the contest!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2018

Thanks, Carlie. I appreciated your complimentary review,
hugs, Trisha

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Very nicely written contest entry, BL. The comparisons of life to a bank account is inspired as is your verse and terrific rhymes.

I wish you much luck in the booth with this beauty.

Gloria

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018

Thank you very much for your supportive review. It was fun no matter happens.

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

these code poems are going to be fun to read and review. if success is measured by the number of readers who get it, put me in your win column, Trisha.............meeshu

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2018

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reply by the author on 14-Sep-2018

What a wonderful review, Meeshu! I appreciate your review and faith in my penning
Hugs, Trisha