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Ephemeral Paradox

From a vision within the periphery...

28 total reviews 
Comment from Air Spirit
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I really enjoyed and admire your alliterative poem. Alliteration is one of my favorite poetic devices. I believe it really helps to 'drive home' a feeling, effect, mood or message, no matter what it happens to be. It is emphatic and is powerful in its impact. The fact that you also painted a sense of discordance and conflict between two parallels, makes it that much more interesting... "...dancing dangerously with dissent and delight;..."
Excellent!

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
    Wow, Air Spirit!! :) Thank you so very much for your review, and especially for those wonderful and insightful comments - always much appreciated! :) :) Goodness knows that between the alliteration and the fun words, I actually had real fun writing it! :) ;) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome remainder of the week filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from misscookie
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Wow!
Yes in deed This was deep
You captured my attention from the first line to the last
This is truly what I call a food for thought poem
Thank you for sharing
Cookie

 Comment Written 11-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 12-Sep-2018
    Thank you so much for your review, MissCookie! :) :) And I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Have a wonderful evening, ma'am! :)
reply by misscookie on 13-Sep-2018
    Your very welcome. Until next time.
    Cookie

Comment from Debbie Pope
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This is awesome, Yvette. I love each line. I love the rhythm when I read them aloud. And, I like the complex nature of the theme. The alliteration is what makes the poem though. It was such a clever idea to carry out the abc letter idea throughout the entire line. Except for the occasional preposition, you are true to your letter.
I would not be surprised if you do not at least place with this.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
    Wow, Debbie!! :) Thank you so very much for your review, and especially for those wonderful comments! :) :) You have guaranteed I will face those wonderful teenagers tomorrow with a smile on my face - much appreciated! :) :) You know me, as the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics like that to include paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) I wish I had high hopes like you about a win, but I'm gonna stick with 'it was certainly fun writing this one' -- I will let you think about a win for the both of us, ma'am! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome remainder of the week filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Debbie Pope on 11-Sep-2018
    Let me rephrase my comment. You should win. Who knows what they are looking for.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
    Ha!! Okay, you really just made me smile ... even if it is a little frustratingly! ;) ;) ;) Thanx for that, Beautiful B'ham Friend!! :) Yeah, who really knows??! :)
Comment from Shanbreen
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Yvette, love the title. I fits so well with your ABC poem.

"expectations of engagement emerge..." falsifying the paradox. =)

Well done. I hope you had a win in this contest.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
    Hey, Shanbreen, thanx much for your review -- know poetry's not your 'thing'! :) :) I wish I had hopes about a win, but I'm gonna stick with 'it was certainly fun writing this one'! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome remainder of the week filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Shanbreen on 12-Sep-2018
    Yvette, you will one day. BTW, I'm taking creative poetry classes at the local community college -- starts in about two weeks after I return from NY. I do write poems but am not sure what makes a good poem.
Comment from rspoet
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Hello YM
Yes, it is those borders, edges, where change occurs
that delight the imagination.
Perhaps that is why the Mobius strip is so interesting.
You've written a fine alliterating ABC poem
that might even win the contest
Now, who would have predicted that?
Best wishes
Robert

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
    Wow, Robert!! :) Thank you so very much for your review, and especially for those wonderful comments! :) :) You have guaranteed I will start the rest of my week off with a smile on my face - much appreciated! :) :) And as for that Mobius strip - gotta love the intrigue one presents, yeah? :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics like that to include paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) I wish I had high hopes like you about a win, but I'm gonna stick with 'it was certainly fun writing this one' -- I will let you think about a win for the both of us, sir! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-I like the image and presentation, Yvette.
-I like the creative way you used alliteration,
and also added rhyme, painting a
vivid word picture.
-I like the line with "dancing dangerously."
-Good luck in the contest.


 Comment Written 10-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
    Thank you, Pam, for all of your wonderful comments -- always so good to read the ones that really got something out of my effort -- dancing dangerously is actually a favorite phrase of mine! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thank you for stopping by for the read and review and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Pam (respa) on 10-Sep-2018
    You are very welcome, Yvette. Thanks for sharing.
Comment from Ricky1024
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

This is an 'ABC Poetry Contest Entree Rich in Theme and Imagery.
It Read well and flowed well with no Grammar errors.
Adjective Content and Objective Content were both Excellent and Exceptional.
Descriptive Measures aligned perfectly.
Good luck with this and have a Blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024.

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
    Thank you, Doc, for your wonderful review -- always so good to hear from you! :) :) And, just so you know, you have guaranteed I will start the rest of my week off with a smile on my face with those six stars - much appreciated! :) :) You know, as the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thank you for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Ricky1024 on 10-Sep-2018
    what's 1 trillion + 3 10 billion + 10 1 million + 6 divided by 1 trillion + 3 10 billion + 10 + 1 billion + 6 what's your answer crazy math lady who is the teacher dr. Ricky 1024 if you get this correct not only do you get an A on this but you get six more stars in the future of on your writing
Comment from WildWithWords
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Very clever use of alliteration in this ABC poem.

Many might see it as overdone but I don't. Did you find that picture first and then write about it ? It's surprisingly apt for the poetry. Excellent choice.

Bill (WildWithWords)

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
    Thanx for the review, Bill, and, nah, I always pick out my pictures last...poems go on paper on the front porch or the bedside and the pics come when it's time to post! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thank you for stopping by for the read and review and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by WildWithWords on 10-Sep-2018
    Crazy math lady... love it.

    The summer heat comment was interesting. I wish. Just coming out of a long (albeit not severe) winter down here in Sydney, Australia.There are a lot more of us Aussies on this site than you think.

    Have a great day/night/morning/tomorrow.

    Bill (WildWithWords)
Comment from Ideasaregems-Dawn
Exceptional
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Wow - genuinely one of the best ABC poems I have ever read - I LOVED it! The topic, the alliteration, the presentation, the use words in each line to match the starting letter - it's even rhymed, and metered wonderfully!!! I predict a winner, my friend (and I hope I'm right. If I am not, I will sure want to read what beats THIS jewel!)

 Comment Written 10-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
    Wow, Dawn - I'm honored!! :) Thank you so very much for your review, and especially for those wonderful comments! :) :) You have guaranteed I will start the rest of my week off with a smile on my face - much appreciated! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) I wish I had high hopes like you about a win, but I'm gonna stick with 'it was certainly fun writing this one' -- I will let you dream about a win for the both of us, Beautiful Lady! :) ;) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)
reply by Ideasaregems-Dawn on 10-Sep-2018
    :))))))) You are very welcome -- it was my pleasure.
Comment from bob cullen
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That is a very clever adaption of the abc poetry contest. And the alliteration sure adds to the appeal of this poem. For that reason alone, I think you should win this contest. Good luck

 Comment Written 09-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 10-Sep-2018
    Thank you so very much for your review, Bob, and especially for those wonderful comments! :) :) You have guaranteed I will start the rest of the week off with a smile on my face - much appreciated! :) :) As the Crazy Math Lady, I'm always fascinated by topics such as paradoxes, duality, chaos, and more so, once in a while, it seeps into the writing...or takes over as was probably more of the case here! LOL! :) :) Thanx for stopping by for the read and may you have an awesome week ahead filled with cool shady spots amidst the fading summer heat...and smiles about them both!! :) ;) Yvette :)