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A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities

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A collection of poems showcasing unusual words

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Comment from Dawn Munro
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*grin*... I'm b-a-a-a-c-k...

I don't think the word's use is much out of hand.
I'm charmed by the lushness of pictures you paint.
My mind is awash with the beauty of land
supporting a curtsying flower; so quaint!

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2018
    Oh, welcome back! The prodigal has returned lol -- good to see you.

    Thanks so much for the wonderful comments and delightful rating, Dawn. I'm looking forward to checking out what you've brought back with you.

reply by Dawn Munro on 09-Sep-2018
    It was a pleasure, Craig, and thank you for the welcomed return and the enthusiasm. My month off was well-needed. In fact, it was so good, I don't think I will wait six or seven years this time before I do it again. :))
Comment from --Turtle.
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This is a super word, and a fun, vivid set of examples illustrating the theme of prosopopoeia. (I wish I could say the word, it would maybe help remember the term which so many writers use so often.

I'm running on empty tonight, but I really enjoyed reading through the humanized descriptions of a tranquil, alive place. Great phrasing, easy rhymes, and I had no trouble with getting into the groove of the beat, with a zelousness that works with the endline pointing out that each line's humanization is done with purpose.

Nicely done.


 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    I think "personification" is a lot easier to get the tongue around than "prosopopoeia".

    I'm very grateful for the wonderful rating, Turtle. It generally doesn't bother me a lot if I don't get too many, or any, top ratings for a poem; but I was quite fond of this silly little thing, and feeling a bit put out on its behalf that it had been given no love. That you saw fit to show it kindness made me happy :)

    Most grateful,

    Craig
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
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You did a great job, Craig, with your poem from the word of the day book. Your presentation is great--the picture, the color scheme, the rhymes, the use of that special word--all work to create great imagery and leave readers with wonderful thoughts. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Thanks so much, Jan. I really appreciate the lovely comments :) Craig
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Hi, Craig,

I've often been accused of 'prosopopoeia.' When I'm doing housework, I sometimes talk to the chairs, the vacuum cleaner, brooms, and mops.

I have a vivid imagination, and these conversations are usually full of swearing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Talking to chairs, vacuums and brooms is perfectly normal, Patty. It's when they start answering back that those close to us tend to start worrying. Especially if the messages are telling us to do bad things :) Thanks for reviewing -- Craig
Comment from Teri7
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Craig, This is a very well written poem with very good descriptive words and very lovely imagery from the art work. I believe that it is a living thing as God does not make dead things. I have not heard of that word before now. Thanks for sharing with us. Blessings, Teri

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Thanks very much for the lovely comments, Teri. I'm always grateful for your reviews -- Craig
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Oh, but you were in a roll there! ;) Actually, a brilliant piece to define/illustrate the word today and really sneak up on the reader with an actual lesson ! ;) ;) Love that flowers curtsey!! ;)

Thank you for sharing! ;) Yvette ;)

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Thanks so much, Yvette. I very much appreciate the lovely comments -- Craig
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
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A very well-written rhyming poem and personification of the beautiful living things of nature. The winds that whispers secrets to men, we often hear but don't listen. A great presentation as a whole.

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Thanks very much for the lovely comments, Sandra. Have a great weekend! Cheers, Craig
Comment from Gloria ....
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Well this is a lovely pastoral, and fine use of a new word. I'm rather glad all the delights of nature don't talk or it would get to be really confusing out there.

Much enjoy the metre and rhyme and the last line sums up my feelings precisely.

Good one, Craig.

Gloria

 Comment Written 07-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Haha, thanks Gloria. Your kind words made me feel as warm as a rock in the desert sun. Oops! Oh well, it was time to turn the tables on those pesky inanimate objects :) Cheers, Craig
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi Craig. This is well metered, well rhymed and flows well. I had no clue what the new word meant. My meter reader stumbled over one spot where the meter did not match the other lines.

Here you have two stressed sounds in a row.

"Time stands still its ground in this place so serene,"

I was thinking maybe

"Time stops on the ground in this place so serene,"

Of course It is your poem. Looks like you had a thought of time standing it's ground and then changed it to time stands still.

"Time stands so still in this place so serene" is another possibility.

Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Hi Pam,

    I'm grateful for the suggestion, but I think it's ok. I hope you won't mind if I say why. I'll just reproduce one stanza, with the emphasis added:

    The RI-ver me-AN-ders at WILL through the GLEN,

    and WINDS whisper SE-crets for-BID-den to MEN.

    Time STANDS still its GROUND in this PLACE so se-RENE,

    where WOR-ries are HI-ding, no-WHERE to be SEEN

    This is called trochaic meter, and each line is the same pattern:

    da-DUM da-da-DUM da-da-DUM da-da-DUM.

    I think the issue is whether "time" requires a strong emphasis. I think it depends on the context, and probably isn't as clear cut as words like "the" or "and". In any case, I'll give some thought to alternatives, so thanks for bringing it up :)

    Craig
reply by Pamusart on 07-Sep-2018
    I never mind suggestions. I welcome them so I am glad that you don?t mind. We can always decide against suggestions, can?t we? Happy rumination!
reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Well, after re-reading it a few times, I thought I could do better. So, I've changed it; hopefully it's an improvement. Thanks again!
Comment from Flyaway1
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Loved it. The imagery, the words flowed. Sounds like a place I would want to be. Well penned. I liked the visual and colors used to promote your words.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2018


reply by the author on 07-Sep-2018
    Thanks for the lovely comments - they're appreciated. Craig