Wally Weasel's Stories
Viewing comments for Chapter 18 "Wally Weasel's Vacation"He's not choosy about what he paints.
32 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
What a great and inexpensive way to take a vacation.
I think kids will love to read along and act out Wally's adventures
including the hurt knee and the bumblebee sting. ouch!
Nicely written in easy meter and rhyme.
Best wishes in the contest
RS
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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What a great and inexpensive way to take a vacation.
I think kids will love to read along and act out Wally's adventures
including the hurt knee and the bumblebee sting. ouch!
Nicely written in easy meter and rhyme.
Best wishes in the contest
RS
Comment Written 11-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2018
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Thank you. Wally gets into all kinds of scrapes. lol
Comment from Gloria ....
Ha, well there is Wally and I'll bet I know who he's bringing along with him. Great job Yvonne and I must say I am thrilled to see that Mister Wally is back to entertain us in perfect metre and rhyme once again.
Best of luck to you in the contest with this beauty. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018
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Ha, well there is Wally and I'll bet I know who he's bringing along with him. Great job Yvonne and I must say I am thrilled to see that Mister Wally is back to entertain us in perfect metre and rhyme once again.
Best of luck to you in the contest with this beauty. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 04-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much, Gloria. You inspired me to bring him back. I was afraid everyone was tired of him. Thank you for your support. You're a good friend.
Comment from jenintorre
This a very good children's poem that you have written. Excellent rhyme and rhythm. Well done. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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This a very good children's poem that you have written. Excellent rhyme and rhythm. Well done. I wish you lots of luck in the competition. Best wishes. Jen.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much.
Comment from A. Willow Bends
So cute! I can see this turning into a children's book! I hope that is where you are headed with it! Creative, flowing, rhythmic! I am OUT of sixes, so sorry. The artwork is great with your poem. Overall nicely done! Good Luck!
Wendy
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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So cute! I can see this turning into a children's book! I hope that is where you are headed with it! Creative, flowing, rhythmic! I am OUT of sixes, so sorry. The artwork is great with your poem. Overall nicely done! Good Luck!
Wendy
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you so much. Yes, I'm putting together a book with the other Wally stories.
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Awesome!
Wendy
Comment from Pantygynt
He must have fallen into a deep sleep because we haven't seen him for some time. Until I got to the 'it was all a dream' bit I thought how like a child's day this was turning out, dashing about doing a mass of thinggs, taking the odd knock, losing this and finding that. It was all reminiscent of my own childhood when school was out.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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He must have fallen into a deep sleep because we haven't seen him for some time. Until I got to the 'it was all a dream' bit I thought how like a child's day this was turning out, dashing about doing a mass of thinggs, taking the odd knock, losing this and finding that. It was all reminiscent of my own childhood when school was out.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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He's been lazy as of late. Thank you for this delightful review. Did you not like the ending? I wondered about that.
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I wasn't expecting it to end like that for reasons that I mentioned in my review.
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Fair enough. 8-)
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent. I found myself enjoying Wally's adventures as I read. Good flow and pacing. Rhyming spot on. Poem reads well silently and out loud. What a fun dream to have! Kids should love this. As well as kid like adults (me). Hugh
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Excellent. I found myself enjoying Wally's adventures as I read. Good flow and pacing. Rhyming spot on. Poem reads well silently and out loud. What a fun dream to have! Kids should love this. As well as kid like adults (me). Hugh
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you for saying so. I appreciate y our wonderful remarks.
Comment from Boogienights
This is delightful! Kids would love Wally weasel and his adventures. Its easy to understand, I love the rhyme and I'd love to go on his adventure with him even if it was a dream. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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This is delightful! Kids would love Wally weasel and his adventures. Its easy to understand, I love the rhyme and I'd love to go on his adventure with him even if it was a dream. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank you. I'm so happy you liked it this much. It's part of a book I've written, hoping someday to publish is.
Comment from LaRosa
Oh, my goodness, what a wonderful child's tale.
Wish my great granddaughter was old enough to share it with. So I must save it and hope it comes out in book form by then. Think???
Wish I had a Six for you.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Oh, my goodness, what a wonderful child's tale.
Wish my great granddaughter was old enough to share it with. So I must save it and hope it comes out in book form by then. Think???
Wish I had a Six for you.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Yes, I plan on getting it published when I figure how to do it. How old is your granddaughter?
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Actually she's my great-granddaughter and she's almost 5 months old. So your book will be out in time even if you have to wait a while. :)
Comment from Ogden
Your poem is almost perfect, and in my opinion would be perfection without the quatrain about the bat cave. I have nothing against bats, but that stanza is a departure from the spirit that makes the rest of the poem so delightful.
Good luck in the contest!
Don
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Your poem is almost perfect, and in my opinion would be perfection without the quatrain about the bat cave. I have nothing against bats, but that stanza is a departure from the spirit that makes the rest of the poem so delightful.
Good luck in the contest!
Don
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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I'm sorry you think that. I was alluding to Carlsbad Caverns where it exciting to see the bats come and go. Thank you for not counting down on that. Maybe people would.
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No way would I downgrade for that, but (despite your intention) I insist that stanza, as written, is counter to the tenor of the piece, which is much better, without it. Remember, I'm on your side!
Don
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I know you are. Thank you, my friend.
Comment from Zue65
This is one of the best children's poems I have ever reviewed in this site. The rhymes are so smooth, young children will enjoy reading this piece again and again. Thanks for sharing an excellent write.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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This is one of the best children's poems I have ever reviewed in this site. The rhymes are so smooth, young children will enjoy reading this piece again and again. Thanks for sharing an excellent write.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2018
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Thank YOU for reviewing. I'm so happy you like it. There are other Wally stories in a book on here.
