The French Letter
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29 total reviews
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
Hi Tony,
I enjoyed this eventful chapter which you have brought to life with lively banter and descriptive language.
Although I know little of French language or history you've caught me up in the quest for discovery.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Hi Tony,
I enjoyed this eventful chapter which you have brought to life with lively banter and descriptive language.
Although I know little of French language or history you've caught me up in the quest for discovery.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 18-Sep-2018
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2018
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Thanks, Shirley. Glad you are enjoying the incidental banter as the plot progresses. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great scene with the fierce rain storm, no visibility, (I hate driving in that weather) and him with his eyes closed, and hanging on in hope.
Great chapter Tony, with plenty happening, enjoyed it and in particular the dialogue between these two characters.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Great scene with the fierce rain storm, no visibility, (I hate driving in that weather) and him with his eyes closed, and hanging on in hope.
Great chapter Tony, with plenty happening, enjoyed it and in particular the dialogue between these two characters.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 22-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Fortunately we don't get weather like that in South Australia, but I remember it well of my years in Europe! Thanks very much for your supportive comments and the six stars. Much appreciated, as always. All the best, Tony
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Tony Wow. What a great story this is. I love the plot and moreover, the imagery you used throughout, my friend. Like this:
" a brilliant staircase of lightning."
And here: A double shot for the reader: "Her words were almost drowned by the roar of a semi-trailer rushing past." and: "It threw up a spray of grey slush, like a warning shot across our bows." (Nice similie here too)
And what a great way to bring this one to a close, tony:
"...having a last meal before the guillotine falls."
"Don't be like that! We're on the trail of something exciting here."
Good writing all the way through, my friend. :) Bob
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Hi, Tony Wow. What a great story this is. I love the plot and moreover, the imagery you used throughout, my friend. Like this:
" a brilliant staircase of lightning."
And here: A double shot for the reader: "Her words were almost drowned by the roar of a semi-trailer rushing past." and: "It threw up a spray of grey slush, like a warning shot across our bows." (Nice similie here too)
And what a great way to bring this one to a close, tony:
"...having a last meal before the guillotine falls."
"Don't be like that! We're on the trail of something exciting here."
Good writing all the way through, my friend. :) Bob
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Many thanks, Bob. I appreciate your supportive and affirming comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from rspoet
Hello Tony,
These two seem like the proverbial match made in Heaven,
or at least a match made in the mind of Tony Fawcus.
Saints, alive. Saint Clodoald.
I'll have to remember that during the next thunderstorm.
It's odd how the name "Google Maps" jumped off the page
and seemed strangely out of place to me among all the saints and pastries
though after thinking about it, it is our modern world.
"it is only the Hunchback who rings the bells!" loved the humor?
The dialogue between the Dr Laurent, Madam Lafarvre, Helen and Charles is excellent
And the chapter is exceptional
Well done
Robert
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Hello Tony,
These two seem like the proverbial match made in Heaven,
or at least a match made in the mind of Tony Fawcus.
Saints, alive. Saint Clodoald.
I'll have to remember that during the next thunderstorm.
It's odd how the name "Google Maps" jumped off the page
and seemed strangely out of place to me among all the saints and pastries
though after thinking about it, it is our modern world.
"it is only the Hunchback who rings the bells!" loved the humor?
The dialogue between the Dr Laurent, Madam Lafarvre, Helen and Charles is excellent
And the chapter is exceptional
Well done
Robert
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thanks very much for these comments, Robert, and for the six stars. Most affirming. All the best, Tony
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image for the chapter, Tony.
-The imagery and dialogue about
the storm and driving in it is effective.
-I thought this was a good line,
as Charles was trying to stay
alive with Helen driving: "I'm going to die!"
-The scene in the veterinary clinic is
good, as it takes us back to the letter,
and introduces the older lady who
seems to be the local busy body, but
is not open to much in the way of
discussion, since 'it is none of her
business,' and we know it probably is!
-The concluding reference to the
picnic ties in nicely to the
beginning of the chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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-Good image for the chapter, Tony.
-The imagery and dialogue about
the storm and driving in it is effective.
-I thought this was a good line,
as Charles was trying to stay
alive with Helen driving: "I'm going to die!"
-The scene in the veterinary clinic is
good, as it takes us back to the letter,
and introduces the older lady who
seems to be the local busy body, but
is not open to much in the way of
discussion, since 'it is none of her
business,' and we know it probably is!
-The concluding reference to the
picnic ties in nicely to the
beginning of the chapter.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Very many thanks for these positive comments, Pam, and for the six stars - not to mention your considerable ongoing help! Best wishes, Tony
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars, comments, and support, Tony.
Comment from LIJ Red
And here I come, waddling in at the middle, not a fan of the French and knowing zip point cypher of their language or what these folks are up to, but have to admit, the exchanges of dialog, the images of the scenery,and the pacing of the narrative are the mark of an excellent writer.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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And here I come, waddling in at the middle, not a fan of the French and knowing zip point cypher of their language or what these folks are up to, but have to admit, the exchanges of dialog, the images of the scenery,and the pacing of the narrative are the mark of an excellent writer.
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thanks for dropping by, Red. Appreciated. Thanks, too, for the positive comments. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from friartuck
Very interesting, and informative as well! I really enjoy reading things that leave me with something I had not known before, and in this case, I had never heard of St. Clodoald. Your settings are captivating as well. I enjoyed it!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Very interesting, and informative as well! I really enjoy reading things that leave me with something I had not known before, and in this case, I had never heard of St. Clodoald. Your settings are captivating as well. I enjoyed it!
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thanks, friartuck. I appreciate your review and kind words. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from giraffmang
Ah, so they make some headway here in the search for the mysterious woman. Nice
"Dr Laurent," she said. "how can I be of help?" - the dialogue after the speech tag should start capitalised. there is a full stop/period after the tag closing off the sentence.
"There was quite scandal, but that's none of - quite a scandal?
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Ah, so they make some headway here in the search for the mysterious woman. Nice
"Dr Laurent," she said. "how can I be of help?" - the dialogue after the speech tag should start capitalised. there is a full stop/period after the tag closing off the sentence.
"There was quite scandal, but that's none of - quite a scandal?
Comment Written 21-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Gareth. I appreciate your winkling out of nits. More progress in the next Chapter.
Comment from Gloria ....
Hail stones most definitely can damage vehicles, so hopefully the Fiat is okay as I've already grown a certain affinity to it.
HA, Clodoald sounds fictitious to me but after such a narrow escape it's perfectly acceptable.
love the diamond-studded shafts of light. Original image. Much enjoy the poodle giving away mme's little white lie, good cue to further investigate.
Another terrific chapter Tony. Looking forward to the next. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Hail stones most definitely can damage vehicles, so hopefully the Fiat is okay as I've already grown a certain affinity to it.
HA, Clodoald sounds fictitious to me but after such a narrow escape it's perfectly acceptable.
love the diamond-studded shafts of light. Original image. Much enjoy the poodle giving away mme's little white lie, good cue to further investigate.
Another terrific chapter Tony. Looking forward to the next. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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I'm hoping the fact that neither Charles or Helen have mentioned any damage means that there wasn't any; at least, nothing significant. Of course, they may have had other things on their minds...
If that darned Fiat keeps cropping up in the story, maybe I'll have to give her a name. Fifi, perhaps! (It looks as if she already has a gender!)
Surprisingly, Clodoald was St Cloud's original name, way back around 500 AD. What exceedingly useless facts one can pick up these days using a Google search! LOL
Comment from estory
The episode of the hailstorm is harrowing, and you put us right there with the hail spattering on the windshield and the car almost going out of control as you hang on for dear life with your eyes closed. Then there is a deepening of the mystery as apparently this woman Suzanne is involved in some kind of scandal, but the old lady in Versailles will not say exactly what. So we will have to see what Helen and Frank dig up....estory
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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The episode of the hailstorm is harrowing, and you put us right there with the hail spattering on the windshield and the car almost going out of control as you hang on for dear life with your eyes closed. Then there is a deepening of the mystery as apparently this woman Suzanne is involved in some kind of scandal, but the old lady in Versailles will not say exactly what. So we will have to see what Helen and Frank dig up....estory
Comment Written 20-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2018
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Thanks, estory. Glad the hailstorm had a touch of realism. It looks as if the plot may be about to thicken.
