Comment from mally mack

Good

Hi there

Your message is true. There is a difference between faith and ignorance. I think that with some polishing this could be a really powerful piece. The he/she/it concept is great but it is way over the top all around. It is redundant throughout which loses the reader nearly immediately. I do love the words in between though. There has to be a way to tone that down a bit to translate better so you message is heard.

Best

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018

---

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018

Mally mack thank you for your review. giovanni

Comment from trimple

Excellent

Good afternoon, Gio

Do I have this right? What you saying is that we assume a leader to be one thing, as we like what he/she/it alludes to be and yet without the wisdom of the ancients, we are often screwed over?

I cannot imagine what it must be like to rule a nation. We have built up society as it stands over a very long time. Layers get added as we progress, or not, as the case is for some...

A domino effect happens with all we do...


kind regards

trimple

Nice to see your writing again.

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018

---

reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018

Trimple thank you for your review & the birthday notice. giovanni