Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Craig,

An urban legend, to be sure. I can only imagine that Sue might not have been so calm to calm him a 'dimwit.' I think the words may have been just a bit bluer.

Thank you for sharing another new word through your wonderful poetry,

~patty~

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018

No, no. I'm certain she said "dimwit", or something that's a perfect rhyme with it :) Thanks so much, Patty, for the lovely comments.

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Uhhhhh, that was tough luck. Yeah, it was a bit recless to only have the foot on the brake. What a fun poem that word inspired you to write. I'm still smiling. All the best. Ulla:))

 Comment Written 18-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 18-Aug-2018

Thanks very much, Ulla. I'm sure he'll never make that mistake again :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Ah so sad for the would be lovers - seems like with that much blame-throwing, their relationship would have been doomed above the waters. Great storytelling in this one with fine meter and rhyme!

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018

Thanks very much, Helen. Much appreciated.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great presentation, Craig--the color scheme works well, the picture is perfect, the rhymes are great, your word fit in nicely, & the internal rhyme is an added bonus. Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018

Thanks very much, Jan. I'm greatly for the kind comments.

Comment from Y. M. Roger

Excellent

Oh my goodness -- that is truly an outlandishly homespun tale to beat the band -- love it!! :) :) Unrecking, huh? :) I like it...must be the forerunner to wreckless or something .... either way, it applies to teenagers in general most times!! :) :)

Great job with your chosen scheme, too, not sure I've ever seen one done exactly like that....at least not laid out the way you have it. Flows well off the tongue when read out loud lending to the "fun tale" of the whole thing1 :) :)

Thanx for sharing! :) ;)

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018

Thanks very much for the wonderful comments. They're very much appreciated.

Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

Sucking face? Really now.
Actually, your notes are funny. The poem is as well. What a spoof on lover's tragedy. I like the name calling. That's the spoof part to me--especially when combined with sucking face.
This was fun.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018

Thanks very much, Debbie. Yes, it really was a thing once upon a time lol

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

A fine ballad measure here to tell the sad tale of Davy Mills and his sweetheart. I couldn't help wondering if he was any relation to Davy Jones. I guess that the moral here is not to hit the brakes at the height of passion.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018

NOW you tell him. Thanks so much, Tony, much appreciated. Craig

Comment from Robbie Yates

Exceptional

Ahahahahahah! This is truly fantastic. I love the internal rhyme on the odd-numbered lines, and your humorous vocabulary, and the light way you approached what could be a dark tale. It reminds me of "Waltzing Matilda" in that sense. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018

Thanks so much for the wonderful comments, Robbie, and for the delightful gift of six stars. I'm very grateful, and surprised. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written tale about the way a couple meets their end at the time when they are deeply in the love-making phase, another comes to bring their lives to an end, they are still around the lake, wondering what really happened.

 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018

Thanks very much, Sandra, for the kind comments. Your review are always appreciated. Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

I love the photograph, Craig. But geeze you really know how to write up a romantic poem. ;-)

I guess now they're stuck together forevermore in that lake and by the sounds of things might need to find other more entertaining activities. lol

Great job and a fun read. :)

Gloria

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 Comment Written 17-Aug-2018

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reply by the author on 17-Aug-2018

I KNEW I should have entered it in the romance contest.

Thanks for the fun review, Gloria :)