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A roving romeo.

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Comment from Sharon Haiste
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I think this is a good entry for the 50 Word Story writing prompt.
You have told a true story in only 50 words. Not an easy thing to do.
Good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon

 Comment Written 07-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
    It had to be a true story? Well... I'm alive. I guess the doctors succeeded. Thank you Sharon.
Comment from rspoet
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This is an excellent little bit of craziness for the contest of fifty words.
The hospital is the last place you want to be, and if you remain there,
it will be the last place you stay.
Hope you recover soon
And good luck in the contest
RS

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
    Thank you rspoet. I'm alive and well.
Comment from victor 66
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A very solid and funny story told in fifty words. I also appreciate that there is a lighter side to your very short story. The only part I didn't quite get was, what was consumed that needed to be fixed? Best wishes.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
    Thank you victor 66. What you asked is well... only for the doctors to know.
reply by victor 66 on 08-Aug-2018
    You are welcome.
Comment from bob cullen
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How good it was to read this. The last piece I reviewed ran to several thousand words.
A story in fifty words, that is a challenge. You've done well. I would however suggest you change the last two words. To me, 'the thing," is too vague. It could mean anything. Would 'the addiction' work better. I'll leave that with you to decide. Good luck.

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 07-Aug-2018
    Thank you Bob. Well, instead of fixing it they connected it. I'm done with that addiction.
Comment from Mustang Patty
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Dear Anon,

So, what are we supposed to take from this statement? What is the 'thing' the doctors are trying to fix? Is it the part of the body that always leads a man into trouble?

Interesting use of your fifty words,

~patty~

 Comment Written 06-Aug-2018


reply by the author on 06-Aug-2018
    Thank you Mustangpatty1029. I had a lovely love story set up, but I got tired of being serious. :) :)