I'm Pretending I'm a Tree
wishful thinking15 total reviews
Comment from Sugarray77
This is so cute, pome... I was browsing through your posts and came across this gem. Hilarious. I must read more of your work, you definitely have a gift for humor.
All the best,
Melissa
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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This is so cute, pome... I was browsing through your posts and came across this gem. Hilarious. I must read more of your work, you definitely have a gift for humor.
All the best,
Melissa
Comment Written 04-Dec-2018
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2018
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thank you so much! I submitted it to Cricket Magazine, but haven't heard back from them.
Comment from Teri7
lol This was just too cute! I can see that little guy wanting to be a tree after his mom found the crabs wandering around. You used very cute descriptive words and very good imagery from the picture! Nice job! Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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lol This was just too cute! I can see that little guy wanting to be a tree after his mom found the crabs wandering around. You used very cute descriptive words and very good imagery from the picture! Nice job! Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 08-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2018
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Thanks, Teri. your remarks are much appreciated,
pome lover
Comment from judiverse
Definitely a 6 to me. Very imaginative. The boy is naturally inquisitive and likes to collect stuff like crabs. If he was a tree he wouldn't have to take a bath every day--that does take up time that could be spent collecting crabs. The rhyme and flow in this are terrific. It goes so smoothly from one line to the next. You've captured this boy's inner Tom Sawyer. judi
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Definitely a 6 to me. Very imaginative. The boy is naturally inquisitive and likes to collect stuff like crabs. If he was a tree he wouldn't have to take a bath every day--that does take up time that could be spent collecting crabs. The rhyme and flow in this are terrific. It goes so smoothly from one line to the next. You've captured this boy's inner Tom Sawyer. judi
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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thanks so much, Judi. I really appreciate it. love the Tom Sawyer bit! :)
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You're very welcome. Great work! judi
Comment from robyn corum
Katharine,
Beautiful job! This seems to be just exactly how a small boy would think -- well, I hope it's a boy and not her husband. *smile*
I loved the way you brought it back full circle so effortlessly. I really enjoyed! Thanks!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Katharine,
Beautiful job! This seems to be just exactly how a small boy would think -- well, I hope it's a boy and not her husband. *smile*
I loved the way you brought it back full circle so effortlessly. I really enjoyed! Thanks!
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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her husband! how funny.
thanks mucho for your neat review!
Comment from dragonpoet
I like the circularity of this poem. It first says he wishes he was a tree and then goes on to why he feels this way. We all to stupid things and think we can fool our parents when we are young.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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I like the circularity of this poem. It first says he wishes he was a tree and then goes on to why he feels this way. We all to stupid things and think we can fool our parents when we are young.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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many thanks. Much appreciated.
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You are most kindly welcome.
dp
Comment from Marvin Calloway
This easy to read poem tells an easy to digest story.
The story comes full circle, which is a nice touch for a good percentage of your audience.
Seems this form could be a series.
Marv
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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This easy to read poem tells an easy to digest story.
The story comes full circle, which is a nice touch for a good percentage of your audience.
Seems this form could be a series.
Marv
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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hmmm. thanks, MM. Am thinking of trying to put together a collection of poems for kids. I have lots about animals and birds and such. maybe,
how are you doin'?
Comment from kiwijenny
This reminds me of uncle Robert who found some eggs in sand and brought them home and hid them....they were snake eggs...boy he got in trouble...
I guess a tree would be great to be...every young boy needs roots...and girl of course
God bless
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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This reminds me of uncle Robert who found some eggs in sand and brought them home and hid them....they were snake eggs...boy he got in trouble...
I guess a tree would be great to be...every young boy needs roots...and girl of course
God bless
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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yep. I love trees - have a thing about 'em.
I bet your uncle did get in trouble.
Comment from Mark Valentine
What an awesome child's-point-of-view poem! Some of my son's favorite books when he was little, were those that featured children getting in trouble, and how their parents' didn't understand that they really weren't bad - just curious. And then, of course, there are the "I'll show THEM" fantasies children entertain while they are serving their punishments in their room. You have nailed that dynamic here, and I imagine that curious children everywhere would identify with your poem.
In addition to the POV, the iambic pentameter couplets give it a kid-friendly, Dr. Seuss feel. My favorite: "At least, he didn't think she would--He hid them really, really good" - perfect!
Thanks for starting my day with a smile.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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What an awesome child's-point-of-view poem! Some of my son's favorite books when he was little, were those that featured children getting in trouble, and how their parents' didn't understand that they really weren't bad - just curious. And then, of course, there are the "I'll show THEM" fantasies children entertain while they are serving their punishments in their room. You have nailed that dynamic here, and I imagine that curious children everywhere would identify with your poem.
In addition to the POV, the iambic pentameter couplets give it a kid-friendly, Dr. Seuss feel. My favorite: "At least, he didn't think she would--He hid them really, really good" - perfect!
Thanks for starting my day with a smile.
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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Bless you, Mark. You started mine off with a smile, too.
and your daughter is safely ensconced in her new digs. good.
Thanks for the wonderful review and star. I am honored.
You are such a good writer, your praise means a lot to me.
Katharine
Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca
I do wish I has a six because this is as cute as it can be and flows so nicely. Love the antics of the little boy put to verse. Would have been cute as a story ina poem
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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I do wish I has a six because this is as cute as it can be and flows so nicely. Love the antics of the little boy put to verse. Would have been cute as a story ina poem
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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thanks so much! I appreciate your 6-thought and very kind words. Didn't think of a story in a poem, Might try that.
Comment from Gloria ....
LOL, this is a terrific poem. This little fellow really had a grand idea to hide crabs in the sofa. Wish I would've thought of that.
Perfect metre and rhyme and the story moves ahead at a fine pace.
Love this poem, but I think I'll pass on being a tree. lol
Gloria
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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LOL, this is a terrific poem. This little fellow really had a grand idea to hide crabs in the sofa. Wish I would've thought of that.
Perfect metre and rhyme and the story moves ahead at a fine pace.
Love this poem, but I think I'll pass on being a tree. lol
Gloria
Comment Written 02-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2018
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ah, Gloria, I think you'd make a magnificent tree! thank you so much for your grand review. I really appreciate it.
Katharine - pome lover
