The Flutter
A question of priorities12 total reviews
Comment from Joan E.
I enjoyed your "butterflies" simile and wordplay on "windfall". Thanks for adding the reinforcing picture. Congratulations on having this Flash Fiction so well received in the competition. Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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I enjoyed your "butterflies" simile and wordplay on "windfall". Thanks for adding the reinforcing picture. Congratulations on having this Flash Fiction so well received in the competition. Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 28-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 29-Aug-2018
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Very many thanks for your review and congratulations, Joan. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
Comment from IndianaIrish
Love the imagery of this flash fiction, Tony. The picture of the little guy making butterflies from the money is wonderful. I hope it does well in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Love the imagery of this flash fiction, Tony. The picture of the little guy making butterflies from the money is wonderful. I hope it does well in the contest.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
Comment Written 04-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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You are very kind to drop by and review this, Karyn. Thanks for your comments and good luck wishes! All the best, Tony
Comment from Pantygynt
Another excellent short story. It has all the ingredients in microcosm and a true point to make. Where most dribble drivel this is a bash at the cash in more ways than one.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Another excellent short story. It has all the ingredients in microcosm and a true point to make. Where most dribble drivel this is a bash at the cash in more ways than one.
Comment Written 01-Aug-2018
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2018
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Glad you enjoyed my dribble drivel bash for the cash, Jim!
Comment from w.j.debi
Dear oh dear what a disaster. Obviously, this youngster hasn't had to work for hard earned cash, and this mother is carrying too much of it in an accessible place. Ah, the imagination and careful nature of youth. I hope he enjoys his few minutes of joy.
Excellent flash fiction. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Dear oh dear what a disaster. Obviously, this youngster hasn't had to work for hard earned cash, and this mother is carrying too much of it in an accessible place. Ah, the imagination and careful nature of youth. I hope he enjoys his few minutes of joy.
Excellent flash fiction. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 31-Jul-2018
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Very many thanks for taking the time to review this unpromoted work, WJ. Appreciated. It was inspired by an incident I saw taking place on a lakeside beach north of New York recently - tinged with enough poetic licence to classify it as fiction! I didn't see the consequences suffered by the hapless youth, but can well imagine them!
Comment from BeasPeas
I guess "butterflies aren't free." Not this kind anyway. A unique concept in this dribble fiction which I enjoyed reading. Nicely thought out. An impactful story in just a few words. Good luck in the contest with this worthy entry. Marilyn
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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I guess "butterflies aren't free." Not this kind anyway. A unique concept in this dribble fiction which I enjoyed reading. Nicely thought out. An impactful story in just a few words. Good luck in the contest with this worthy entry. Marilyn
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to review this unpromoted post, Marilyn, and for your good luck wishes. Appreciated. All the best, Tony
Comment from damommy
This is something I haven't seen from you before. You wrote with good, tight, concise writing with everything needed to tell the story.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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This is something I haven't seen from you before. You wrote with good, tight, concise writing with everything needed to tell the story.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to review this unpromoted post, Yvonne, and for your good luck wishes. Appreciated. The story is based on something I saw taking place on a lakeside beach north of New York a few weeks ago. At first I considered making a poem of it, but then thought I'd throw my hat in the ring for this contest instead! All the best, Tony
Comment from Gloria ....
Why that young feller was just throwing money away. lol. Excellent dribble fiction with the double meaning in getting your own money back being considered a windfall. Technically that is totally true.
Best of luck to you in the contest with this gem, Tony.
Gloria
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Why that young feller was just throwing money away. lol. Excellent dribble fiction with the double meaning in getting your own money back being considered a windfall. Technically that is totally true.
Best of luck to you in the contest with this gem, Tony.
Gloria
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Thanks for taking the time to review this unpromoted post, Gloria, and for your good luck wishes. Appreciated. The story is based on something I saw taking place on a lakeside beach north of New York a few weeks ago. At first I considered making a poem of it, but then thought I'd throw my hat in the ring for this contest instead! All the best, Tony
Comment from krys123
Cheers, Tony:
>You short story offers memories of me and the first time, I was caught At my first time taking money from my mother's purse. The guilt was overwhelming and when I told her, she forgave me and I was surprised that I wasn't chastised, but then when she told my father, he thought differently. There was me being told to go to the barn and then he lectured and then gave me to whacks with a switch a few times, by his special wiry, very thin switch.
>They only hurt for a moment but Lewis that enduring pain that I'd always remembered that one along with the lecture.
>Your writing offers a predicament that creates a dilemma Which makes the reader ponder human frailty and Human astonishment, as the woman realizes her purse's Money was stolen.
>Good luck in the contest, Tony, as I like this one and I'm sure that the judges will see it also.
Alx
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Cheers, Tony:
>You short story offers memories of me and the first time, I was caught At my first time taking money from my mother's purse. The guilt was overwhelming and when I told her, she forgave me and I was surprised that I wasn't chastised, but then when she told my father, he thought differently. There was me being told to go to the barn and then he lectured and then gave me to whacks with a switch a few times, by his special wiry, very thin switch.
>They only hurt for a moment but Lewis that enduring pain that I'd always remembered that one along with the lecture.
>Your writing offers a predicament that creates a dilemma Which makes the reader ponder human frailty and Human astonishment, as the woman realizes her purse's Money was stolen.
>Good luck in the contest, Tony, as I like this one and I'm sure that the judges will see it also.
Alx
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your review of this unpromoted post, Alex. Much appreciated, as are your interesting personal reminiscences inspired by it. Best wishes, Tony
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You're very welcome, Tony, and please entertain me more!
Alx
Comment from country ranch writer
Hope when she caught him she thrashed his a--. I hate a sneaky kid when the imp thinks he is getting away with it. They won't care how hard we had to work for that money.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Hope when she caught him she thrashed his a--. I hate a sneaky kid when the imp thinks he is getting away with it. They won't care how hard we had to work for that money.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your review of this unpromoted post, CRW, and for your generous six-star award. Much appreciated. Best wishes, Tony
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Comment from Bucketlist
This is a fun write about the the different values of money as was assessed by young and old, and the danger of "inconsequential chat" thanks for the chuckle. Good luck in the contest
Hugs, Trisha
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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This is a fun write about the the different values of money as was assessed by young and old, and the danger of "inconsequential chat" thanks for the chuckle. Good luck in the contest
Hugs, Trisha
Comment Written 29-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2018
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Many thanks for your review of this unpromoted post, Trisha, and for your good luck wishes. Much appreciated. This was based on a scene that I witnessed on a lakeside beach north of New York a few weeks ago. It made me chuckle, too! All the best, Tony
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Same talent unprompted or not! Just less expensive LOL you are welcome.
