Comment from Dean Kuch

Excellent

I've tried writing one of these Loop Poems and failed miserably. I guess you could say it's my poetic Achilles heel.
I keep tryin though.
Yours is a lovely romantic offering, June.
The idea of one blossom of love blooming into a garden of love is excellent use of metaphor.
Best of luck to you in the contest.
~Dean

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018

Thanks, Dean, for dropping by to read and review. Your talents are amazing. A garden is made up of various kinds of flowers. It?s what makes it interesting. I couldn?t stand an entire garden of lilies- or loop poems! Thanks again.

reply by Dean Kuch on 27-Jul-2018

My pleasure as always, June. :)

Comment from Joan E.

Excellent

I enjoyed your interpretation of the Loop form as a love poem with these three stanzas. Your "river" simile and the evolution of character into a "desert rose" is quite effective. Best wishes in the contest- Joan

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018

Thank you for taking the time to read and share your insights!

Comment from LaRosa

Excellent

Oh, this is so cool! The looping words were never 'lost' in the continuing refrains.
"Your love is like a river" that 'nourishes a dry parched soul', leading to life for a desert rose. Beautiful.

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018

Thank you for dropping by to read and review this loop poem!

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, June,

Thank you so much for sharing your entry for the Loop Poetry contest. I like the artwork you used to compliment this piece about the Desert Rose. Each line follows in a logical manner and it didn't feel contrived to fit the poetic form.

Good luck to you in the contest,

~patty~

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018

Thanks, Patty. Loop poems can be a challenge. But once I started
this one, it just came to life on its own. Appreciate the encouraging review.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A beautifully written loop poem filled with sweet smelling exotic flowers in bloom and a river of love, a sentimental and loving piece, I enjoyed the read June, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018

Thank you, Dolly, for the lovely review. It is much appreciated.

Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear

Excellent

This speaks that your love is like a river that flows and nourishes a dry parched soul that flourishes blossom and make a garden of exotic beauty that delights and glows to become your desert rose; well said, well done. Keep Writing -- DR ALCREATOR

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018

Thank you!

Comment from Hugh McDowell

Excellent

Excellent job in this format. Too often in loop poems the writing sounds forced. This flows seamlessly with great pacing. Paints a good mental picture. One error, last word in the second stanza needs to be gardens, not aardens. Very nice work. Hugh

 Comment Written 27-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018

Thank you for sharing your insights - and for pointing out the typo! Should never write and post at midnight...eyes get too tired and fingers do not cooperate. Thank you again!

Comment from poetwatch

Excellent

Good loop poem. I love it and the picture gives it more class. Love gives a smile for one to keep going on despite the pain, the heartache, that one goes through. That exotic beauty is at last happy to love again. This is a good entry to the Loop Poetry Contest.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018

Thank you for sharing your insights.

Comment from Henry King

Excellent

This is a beautiful loop poem and an excellent entry for the contest. The repetitions read very naturally and didn't appear forced. In fact most felt like they reinforced the poet's vision. Well done.


I like the change.

 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018

I actually changed it as you were reviewing. If you go back to the poem you will see my revised version. The same thought occurred to me after Unposted. Thanks for sharing your insights.

reply by Henry King on 26-Jul-2018

You are very welcome. Keep up with your good work. You must have ESP.

Comment from bard owl

Excellent

Your loop poem was a pleasure to read. Nature makes it so easy to praise her beautiful blooms, whether one flower or many. The last verse was a pleasant surprise, that you became a desert rose. Excellent upbeat read. Best of luck in the contest. Blessings, Linda

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 Comment Written 26-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 26-Jul-2018

Thanks for your encouraging comments!