A Potpourri of Poetic Curiosities
Viewing comments for Chapter 199 "The Manor House"A collection of poems showcasing unusual words
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Comment from --Turtle.
Hey, Craig
Read through this poem too, tonight. I'm not very confident with knowing if the form meets requirements, but I can tell you what I liked about this.
surrounded by a green and rolling lawn.
(Starting with stone allowed for all other words to fall in line with how the rhymes came off in my ears, and the tone of images)
perhaps a spot of polo or croquet?
(nice use of yellowplush, in the context of the poem, the word comes off very posh... fancy to have. Coming from wealth)
there was no sign at all of silver spoon,
(This set brought a smile, has a nice flow and reality comes crashing down with looking around at the lack of luxury, thanks to the limitations of funds)
the rest I'll disregard as so much noise.
(I really enjoyed the last two lines of this poem. On one hand I'm reminded of a tongue-n-cheek country song that plays on the radio from time to time...
the lyrics going something like:
Money can't buy happiness
But it can buy me a boat.
Expressing that, yeah... simple joys... but some of those simple joys are a whole lot easier to enjoy if you can afford a few of them.
On the other hand, if you are always looking at the greener grass across the lake, well... there's always greener grass to wish for. Being happy and appreciative of where you are, whereever that is... now that's some wealth that can't be bought.
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Hey, Craig
Read through this poem too, tonight. I'm not very confident with knowing if the form meets requirements, but I can tell you what I liked about this.
surrounded by a green and rolling lawn.
(Starting with stone allowed for all other words to fall in line with how the rhymes came off in my ears, and the tone of images)
perhaps a spot of polo or croquet?
(nice use of yellowplush, in the context of the poem, the word comes off very posh... fancy to have. Coming from wealth)
there was no sign at all of silver spoon,
(This set brought a smile, has a nice flow and reality comes crashing down with looking around at the lack of luxury, thanks to the limitations of funds)
the rest I'll disregard as so much noise.
(I really enjoyed the last two lines of this poem. On one hand I'm reminded of a tongue-n-cheek country song that plays on the radio from time to time...
the lyrics going something like:
Money can't buy happiness
But it can buy me a boat.
Expressing that, yeah... simple joys... but some of those simple joys are a whole lot easier to enjoy if you can afford a few of them.
On the other hand, if you are always looking at the greener grass across the lake, well... there's always greener grass to wish for. Being happy and appreciative of where you are, whereever that is... now that's some wealth that can't be bought.
Comment Written 26-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 27-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for the lovely review, Turtle. You certainly did a fine job of unraveling what I was aiming for there. People for some reason always say, "Think about having to clean all those rooms", but I'm pretty sure if I owned a place like that, it wouldn't be me doing the cleaning - probably just as well I don't :) Most grateful - Craig
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Great job with this sonnet Craig. When I saw the title I instantly thought of that tv show. What an unusual word, you would never guess that it meant footman.Nice touch with the yellow text.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Great job with this sonnet Craig. When I saw the title I instantly thought of that tv show. What an unusual word, you would never guess that it meant footman.Nice touch with the yellow text.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 24-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much, Valda; greatly appreciated - Craig
Comment from Ulla
Hi Craig, yes, you have a dream of the posh life that alas can never be yours- including the footman. Yellowplush to insiders. Ach well, there's more to life than that, I would say. A great and well written sonnet, and good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Hi Craig, yes, you have a dream of the posh life that alas can never be yours- including the footman. Yellowplush to insiders. Ach well, there's more to life than that, I would say. A great and well written sonnet, and good luck. All the best. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Absolutely :)
Many thanks for the fine review, Ulla.
Craig
Comment from Mustang Patty
Hi, Craig,
A great sonnet to describe the situation most of us find ourselves in. How wonderful it must be to have all those things. However, I don't think I would trade my life for anything. I rather like my house, my things, my hubby and my dogs.
Besides, who has time to clean a house that big?
~patty~
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Hi, Craig,
A great sonnet to describe the situation most of us find ourselves in. How wonderful it must be to have all those things. However, I don't think I would trade my life for anything. I rather like my house, my things, my hubby and my dogs.
Besides, who has time to clean a house that big?
~patty~
Comment Written 21-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2018
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Oh, me too, Patty. I imagine, though, if one could afford a house like that, someone else would be doing the cleaning ;-) Cheers, Craig
Comment from closetpoetjester
LOL You have SUCH a knack with words my friend. This was such a cute pentametric ditty wishing for the impossible, obviously haha
It seems you have no financial skills or business savvy whatsoever if you can only hold onto your money for 24 hours LMAO
But you admit it with a simple resignation and very matter of fact phraseology and with that I must agree.
Enjoy it while it's there because it's not likely to last very long if it's in your hands haha
Excellent and original entry for this contest and my only qualm was actually the last line. For some reason "so much" didn't quite sit right...dunno why, I think it was the "so"
Would "too much" be slightly better as a suggestion I wonder. Only my thoughts. I'll always give you what I get. The only other suggestion I had was "background" as in "background noise" or "white noise" is it I think?
Anyway, aside my little picky pick, I love it.
We are on the same page. I don't have money for long when I do actually have it. No point in procrastinating haha
Well done as always.
I see the new word only subtlely mentioned in the notes.
I'm off to see if I can convert my children into mini yellowplushes.
More like yellowplushies hahaha
Dammit son, no sixes.
P
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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LOL You have SUCH a knack with words my friend. This was such a cute pentametric ditty wishing for the impossible, obviously haha
It seems you have no financial skills or business savvy whatsoever if you can only hold onto your money for 24 hours LMAO
But you admit it with a simple resignation and very matter of fact phraseology and with that I must agree.
Enjoy it while it's there because it's not likely to last very long if it's in your hands haha
Excellent and original entry for this contest and my only qualm was actually the last line. For some reason "so much" didn't quite sit right...dunno why, I think it was the "so"
Would "too much" be slightly better as a suggestion I wonder. Only my thoughts. I'll always give you what I get. The only other suggestion I had was "background" as in "background noise" or "white noise" is it I think?
Anyway, aside my little picky pick, I love it.
We are on the same page. I don't have money for long when I do actually have it. No point in procrastinating haha
Well done as always.
I see the new word only subtlely mentioned in the notes.
I'm off to see if I can convert my children into mini yellowplushes.
More like yellowplushies hahaha
Dammit son, no sixes.
P
Comment Written 19-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2018
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Well, "so much noise" sounds perfectly normal to me - I've probably been "Americanised" lol
But background noise and white noise are also both excellent suggestions. Now I'm in a three-way toss-up [sigh].
I'm going to have to chew it over before I decide which way to go. I have a few days I can toss and turn and get no sleep trying to decide - thanks for that, Phillippa!
Oh, and there MIGHT be just a tiny bit of poetic licence at play here - I *could* be a yacht-owning squillionaire, with several stone mansions... or not. The goats love me either way ;-)
Many thanks,
Craig
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, nice to see you today. This is a really upbeat sonnet. I thoroughly enjoyed it as it is a change of pace from a lot of sonnets I am reading. So best of luck with this well-written entry. I noticed no errors and the rhyming is unforced and adds so much. I like manor style homes, too. They are very English with their bay windows and lush lawns. Pencil pines, too, I love pencil pines.
One can dream!! Thanks for sharing your writing, which I found a pleasure to read and review, cheers, Ana.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Hello, nice to see you today. This is a really upbeat sonnet. I thoroughly enjoyed it as it is a change of pace from a lot of sonnets I am reading. So best of luck with this well-written entry. I noticed no errors and the rhyming is unforced and adds so much. I like manor style homes, too. They are very English with their bay windows and lush lawns. Pencil pines, too, I love pencil pines.
One can dream!! Thanks for sharing your writing, which I found a pleasure to read and review, cheers, Ana.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Thanks very much for the really delightful comments, Ana. They are greatly appreciated :) Craig
Comment from Dawn Munro
:)))))))))) Yet again we are on the same page. I'd love a country mansion made of stone too, I do love tea, and any cash I get on Friday's paycheque is "well and truly gone" by Saturday afternoon (at least). LOL. (I'm lyin' of course - no paycheque anymore - but hey, no silver spoon 'round here either!)
What a wonderful sonnet! I'm grinning so hard my face hurts. :))))) Best of luck!!!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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:)))))))))) Yet again we are on the same page. I'd love a country mansion made of stone too, I do love tea, and any cash I get on Friday's paycheque is "well and truly gone" by Saturday afternoon (at least). LOL. (I'm lyin' of course - no paycheque anymore - but hey, no silver spoon 'round here either!)
What a wonderful sonnet! I'm grinning so hard my face hurts. :))))) Best of luck!!!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2018
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Thanks so much for the fantastic comments and the wonderful rating, Dawn. I'm glad you enjoyed :) Craig
Comment from Pamusart
Hi Craig. Are you ill? Lol. I miss your notes about your Christmas present. This is a good entry for the contest. I found rhyming born and lawn to be a stretch but it may be colloquial pronunciation differences. I know Brits forget (teehee) to pronounce Rs at times. You might pronounce born like bon. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing Your meter is flawless as usual
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hi Craig. Are you ill? Lol. I miss your notes about your Christmas present. This is a good entry for the contest. I found rhyming born and lawn to be a stretch but it may be colloquial pronunciation differences. I know Brits forget (teehee) to pronounce Rs at times. You might pronounce born like bon. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for sharing Your meter is flawless as usual
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hi Pam, No, we pronounce it as bawn, rhyming perfectly with lawn. One day you guys will catch on ;-)
Many thanks for the fun review -
Craig
Comment from jenintorre
Love it Craig. You have nailed it again. The last stanza is my sentiments entirely. Great presentation.I wish you lots of luck in the sonnet competition.
Cheers Jen.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Love it Craig. You have nailed it again. The last stanza is my sentiments entirely. Great presentation.I wish you lots of luck in the sonnet competition.
Cheers Jen.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Thank so much, Jen. Much appreciated - Craig
Comment from bichonfrisegirl
Hey Craig, good luck in the Sonnet contest with this excellent entry. "Yellowplush" ... a footman. I never would have guessed, but plush does infer comfort, and I'm guessing that 'yellow' might signify 'gold'?? Anyone who could afford a footman must have a comfortable amount of gold. :) The rest of us can only fantasize what it would be like to have oodles of money.
"and any cash I get come Monday morn
is well and truly gone by Tuesday noon" ... my favorite part (very relatable).
A great ending. Yes, it "pays to make the most of simple joys". Those are free, and often bring the most joy.
Well done, Craig!
Connie
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Hey Craig, good luck in the Sonnet contest with this excellent entry. "Yellowplush" ... a footman. I never would have guessed, but plush does infer comfort, and I'm guessing that 'yellow' might signify 'gold'?? Anyone who could afford a footman must have a comfortable amount of gold. :) The rest of us can only fantasize what it would be like to have oodles of money.
"and any cash I get come Monday morn
is well and truly gone by Tuesday noon" ... my favorite part (very relatable).
A great ending. Yes, it "pays to make the most of simple joys". Those are free, and often bring the most joy.
Well done, Craig!
Connie
Comment Written 18-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2018
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Thackeray invented the term in reference to the yellow velvet coats footmen used to wear, according to my little book. Thanks for the terrific review, Connie.
