Ace of Hearts
A play becomes too real20 total reviews
Comment from royowen
I must admit Pam, you're a fantastic storyteller, you've got a great imagination, have you actually thought of writing short story, novelette, you just have to fill in the lines. Excellent poem, very smooth, language and descriptive imagery outstanding, aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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I must admit Pam, you're a fantastic storyteller, you've got a great imagination, have you actually thought of writing short story, novelette, you just have to fill in the lines. Excellent poem, very smooth, language and descriptive imagery outstanding, aabb rhyming, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Roy. I have no idea how to go about getting published. Dad thought it may be my poems will die once I do. Thank you for the great review
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Ask Ideasaregems, (Dawn), she knows a very helpful site, Pam.
Comment from Pantygynt
They say that truth can be stranger than fiction. It seems to me that this play started as a fiction but somehow under the influence turned into horrifying fact. Actually it is the sound of this that makes it come alive, the instances of alliteration and consonance. Great fun.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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They say that truth can be stranger than fiction. It seems to me that this play started as a fiction but somehow under the influence turned into horrifying fact. Actually it is the sound of this that makes it come alive, the instances of alliteration and consonance. Great fun.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you Jim. I have to do something with my imaginaton don?t I? Teehee. Thanks for the fun
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Comment from jenintorre
My goodness Pam, you have written a saga of a poem here, do you have time to do anything else but write? A very good read with excellent rhyme. Best wishes Jen.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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My goodness Pam, you have written a saga of a poem here, do you have time to do anything else but write? A very good read with excellent rhyme. Best wishes Jen.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Hi Jen. One way or another my writimg and reviewing take a lot of time. I also play chess and soon should be able to paint again. My foot is not ready yet. Thank you for the great review
Comment from kahpot
This is a wonderful read, I will keep this one to learn from as this flows very well and there must be something in here ( meter, Syllables per line) that will help, this story is written into an excellent poem very well done****kahpot
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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This is a wonderful read, I will keep this one to learn from as this flows very well and there must be something in here ( meter, Syllables per line) that will help, this story is written into an excellent poem very well done****kahpot
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Hi kahpot. Each line is eight syllables. Begins with an unstressed then a stressed and repeat. It helps to develop an ear and read aloud. I am happy to help where I can. Thank you for the great review
Comment from Blue Hendrix
First let me say in a very nice way this poem definitely does not need improvement then I will say wow what an accomplishment to get that
much of a detailed story into a poem. I was going to enter the contest but after 2 days I decided I'm not a very good storyteller. Lol but you are mam and it was a good humorous draw you in story that made me chuckle a bit at times but also made me think and it flowed superbly.I loved it!!!!
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First let me say in a very nice way this poem definitely does not need improvement then I will say wow what an accomplishment to get that
much of a detailed story into a poem. I was going to enter the contest but after 2 days I decided I'm not a very good storyteller. Lol but you are mam and it was a good humorous draw you in story that made me chuckle a bit at times but also made me think and it flowed superbly.I loved it!!!!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Wow sweet blue. This put a grin on my face. I entered a different poem for the contest. Thank you so much for the extra star and for a delightful review
Comment from Thomas Bowling
Excellent. Definitely worthy of a six. You make rhymes where it seems impossible.
A brand new actress sipping tea
was sitting on a brown settee
This is just one example of a difficult rhyme that you make look effortless.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Excellent. Definitely worthy of a six. You make rhymes where it seems impossible.
A brand new actress sipping tea
was sitting on a brown settee
This is just one example of a difficult rhyme that you make look effortless.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Wow Thomas. This put a big smile on my face. Thank you so much for the six star rating and for this wonderful review
Comment from meeshu
this is great, Pam. for the first half of it I was looking for clues to what play it might be. then I realized you made the whole thing up.............meeshu
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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this is great, Pam. for the first half of it I was looking for clues to what play it might be. then I realized you made the whole thing up.............meeshu
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Lol meeshu. I had to make it up so the facts fit. Thanks for the great review
Comment from Renee J. St.Germain
I liked reading this fun story in the poetry form. It flowed nicely and there was excellent rhyming. It kept me wondering if you ended up liking the play after all. I realize now that it's just a fantasy.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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I liked reading this fun story in the poetry form. It flowed nicely and there was excellent rhyming. It kept me wondering if you ended up liking the play after all. I realize now that it's just a fantasy.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Hi Renee. Nice to see you tonight. Thank you for a great review
Comment from Lady Jane
Wow... I hope to never anger one to such a place. LOL. This was a fun, smooth flowing read with good rhyme and meter. Love the theatrical spin on this one. I kept thinking of Alice in Wonderland, the queen of hearts, as I was reading this. Don't know why...they shuffle Alice in, not slit her throat. Maybe it was the image. Anyways, another well written piece here. Good job.
Janelle
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Wow... I hope to never anger one to such a place. LOL. This was a fun, smooth flowing read with good rhyme and meter. Love the theatrical spin on this one. I kept thinking of Alice in Wonderland, the queen of hearts, as I was reading this. Don't know why...they shuffle Alice in, not slit her throat. Maybe it was the image. Anyways, another well written piece here. Good job.
Janelle
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Comment Written 16-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Thank you Janelle for another fine review
Comment from homewriter
I loved the rhyming flow of the poem. I got a sense of one of those black and white murder and romance mystery movies. I loved the picture of the ace of heart looking like a woman's bossom then the woman is killed very dramatic
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reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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I loved the rhyming flow of the poem. I got a sense of one of those black and white murder and romance mystery movies. I loved the picture of the ace of heart looking like a woman's bossom then the woman is killed very dramatic
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Comment Written 15-Jul-2018
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2018
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Hi homewritee. Thank you for your complimentary review. I have a question though. Did you really mean to give this only two stars? If so where could I have improved. Take care
