Comment from Debbie Pope

Excellent

Very impressive quatrain. I like your line "As heat haze shimmers and the landscape sears." The heat haze seems to be simmering right on Lawrence of Arabia's face. I also enjoyed the two sets of notes--one about the poetic style and the one about the burned priest. I am still learning poetic styles, so your notes are always appreciated.

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018

Many thanks, Debbie. I, too, am learning. There's so many forms I haven't even attempted, and only so many days in a week. Most grateful for the kind comments. Craig

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi Craig. Humans are really cruel and have been so since the beginning. Roasting another persont to death I could not do to my worst enemy. FYI. What trump was doing in detaining and separating migrant families is deemed illegal. So the practice has stopped. Ahole. Our senate also passed a resolution. 97-2 to keep us in NATO. I don't think he will be able to pull out.

I predicted this in early 2016. That he would ruin the world.

Thank you for sharing

 Comment Written 11-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 11-Jul-2018

Well, there is hope yet :) I think his days as POTUS are numbered. I like to hope so, anyway. Many thanks, Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I like how your decasyllabic quatrain reads - very smoothly and perfect description of the desert. I remember that film well - great acting and it really felt like you've been in the desert afterwards!

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018

Thanks very much, Helen. I don't recall much about it, to be honest. Might be time for a re-viewing :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Oh, a little Peter O'Toole. Bet he took some ribbing for that name. A what kind of quatrain? Ah okay it's not as complicated as it first appears to be.

Well no wonder they called him Lawrence of Arabia, and here all this time I thought it was because his name was really Larry. HA

Great job, Craig. Much enjoyed.

Gloria

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018

Thanks very much, Gloria. I always thought his performances were much better when he teamed up with Dudley Moore ;-) Your comments are always greatly appreciated - Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written decasyllabic quatrain in iambic pentameter, about the appearance of someone in a heat haze, that is called a lawrence, a very interestings story of the word's origin.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018

Thanks very much, Sandra. I appreciate the lovely comments. Craig

Comment from Barb Hensongispsaca

Excellent

What a fantastic play on words. Thank you for the authors notes or else I would have tried to correct your 'l'. Very nicely done in flow and fun. NIce reading

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018

Thanks very much, Barb. I was waiting for someone to pick me up on that. So far, no one has lol

Cheers,
Craig

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

This is a great lesson in few words, Craig. You did a super job with your word for the day. The picture & poem pair nicely. Your lines flow well & make great sense. I really liked the notes, too. Who knew? But now, we do, Thanks for sharing. Jan

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018

Thanks very much, Jan. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem (short is good, right?) lol Most grateful - Craig

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Craig,

This is a very interesting word. So, the shimmering on the road, which we know is caused by the heat, is a 'lawrence.' Now, I can amaze my friends this summer. Thank you for sharing another word from your book.

I have little understanding of 'decasyllabic quatrain in iambic pentameter,' so I will take your word for it.

~patty~

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018

I don't know what it means, either, Patty - but it sure as hell sounded impressive when I copied it from the dictionary! I wouldn't go around talking about "lawrence" too much - those around you might become concerned about your invisible friend, and next thing you know, men in white coats will be inviting you to stay in their hotel :) Most grateful - Craig

Comment from catch22

Excellent

Hi Craig, what cool wordplay in using the lowercase Lawrence to refer to a natural phenomenon instead of a person. I loved it! Good use of the form to showcase your message.

 Comment Written 10-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018

Thanks very much for the lovely review, Pam. Somehow, "larry" wouldn't have had the same effect. Cheers, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Craig. Great job here. Very well written and rhymed to tell a story in just a few short lines. "Lawrence/lawrence" a clever and ironic combination to feature today's word, meaning shimmering heat haze. Author's note is informative. What a horrible situation for Lawrence of Rome. Marilyn

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 Comment Written 10-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 10-Jul-2018

It certainly was, Marilyn. When one is invited to a barbeque, one hopes to be the valued guest, not the main course! That Valerian comes across as a particularly nasty piece of work. Cheers, Craig