Comment from strandregs

Excellent

This is one tortured Limerick, Craig
I can feel it flailing and screaming
cut me loose, burn me quickly.
but, chained forever in the right no. of sylabels
and right format its doomed.
saying that , you got it where you wanted it.
can't say I haven't done the same. :-))Z.

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Actually, I think it's perfect anapestic meter - 2 weak, 1 strong syllable. Not all limericks are iambic. Of course, I could be wrong! Many thanks for not caning it, although you feel it's off :)

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Ha, very clever allusion from sea change to tree change. Sometimes just a change of one's environs can lead to something really great.

So your new word Cosmognosis works for me, Craig.

Gloria

 Comment Written 04-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 04-Jul-2018

Thanks very much for the lovely review, Gloria. I kind of like the word too :) Cheers, Craig

Comment from catch22

Excellent

Hi Craig, a clever little limerick. I stumbled on a few lines but I think it is due to pronunciation differences. Good allegory about knowing when to get out of dodge.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Hi Pam, I think it's probably a meter thing, rather than pronunciation. Limericks can be tricky, because some are in iambic meter and some anapestic - and often, even if I come back to one I've written myself, I'll start on the wrong beat and get all tangled up. This one's anapestic - I've reproduced it below, with beats emphasised - maybe that might help?

basically, it's DA-DA-DUM DA-DA-DUM DA-DA-DUM

Poor young PHIL was quite MISunderSTOOD

and deTESTed his OWN neighbourHOOD.

So he DID something STRANGE,

underTOOK a tree CHANGE;

cosmoGNOsis changed PHILlip for GOOD.

Not sure if that is of any help.

Thanks for the kind review, and you certainly got the intent :)

Cheers,
Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Craig. An interesting limerick with good rhyming and pace using the new word "cosmognosis." I think I get the yen for that once in a while and have to move on. Marilyn

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Thanks very much for the kind review, Marilyn - you and me both. Much appreciated - Craig

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

A "tree change?" Was Phil a "philodendron?" (plant that "loves" (philos) tree (dendron)). If so, the last word could have been "wood." I need to know more about Phil to understand the nature of the cosmognosis.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Philodendrons are beautiful plants. I had never thought about the meaning of their name, although now that you mention it, it makes perfect sense. Phil is either a bird - in which case "tree change" may be interpreted literally; or Phil is a person, in which case it means "an escape to the country". You are free to choose, or make up your own interpretation :)

Comment from Pamusart

Excellent

Hi Craig. Maybe I am dense, but I can't tell what species young Phil is. At first I thought he was human. Second guess a tree who changed into a different tree. I knows trees don't migrate. Sorry. Probably me. It happens

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Hi Pam, as you first thought, Phil is a human. Or perhaps he's a bird. I left it deliberately ambiguous, so people could have fun trying to decide which. A tree change is something humans do when they move from the city to the country, or it could just literally be a bird changing trees. So you're not dense, I was just being sneaky. Cheers, Craig

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi there, this is a fun limerick and a clever way of using one unusual word every day. It's and interesting word which describes how and when an animal has to migrate in order to survive. I liked your poem. All the best.Ulla:))

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Thank you very much for the lovely comments, Ulla. Much appreciated - Craig.

Comment from meeshu

Excellent

The bird's name is Phillip? You have some great rhythm and flow in this comical poem. Good luck in the contest and in the future, CD...........meeshu

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Bird or human? You can choose ;-) Many thanks, Meeshu - Craig

Comment from Donka Kristeva

Excellent

Clear wording and to the point. This work gives a great positive message about choices and their outcome. I enjoyed its simplicity.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Thank you very much, Donka. Sometimes I feel like I have too many negative messages, so I'm glad you found this one positive :-) Much appreciated, Craig

Comment from Sandra du Plessis

Excellent

A very well-written poem to explain the very foreign word cosmognosis. A natural instinct to tell animals it s time to migrate from one area to another to survive distinction.

 Comment Written 03-Jul-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jul-2018

Thanks very much, Sandra - much appreciated. Craig