Over Attention as Unhealthy as Under
in a nutshell losing the sense of love2 total reviews
Comment from Alexander Vasa
Hello, this is a very evocative poem. I especially liked this verse:
why is self-discipline so abhorrent
did our upbringing not include the
ways of right & wrong or were we
just too stubborn & rebellious to listen well
I couldn't agree more with your writing really. Your author notes fill the reader in on your perspective, too. I saw no errors and beauty is to be celebrated, though it is a very subjective thing, what is beauty to one, is ugly to another. And people can be beautiful and as soon as they open their mouth, they become ugly, I see that a lot.
Thanks for sharing your writing, which I found a pleasure to read and review Ana.
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2018
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Hello, this is a very evocative poem. I especially liked this verse:
why is self-discipline so abhorrent
did our upbringing not include the
ways of right & wrong or were we
just too stubborn & rebellious to listen well
I couldn't agree more with your writing really. Your author notes fill the reader in on your perspective, too. I saw no errors and beauty is to be celebrated, though it is a very subjective thing, what is beauty to one, is ugly to another. And people can be beautiful and as soon as they open their mouth, they become ugly, I see that a lot.
Thanks for sharing your writing, which I found a pleasure to read and review Ana.
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2018
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Heathfield thank you for your review. giovanni
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Old age is indeed a fear for many, including myself and I shall fight the signs of it into my grave! Alas no one can hide from the mounting years and embracing life is a preference. I would put all your (and) in full, rather than use ampersands, which is a no no in poetry, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2018
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Old age is indeed a fear for many, including myself and I shall fight the signs of it into my grave! Alas no one can hide from the mounting years and embracing life is a preference. I would put all your (and) in full, rather than use ampersands, which is a no no in poetry, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 11-Jun-2018
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Dolly thank you for your review. & is like my trademark, or laziness????? giovanni
