Waiting for Someday
Dialogue Only: Between mother and young son...29 total reviews
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
No lie I have tears in my eyes and that's not good cuz I work in 20 minutes. It's hard to lose a pet at any age and just because you are older doesn't mean the pain is any less.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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No lie I have tears in my eyes and that's not good cuz I work in 20 minutes. It's hard to lose a pet at any age and just because you are older doesn't mean the pain is any less.
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Friend,
I am honored by your exceptional rating and heartfelt review.
I am pleased that my offering resonated with you, but I am sorry about the tears! It is very hard to lose a pet...
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from RGstar
Beautiful dialogue. Sometimes things are just so beautiful when left to the simplest ways of telling, especially when the explaining need not be more than the beauty of being sentimental and caring.
Bravo.
Loved reading this.
Have a beautiful day.
RGstar
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Beautiful dialogue. Sometimes things are just so beautiful when left to the simplest ways of telling, especially when the explaining need not be more than the beauty of being sentimental and caring.
Bravo.
Loved reading this.
Have a beautiful day.
RGstar
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Friend,
I am so pleased but simple offering resonated with you. The conversation is as I remember it between my son and me following the death of our beloved Golden Retriever, Gus...
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from Jennifer Major-Byers
Wonderful, loving, patient and honest dialogue as it should be between parent and child. Such innocence from son and understanding from mother. Sweet/Jennifer
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Wonderful, loving, patient and honest dialogue as it should be between parent and child. Such innocence from son and understanding from mother. Sweet/Jennifer
Comment Written 10-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Jennifer,
I am so pleased my offering resonated with you.
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review...
diane
Comment from WalkerMan
One of the things a good parent must do is comfort a grieving child on such occasions. Not everyone can find the right words to say, but you give a good example here. What a parent says in this case WILL be remembered, and likely passed on in similar circumstance decades later, so is important. Superb, and aptly illustrated.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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One of the things a good parent must do is comfort a grieving child on such occasions. Not everyone can find the right words to say, but you give a good example here. What a parent says in this case WILL be remembered, and likely passed on in similar circumstance decades later, so is important. Superb, and aptly illustrated.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Mike,
This conversation between my son and me is as I remember it. Such a sad time for all of us, but especially for our son.
I am honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review. And I am very pleased that my words resonated with you.
Thank you again!
diane
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You are most welcome, Diane. I think you handled your son's concerns as well as anyone possibly could. -- Mike
Comment from rspoet
Hello Diane,
This is a fine piece of dialogue writing and should do well in the contest.
The interplay of mother and son reads smoothly and feels quite natural.
The key element is the honesty and trust they share.
Very nicely done.
Best wishes in the contest
Robert
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Diane,
This is a fine piece of dialogue writing and should do well in the contest.
The interplay of mother and son reads smoothly and feels quite natural.
The key element is the honesty and trust they share.
Very nicely done.
Best wishes in the contest
Robert
Comment Written 09-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Robert,
I am very honored by your exceptional rating and thoughtful review.
This event was one of the most defining moments in our son's life...
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from Swampfox1
This is a great entry for the contest. It is a very warm story, very touching, and it is the type of stuff everyone loves to read. It sounds like a real conversation and this should do the trick to win. Have a great weekend
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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This is a great entry for the contest. It is a very warm story, very touching, and it is the type of stuff everyone loves to read. It sounds like a real conversation and this should do the trick to win. Have a great weekend
Comment Written 09-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Friend,
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review.
I am so pleased my offering resonated with you.
Thank you!
diane
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You are very welcome
Comment from kathleenspalding
Aw. Very sad and sweet dialogue piece is excellent for the contest. I see nothing to correct. The only thing I could suggest is maybe use the word "Mom" sooner (...not hurting anything, Mom.)? so their relationship will be clear at the beginning without the story description line. Great job!
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Aw. Very sad and sweet dialogue piece is excellent for the contest. I see nothing to correct. The only thing I could suggest is maybe use the word "Mom" sooner (...not hurting anything, Mom.)? so their relationship will be clear at the beginning without the story description line. Great job!
Comment Written 09-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Kathleen!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review. I did place a "Mom" sooner in the dialogue after I read your suggestion: thank you!
I am pleased my offering resonated with you!
diane
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You're welcome :-)
Comment from apky
This is an excellent entry for the dialogue only contest. Not only is the subject of profound meaning but I also particularly like how the writer dealth with the task of explaining that profound loss to a young one, to whom the loss has brought on such a heartache:
Is the hurt in my heart ever going to go away?
Someday it will. Maybe not today, but someday. And when it does, you will remember all the good times the two of you shared together.
I hope "Someday" comes really fast. He was the best friend a guy ever had, Mom.
He surely was, Morgan. He surely was...
Wish I had a six. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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This is an excellent entry for the dialogue only contest. Not only is the subject of profound meaning but I also particularly like how the writer dealth with the task of explaining that profound loss to a young one, to whom the loss has brought on such a heartache:
Is the hurt in my heart ever going to go away?
Someday it will. Maybe not today, but someday. And when it does, you will remember all the good times the two of you shared together.
I hope "Someday" comes really fast. He was the best friend a guy ever had, Mom.
He surely was, Morgan. He surely was...
Wish I had a six. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Friend!
Thank you for your excellent rating and thoughtful review.
I am pleased my offering resonated with you!
Thank you again!
diane
Comment from Mabaker
That is a delightful dialogue only piece. Hope you do well in the contest. I thought writing without the 'he said, she replied' would be very hard and boring, but I found it to be a terrific exercise, and a fun thing to tackle. Sincerely Anne
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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That is a delightful dialogue only piece. Hope you do well in the contest. I thought writing without the 'he said, she replied' would be very hard and boring, but I found it to be a terrific exercise, and a fun thing to tackle. Sincerely Anne
Comment Written 09-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Friend,
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you for your excellent rating and complimentary review!
diane
Comment from Hugh McDowell
Excellent work. You captured how a young kid's mind works and how a caring parent responds. I love how the mom brings the dad into the conversation. Also the continuity and continuation of life through the Grandfather. Great pacing and dialogue.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Excellent work. You captured how a young kid's mind works and how a caring parent responds. I love how the mom brings the dad into the conversation. Also the continuity and continuation of life through the Grandfather. Great pacing and dialogue.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2018
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Hello Hugh!
So pleased you enjoyed!
I will always remember this moment with our son...
Thank you again!
diane
