Comment from May 1

Excellent

I love the fact that I can imagine the smells so clearly. Haha, Sheba is awesome. Hm, I wonder what else are they hiding from him. At one point I even thought Redd-Leif was his father but now I am not sure. Then again I might be right. I love how you make me change my mind many times in one chapter, it makes it even more fun to read.

 Comment Written 02-Feb-2020

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reply by the author on 05-Feb-2020

Hi May 1,
I love that you can imagine the smells, and that you like Sheba. She is fun to write. Hey, when you are stuck as a wolf, you have to have some fun.

Comment from Gert sherwood

Excellent

Hello w.j.debi
I'm so glad that you stopped by and read one of my postings, otherwise, I wouldn't know about you fantasy story about the adventures of The Piper
I enjoyed it.
Gert

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2018

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2018

Thank you, Gert. I am happy to hear you enjoyed it. Thanks for stopping by. Debi

Comment from Writingfundimension

Exceptional

Hi, Debi

What a splendid chapter! Your descriptions lend a deep sense of place. Though I am not too familiar with the characters, except Piper, I got a very good sense of their personalities as well. And you set up a fine degree of anticipation for what lays in the Elven Village and what it means for Piper's future.

Bravo, my friend.

:) Bev

 Comment Written 25-May-2018

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reply by the author on 26-May-2018

HI Bev,
I hope you are doing well.
Thank you so much for the kind comments and the six stars! It brightened my day and was unexpected since the piece has dropped off the promotion page.
I check out your page from time to time, but looks like life is keeping you too busy to write much.
Have a wonderful weekend!
Debi

reply by Writingfundimension on 26-May-2018

You're very welcome, Debi. I am very happy to see how your story has evolved in a real page-turner. I am off site using editing services on my first novel. I'm glad I checked in before you disappeared from my list!

Hope you're enjoying the Memorial weekend.

:) Bev

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Once again, you've drawn me into your fantasy world. Your smart dialogue defines the characters and carries the plot along. Looks as if Piper is gradually awakening to find his identity.

 Comment Written 23-May-2018

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reply by the author on 24-May-2018

Thank you, Shari. I appreciate your encouragement. Debi

Comment from Mastery

Exceptional

Hi, Debi. So good to see you post another chapter. I think you probbly take your time and only post when you feel you have yourn best stuff. Good for you. As you know some people on here post two and three items a dy on this site. How dom they do that? LOL Of course they are only doin it to move their names up up up in the rankings. Whew!

Now for your chapter, my friend:

You hv ewonderful imgery throughout your writing, like here:
"A stronger gust of wind whipped his cloak about him then settled back to a steady breeze. (from previous chapter notes)

Chpter 21: ghin your imagery shines for the reader, Deb. Like this: " The aromas of moist soil and forest vegetation hovered in the spring air."

And: "Up ahead Piper saw Redd-Leif leaning against a tree as if he were part of it, a silhouette against the pre-dawn sky."
(Wonderful)

And your interchange of dialogue is believble and flawless with very few taga.

Good for you! Blessings. Bob

 Comment Written 21-May-2018

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reply by the author on 22-May-2018

Hi Bob,
Thanks so much for the wonderful review and taking time to point out what you liked. I appreciate the six stars too.
Debi

Comment from kiwijenny

Excellent

For the next few minutes the sounds of the waking forest increased, each adding its part to nature's symphony: various bird song, chirping squirrels, animals rustling in the shrubs and forest canopy, and the sounds of insects. Overhead a hawk circle
I love how you capture nature
Well done
God bless

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 22-May-2018

Thank you for the kind comments.
Debi

Comment from nancy_e_davis

Excellent

Redd-Leif is having a very hard time getting the two of them to move a little faster. He knows how anxious Melodica
is to see her son Piper. She hasn't seen him for a long time. Meanwhile Captain Burkehart has ditched the rest of the Caravan and is searching for the missing boys. Will he be successful before they reach the Elven village? Well done Debi. Nancy

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 22-May-2018

Hi Nancy,
Thank you for continuing to follow the story. I appreciate the analysis and the comments.
Debi

Comment from Rasmine

Exceptional

Hello, W.J. Debi,

Haven't seen you in a long time! Nice to read this awesome story. This is a lot better than my Piper. I can't wait for the next chapter so please stick around. :)

Nome

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Hi Rasmine,

Thank you so much for the wonderful review and the six star rating. You made my day! I'll be checking out your Flower Power series and you have a Piper too? I'll be dropping by.

Debi

reply by Rasmine on 24-May-2018

Piper isn't on here. It's a story I wrote a very long time ago.

Comment from giraffmang

Excellent

Hi there,

I was so glad to see another instalment of this tale, and I wasn't disappointed on reading it. All is as it should be. Very nice descriptive work and the tone, voice of the piece remains consistent with what has gone before. A good continuation.

All the best
G

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 22-May-2018

Thank you, G. I always appreciate your feedback. A thumbs up from you makes my day brighter!

Comment from Roxanna Andrews

Excellent

Another great and interesting chapter. I saw no errors and have no suggestions for improvements. I am looking forward to Piper meeting his mother and discovering his hidden heritage.

 Comment Written 20-May-2018

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reply by the author on 23-May-2018

Thank you so much for the encouraging comments, Roxanna. Piper will be jetting her soon. Debi