As Imprint Fades
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Comment from Leineco
:-) It took a while...but I have finally honed my reaction
When I yield
.............Yet again
take another
step away
From the all
...From the me
From the tree
......I used to climb
Will the kite
untangle from limbs
........fly free of me
diminish the light
on which
crowning leaves
thrive
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2018
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:-) It took a while...but I have finally honed my reaction
When I yield
.............Yet again
take another
step away
From the all
...From the me
From the tree
......I used to climb
Will the kite
untangle from limbs
........fly free of me
diminish the light
on which
crowning leaves
thrive
Comment Written 31-May-2018
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2018
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Pretty Goddamned good review. Thank you.
Comment from GWinterwin
Good poem with a good picture. Yes the fragments to float away as time goes by. I suddenly went from doing it all to doing nothing when they found I had bone cancer some two years ago. I still have hope because I serve a risen savior.
reply by the author on 24-May-2018
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Good poem with a good picture. Yes the fragments to float away as time goes by. I suddenly went from doing it all to doing nothing when they found I had bone cancer some two years ago. I still have hope because I serve a risen savior.
Comment Written 18-May-2018
reply by the author on 24-May-2018
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I...hope you live on. Of course, you will regardless, in your loved ones. I, also, have had a couple, of very intense experiences, that lead me to the inevitable conclusion, that eternity exists. And...I felt nothing but love, from the ???
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Thank you.
Comment from kiwijenny
Of course you will. I liked that ending. And this relates to life so well. I am getting older. My husband had a knee replaced on Monday. It was not so much a chipping away but a Dewalt assault sawing . Sometimes a fragment felt it fall says it all.
reply by the author on 24-May-2018
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Of course you will. I liked that ending. And this relates to life so well. I am getting older. My husband had a knee replaced on Monday. It was not so much a chipping away but a Dewalt assault sawing . Sometimes a fragment felt it fall says it all.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 24-May-2018
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Ha ha. No, I am not laughing at U. But you describe things efficasciously
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, As Imprint Fades, seems to recognize the slow death of lineage, self, individualism to be replaced by zero culture, materialism, and Mr. Roboto.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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This poem, As Imprint Fades, seems to recognize the slow death of lineage, self, individualism to be replaced by zero culture, materialism, and Mr. Roboto.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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That...is an interesting take. And...when I think about it, is at the heart of what I am saying, although mixed with mortality's fragile frame. Doug
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By the way, ur quote on ur profile page...takes many years and some introspection to realize. I am impressed. (for what it's worth) lol
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We can thank Emerson for the quote.
Comment from Liberty Justice
Seems you are taking steps towards some goal, and trying not to fall. Your voices are strong and announcing that you don't plan to fail and you will continue to climb ever upward until you reach that special place. NICE WRITE. liberty justice
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Seems you are taking steps towards some goal, and trying not to fall. Your voices are strong and announcing that you don't plan to fail and you will continue to climb ever upward until you reach that special place. NICE WRITE. liberty justice
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from HaleyBel
Very clever use of words, it reminds me of Dr Seuss. (If I have spelt it correctly.)
Age comes to us all. I liked the last verse and stanza the best.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Very clever use of words, it reminds me of Dr Seuss. (If I have spelt it correctly.)
Age comes to us all. I liked the last verse and stanza the best.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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A referral to Dr. Seuss should, by any standard, be humbly accepted. Thank you.
Comment from writerjen
Cleverly written poem about getting older( I think?). Good descriptive language and imagery in this poem. Interesting to think about life falling away in fragments, by bits and pieces. That's probably accurate, I saw that happen with my elderly parents. Congrats on the All Time Best Award.
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Cleverly written poem about getting older( I think?). Good descriptive language and imagery in this poem. Interesting to think about life falling away in fragments, by bits and pieces. That's probably accurate, I saw that happen with my elderly parents. Congrats on the All Time Best Award.
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Thank you. Yes, about getting older. But somehow about everything else also. I think. lol
Comment from rspoet
There is a certain slipping away
the slow decay, almost imperceptible
but constant, like erosion, or rust
Aging claims days, hours, seconds
they fall away, like memory and mass
And if your sight remains,
You'll watch the fragments float away
Of course you w...
RS
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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There is a certain slipping away
the slow decay, almost imperceptible
but constant, like erosion, or rust
Aging claims days, hours, seconds
they fall away, like memory and mass
And if your sight remains,
You'll watch the fragments float away
Of course you w...
RS
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 29-May-2018
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Now that review, take...is, I think (lol) what I was trying to convey-exactly. Thank you.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Good job Victor with your poem. Your message comes through loud & clear. I like the shorter length lines as they quicken the pace just like that of how fast life seems to be moving. Thanks for sharing. Jan
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Good job Victor with your poem. Your message comes through loud & clear. I like the shorter length lines as they quicken the pace just like that of how fast life seems to be moving. Thanks for sharing. Jan
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Thank you, Jan.
Comment from karenina
Very good. Fine free verse. Day by day we trudge forward, scrambling for meaning and scavenging for joy...piece by piece our time unravels and we are left to carry on...
Karenina
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Very good. Fine free verse. Day by day we trudge forward, scrambling for meaning and scavenging for joy...piece by piece our time unravels and we are left to carry on...
Karenina
Comment Written 17-May-2018
reply by the author on 17-May-2018
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Pretty much correct my dear, thank you.
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Glad I was somewhere on the right wave length!
