Life As It Is Lived
Four line poem:41 total reviews
Comment from Swampfox1
Very nicely written poem, I like the photo that goes with the poem, both go well together. I like the poem, how it flows, and the message that conveys similar to a wisp of steam. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Very nicely written poem, I like the photo that goes with the poem, both go well together. I like the poem, how it flows, and the message that conveys similar to a wisp of steam. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
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You're very welcome
Comment from Kerry Foley Robinson
Oh, yes, life is certainly fleeting every moment, like "dandelion fluff" I like that, nice analogy. This is a pretty four-line poem, my friend, nicely done. Good luck.
~Kerry
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Oh, yes, life is certainly fleeting every moment, like "dandelion fluff" I like that, nice analogy. This is a pretty four-line poem, my friend, nicely done. Good luck.
~Kerry
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Hello Kerry!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
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You're welcome, sorry for the late reply.
Comment from Joy Graham
HI there,
This is a lovely poem and picture that will remind many members of our Brooke aka adewpearl. The dandelion seeds were like her trademark. I love that you have a glitter picture. It makes the picture come to life.
You have all the syllables as required per line. I was once told by a well known and talented poet that the apostrophe words don't look right. So I tend to do that sparingly. He could have been talking about a sonnet so maybe yours is a more relaxed poetry form that it works.
Best wishes in the contest. You have a beautiful entry.
Joy xx
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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HI there,
This is a lovely poem and picture that will remind many members of our Brooke aka adewpearl. The dandelion seeds were like her trademark. I love that you have a glitter picture. It makes the picture come to life.
You have all the syllables as required per line. I was once told by a well known and talented poet that the apostrophe words don't look right. So I tend to do that sparingly. He could have been talking about a sonnet so maybe yours is a more relaxed poetry form that it works.
Best wishes in the contest. You have a beautiful entry.
Joy xx
Comment Written 16-May-2018
reply by the author on 16-May-2018
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Hello Joy!
So pleased you enjoyed!
The elision has been employed for hundreds of years...Gray, Wordsworth, Dickens, Poe, Shakespeare... Of course, these poets are long gone, but it truly is a poetic device! :)
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the Four Line Poem writing pompt.
Your short verse has a good story.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the Four Line Poem writing pompt.
Your short verse has a good story.
Well done and good luck to you with this one in the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 19-May-2018
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Hello Sharon!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Spitfire
How true. We are what we choose to remember-- the milestones, big moments. Everyday routine is fluff indeed.
Good use of alliteration with F and D sounds. Assonance with dandelion and landscape.
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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How true. We are what we choose to remember-- the milestones, big moments. Everyday routine is fluff indeed.
Good use of alliteration with F and D sounds. Assonance with dandelion and landscape.
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hello Spitfire!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from R. Elaine
Life ever defined by memorys landscape...good choice of wording and the images it conjures up is wonderful. Thank you for sharing this piece, and good luck in the contest. Best wishes-R. Elaine
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Life ever defined by memorys landscape...good choice of wording and the images it conjures up is wonderful. Thank you for sharing this piece, and good luck in the contest. Best wishes-R. Elaine
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hello R Elaine!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from June Sargent
Just four lines. Yet such profound words. Life is fleeting. And if not carefully preserved in our hearts and minds as precious memories, our impressions can be blown away by the wind, like dandelion fluff. Well done. Should be a winner.
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Just four lines. Yet such profound words. Life is fleeting. And if not carefully preserved in our hearts and minds as precious memories, our impressions can be blown away by the wind, like dandelion fluff. Well done. Should be a winner.
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hello June!
So pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Diane, this is a well written four liner with perfect syllable count. Your words are good, the analogy with talking about the passing of time in lines 1-3, and I particularly like line four. good use of metaphor expressing our path through life as we remember it. Are out memories always accurate? Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hi Diane, this is a well written four liner with perfect syllable count. Your words are good, the analogy with talking about the passing of time in lines 1-3, and I particularly like line four. good use of metaphor expressing our path through life as we remember it. Are out memories always accurate? Good luck in the contest. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hello Dorothy!
So very pleased you enjoyed!
Thank you!
diane
Comment from William Ross
Yeah I like this specially the use of dandelion fluff as it is used. Great job and thought. Good luck and have a wonderful day.
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Yeah I like this specially the use of dandelion fluff as it is used. Great job and thought. Good luck and have a wonderful day.
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hello William!
Thank you ever so much!
diane
Comment from The Death
Love the imagery you present! The comparison of life to that of a dandelion fluff is highly effective. Nice use of F alliteration. Lovely presentation of your work as well. Good luck!
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Love the imagery you present! The comparison of life to that of a dandelion fluff is highly effective. Nice use of F alliteration. Lovely presentation of your work as well. Good luck!
Comment Written 15-May-2018
reply by the author on 20-May-2018
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Hello Friend!
So pleased you enjoyed!
diane
