Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

This poem directed toward humanity, who are a mass of individual cogs, working (some harder than others) toward destruction for the sake of money, picky food, and convenience.

Sometimes I think we can do so much better. Then I take a look around and doubt it. This poem has the tinges of frustration and sadness that come with that looking around.

Strong theme and use of the word of the day, with taking mainour and reminding the reader that as a whole, the children will be hurting for it.

 Comment Written 14-May-2018

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reply by the author on 14-May-2018

Thanks very much, Turtle. I guess we can only hope that maybe the likes of your little one will be able to undo some of the mess we've created. Let's hope it's not too late, but it's a big ask. Cheers, Craig

Comment from BeasPeas

Excellent

Hi Craig. You are finding some interesting and pertinent words in your gift book. So true that we are shortchanging our kids by misbehaving and not being good stewards of our earth. We can't say it often enough. Great job. Marilyn

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

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reply by the author on 10-May-2018

Thanks very much, Marilyn. I appreciate the kind comments :) Craig

Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Wow, I love the new word, Craig, but even more, your fabulous use of it - this poem ROCKS!!!!!!! Once again, I am out of sixes (*sad face*). WHY can't we have more? I know you say it matters not to you, but IT DOES - they determine whether or not the work goes to that front page, and there, it will receive more reviews, which is always a good thing.
So I AM sorry I am out of those pesky sixes again.
Now I am going for a nap with Prissy. I'm sure I will be in a better frame of mind when I wake up.(lol)
Here - *********************************!!!

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

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reply by the author on 10-May-2018

Hope you had a nice nap, and are feeling refreshed :)

Thanks for the very kind words, Dawn. Those are always much appreciated.

Craig

Comment from Scarbrems

Excellent

Excellent post, with a message I can't fail to agree with. Another great word; how big IS this book you got for Christmas, anyway?

Having said that, the most powerful word here is, 'reviled'. That word has teeth, and is deservedly placed at the end of this stern admonition. The whole thing makes me think of 'the day the earth stood still', and should be read in a deep voice into an echo-resonator, or some such voice -modulating device. Personally, I can hear Patrick Stewart doing it.

A great piece of work.

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

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reply by the author on 10-May-2018

It's a year book, which means [sigh] 365 poems to write. I'm not even close to half way. Patrick would work, or how about James Earl Jones? The Day the Earth Stood Still is one of my favorite movies - the original, with Michael Rennie, not so much the remake with Keanu - although that wasn't terrible.

Many thanks for the very kind words, Emma.

reply by Scarbrems on 11-May-2018

There was a remake? Well, I never knew that.

Comment from strandregs

Exceptional

Hi Craig
Couldn't agree with you more.
and I think it is coming in an inverse balistic curve,
right between the eyes.
all these presumed futuristic movies about multi national
companies running everyones lives are the horrific truth coming
truer every day.
and destroying the earth as they do so.
whose listening ? no one.
humankind are sheep walking off a cliff. the stupidiest species on earth.
isn't that ironical?
:-))Z.

 Comment Written 10-May-2018

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reply by the author on 10-May-2018

Thanks so much, Z, for the wonderful review. I could not put it any better, than your last two lines. I just posted something I read this evening to my profile - you might find it amusing :) Thanks again, Craig

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Well I think humanity has really gone down the wrong path too, the greed and avarice just truly astonishing. The justifications and excuses mind-boggling.

This is a superb poem, Craig. And I hope you write a lot more in this same vein.

Excellent metre and rhyme and sentiment.

Gloria

 Comment Written 09-May-2018

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reply by the author on 09-May-2018

Thanks so much for the lovely review, Gloria. It's not a new theme for me, so odds are... LOL

Comment from ciliverde

Excellent

They certainly won't thank us! Well not me personally, I never had any kids, just dogs. You've made good use of the word mainour, which I had not heard of before. It is a terrible disgrace what human kind is doing to the planet. We will for sure go extinct eventually. I hope the Earth can survive our efforts - I have a feeling she can, once we've been gone awhile.
Carol

 Comment Written 09-May-2018

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reply by the author on 09-May-2018

Dogs are better value, and I have both LOL

I suspect you are right on all counts, Carol - many thanks :)

Craig

Comment from Mustang Patty

Excellent

Hi, Craig;
Great use of the word, 'mainour,' as it is our children's birthright we steal each and every time we plunder resources. I like how you incorporated it into this rhyme; it felt very natural.

Thanks for sharing,

~patty~

 Comment Written 09-May-2018

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reply by the author on 09-May-2018

Thanks very much for the kind review, Patty. I really appreciate the positive feedback. Cheers, Craig

Comment from rama devi

Exceptional

Outstanding. Climate change is worst crisis ever to be faced by humanity and too many deny it is even happening! This poem is a great wake up call.

Excellent flow, rhythm and rhyming. Excellent imagery, tone and tenor. Excellent poetic devices and phonetics. Excellent punctuation choices. Just one suggestion:



this planet endlessly, and to their shame(,)
then raze the forests, rendering homeless

or


this planet endlessly, and (to their shame)
then raze the forests, rendering homeless

The poem is powerful, effective and important! Clever rhyming too...impressive!


Warmly, rd

 Comment Written 09-May-2018

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reply by the author on 09-May-2018

Hi RD,

Many thanks for the wonderful review, and I'm honoured by the lovely gift of a six-star rating. Also, I've added the extra comma, as you suggested.

Much appreciation,
Craig

reply by rama devi on 09-May-2018

Mutual appreciation! Yay! Thanks! :-)))))

Comment from Joy Graham

Excellent

You amazed me with yet another new and interesting word from your book.

These lines made me stand up and listen:

- "the Earth is forced to implement a care"

- "humanity will be the first to go"

So you're predicting something alone the lines of Noah's Ark to cleanse the world of the bad germs? I think you could be right.

Joy xx

 Comment Written 09-May-2018

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reply by the author on 09-May-2018

Thanks very much for your fine review, Joy. Much appreciated - Craig