Granny Moon
The day the creek disappeared.9 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
She was fine as long as she could get the boys to do her light work for her. She was a sly ole fox she was! There was no way she was leaving her mountains or still and her boys seeing she got her water back would solve all their problems!
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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She was fine as long as she could get the boys to do her light work for her. She was a sly ole fox she was! There was no way she was leaving her mountains or still and her boys seeing she got her water back would solve all their problems!
Comment Written 07-Jun-2018
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2018
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Thanks so much for the great review.
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Liked the picture. Grannie from Beverly Hillbillies. Enjoyed the ending. All three sons taking grandma to dinner. Good family values displayed in this well crafted story.
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Liked the picture. Grannie from Beverly Hillbillies. Enjoyed the ending. All three sons taking grandma to dinner. Good family values displayed in this well crafted story.
Comment Written 12-May-2018
reply by the author on 12-May-2018
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Thanks so much! I appreciate your comments!
Comment from nartoonla
Ah, not only did the photo bring me back home but the way you wrote it and the story itself. I felt myself entering the storybook and enjoyed it very much. It was a once upon a time old timer story. Brilliant.
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Ah, not only did the photo bring me back home but the way you wrote it and the story itself. I felt myself entering the storybook and enjoyed it very much. It was a once upon a time old timer story. Brilliant.
Comment Written 09-May-2018
reply by the author on 09-May-2018
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Thank you for the great comments and review. I appreciate it!
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! Such a clever take on the contest! I like how you created this character (and I recognize the picture of another famous granny). Seems like Granny Moon and all her boys are quite smart and know how to put things.
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Lol! Such a clever take on the contest! I like how you created this character (and I recognize the picture of another famous granny). Seems like Granny Moon and all her boys are quite smart and know how to put things.
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thanks so much lyenochka!! It?s really appreciated!
Comment from Katya
Oh, this is a marvelous story. I really enjoyed "meeting" this cantankerous old woman, and her three sons. What happens when a rural area gets gentrified is often pretty hard on the locals.
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Oh, this is a marvelous story. I really enjoyed "meeting" this cantankerous old woman, and her three sons. What happens when a rural area gets gentrified is often pretty hard on the locals.
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thanks so much Katya!
Comment from Phillip C Kuhn
The reader enjoyed so many parts and aspects of this little story, I feel like the author captured the scenery well and the characters were well written, good job.
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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The reader enjoyed so many parts and aspects of this little story, I feel like the author captured the scenery well and the characters were well written, good job.
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thanks so much!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I really enjoyed this piece and you incorporated the required theme into it very well indeed. It's organic and doesn't feel like a quickly forced feel. very nice.
A few bits 'n' pieces I noted on reading through-
She had made shine for nigh on to fifty years - you could drop 'to' from here.
Lord, what can be wrong. - maybe a question mark in here.
To be onest, you could drop a lot of the speech tags off. they aren't always necessary and when there's only two people speaking, it's obvious who's saying what so they are a bit superfluous.
Nice reveal about the boys being in the sheriff's department, and a judge and their mum an 'outlaw'. lol
"Hello boys", Granny said - punctuation inside.
why its been there since before you were born - it's.
Earl said "Now, let's not be hasty / Calvin said "If we need to hire / Delbert chimed in with "I'll visit - all of these should have commas after the tags. before the dialogue kicks in.
All the best
GMG
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Hi there,
I really enjoyed this piece and you incorporated the required theme into it very well indeed. It's organic and doesn't feel like a quickly forced feel. very nice.
A few bits 'n' pieces I noted on reading through-
She had made shine for nigh on to fifty years - you could drop 'to' from here.
Lord, what can be wrong. - maybe a question mark in here.
To be onest, you could drop a lot of the speech tags off. they aren't always necessary and when there's only two people speaking, it's obvious who's saying what so they are a bit superfluous.
Nice reveal about the boys being in the sheriff's department, and a judge and their mum an 'outlaw'. lol
"Hello boys", Granny said - punctuation inside.
why its been there since before you were born - it's.
Earl said "Now, let's not be hasty / Calvin said "If we need to hire / Delbert chimed in with "I'll visit - all of these should have commas after the tags. before the dialogue kicks in.
All the best
GMG
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thank you.
Comment from Sharon Haiste
I think this is a good entry for the A Disappearance writing prompt.
Your short short story about a clever Granny Moon is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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I think this is a good entry for the A Disappearance writing prompt.
Your short short story about a clever Granny Moon is well told.
Well done and good luck to you with the competition.
Sharon
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thank you Sharon.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Interesting little story. Granny has a way to get her boys to help her. They will do anything, legal or not, to keep her out of their own homes. The very idea of her closing the still is ridiculous, and they must know it, but they play along with her game. :)
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Interesting little story. Granny has a way to get her boys to help her. They will do anything, legal or not, to keep her out of their own homes. The very idea of her closing the still is ridiculous, and they must know it, but they play along with her game. :)
Comment Written 08-May-2018
reply by the author on 08-May-2018
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Thanks so much for the good review.
